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Old February 5th, 2013 (5:05 PM).
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Children of Fate
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Join Date: Sep 2010
Location: Ylisse
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Nature: Jolly
Posts: 5,727
Alrighty, Fenne-Kun (Or whatever your real name is >3>;), I've already given you my general feedback on FB, lol, but now I shall say something again! Since now I'm kind of comparing the themes.

Out of them all, I think City of Tranquility is probably my favorite (and you haven't even posted it here yet, lol), followed by City of Souls. I'm not the greatest critic at the moment, so I'll leave it at that, lol. Love them all, of course! xD

@Jake - Pretty good! But I must say, with a few parts of it, your voice sounds a bit . . . nasally. Other than that, it's good. You're certainly a better singer than I, lol. (Plus, I'm a Bass and I . . . can't really sing anything, to put it bluntly, lol. xD)
A burdened heart sinks into the ground
A veil falls away without a sound
Not day nor night, wrong nor right
For truth and peace you fight
Sing with me a song of silence and blood
The rain falls, but can't wash away the mud
Within my ancient heart dwells madness and pride
Can no one hear my cry

Embrace the dark you call a home,
Gaze upon an empty, white throne
A legacy of lies,
A familiar disguise
Sing with me a song of conquest and fate
The black pillar cracks beneath its weight
Night breaks through the day, hard as a stone
Lost in thoughts all alone
In the white light, a hand reaches through
A double-edged blade cuts your heart in two
Waking dreams fade away,
Embrace the brand-new day
Sing with me a song of birthrights and love
The light scatters to the sky above
Dawn breaks through the gloom, white as a bone
Lost in thoughts all alone

In endless dreams, countless realms collide
Hope falls only to rise like the changing tide
But all dreams come to an end,
Just whispers on the wind
Sing with me one last time, for light's sacrifice,
Endless dawn came but not without a price,
Lost in the waves there glimmers, a pale blue stone.
I think of you, all alone