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Old November 23rd, 2012 (02:05 PM).
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Quote originally posted by chaoticlapras:
...what word do you suggest?
Maybe an interjectory phrase like "no wait, that's an understatement" would work. If you just want to change the word, then it would be like "OK, that's an understatement..." Also, I think either commas or dashes around the phrase would read a bit better. Ellipses give the impression that the narrator is trailing off, but the words themselves interject in the middle of the sentence, so it would be:
Quote originally posted by correction with dashes:
Using some of my charcoal, I cooked some pork, and munched silently away throughout the night, slightly - OK, that's an understatement - trembling because of the freaky noises outside...
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