Undercover in Unova- Pokeshipping
View Single Post
February 6th, 2013 (09:21 AM).
Join Date: Mar 2009
Haven't read the story fully yet and neither am I a PokéShipper, but this story is pretty good. You captured Misty's personality perfectly. Ash is a little OOC, but he is in every ship story around him, because he is as dense as a brick.
Just a couple of little things.
It's Trip, not Tripp
You don't have to mention you POV's if you stay in 3rd perspective. Just a paragraph change usually is enough.
I like your battles and Misty's unfamiliarity with Unova. Keep up the good work.
View Public Profile
Send a private message to bigtukker
Find all posts by bigtukker
Find threads started by bigtukker
Ignore Posts by bigtukker