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Old October 4th, 2012 (09:37 AM).
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IceFyr1928
Is now DeathofShadows
 
Join Date: Aug 2012
Location: Upper Canterlot, Equestria
Gender: Male
Nature: Calm
Okay, there are a few problems here. First of all, you need to put a journey into pre-Plasma Unova, and then have him trapped there. If his intention is to join plasma, the you need to explain that in more detail. Pretty much, add more to the history section. And fix your grammar. "He is a the fool?" I don't think that you're Italian...
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