Thread: Scars and Cuts
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Old December 1st, 2012 (11:21 AM).
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Really great storytelling. Powerful stuff.

One thing I noticed, however, was a sizable amount of redundancy. It happens to us at times when we try to fill out a story, but it disinterests the reader when they're basically reading the same thing over and over. To add, you misspelled 'fudging' but I know it's just a substitute for another word, so I wasn't really bothered by that. Just pointing it out is all.
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