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Old December 3rd, 2012, 03:38 AM
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Aques Keus
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Join Date: Aug 2012
Location: The Cave of Hymns
Age: 18
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Originally Posted by AlexOzzyCake View Post

@Khawill - Love the SU! Only thing I would ask is for slightly more detail in the history - you never really explained why she thought about joining the family, why Luca accepted her, what she was actually doing in the mansion, what made Nova agree to contract her, how she reacted to her abilities, her life within the family so far... Adding another paragraph and editing the previous one would most likely be enough to cover all of this and it'll be accepted
K, give me a few bits and I'll see what I can do. Also am I correct in assuming by a "family" this is a type of gang? Or is it a literal family?
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