Giovanni Destroys the World and Everything in It (comedy one-shot)
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December 21st, 2012 (10:37 PM).
Central Coast - Australia
Again, enjoyed this very much and awesome you got to writing this even if it’s three years in the making.
Better late than never I suppose! XD
It was certainly entertaining, no doubt about that. Full of amusing parts and the concept itself was pretty good too. I did see that Giovanni-as-Santa was coming but it was delievered well. Santa sure was a menacingly cheerful (or a cheerfully menancing?) character on top of that.
I liked the interactions between the Rocket grunts the most, I think. They were the parts I found funniest, although the ending was a good way to conclude the tale. Santa as well had his moments in the dark humour he had. Ho ho ho. I felt that the beginning took a little bit to get going in terms of the humour; maybe just a bit slow or focus on the setup of the story first for my liking given how it then continued (not that the beginning wasn't well written, mind; just a bit too much one way). I also thought that TR's plan of destorying the world was a bit at odds with their usual controlling-the-world aims, but that's more minor given the story itself.
It was the finally the twenty fourth of December.
Drop the first 'the'.
What he was instructed to do reviled him to the very core of his being[QU
OTE]I'm not too sure 'reviled' him sounds right even if it has the right meaning as-is... maybe it's just not a term often used here though. Can't say I have seen it used in this way much.
And so, Christmastime was thereafter rather different in Viridian City.
I think 'Christmas time' as two words is better.
All in all another fine read. =)
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