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Old December 15th, 2012 (11:54 PM). Edited December 16th, 2012 by curiousnathan.
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Unfortunately Aquatarius, I'm not really liking how your posts are turning out. The writing is good, it is just that I'm finding that your character is becoming too much like a Gary Stu. Firstly, Sneasel shouldn't be telepathic. I didn't mention any pokemon had such abilities. This is just like a normal Pokemon journey, Pokemon can't speak english. The only thing different to the typical Pokemon Journey is the storyline. Secondly, I don't recall you entering a SU for Joshua. If you're going to roleplay as them, you'll need to submit another SU. If they're a minor character, meaning very minor then no SU is required. But because Joshua seems to be one of the major characters your centering your posts around, he'll need an SU of his own.
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