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Old May 21st, 2013, 08:17 AM
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Nate
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Join Date: Jan 2013
Location: North East England
Gender: Male
Nature: Timid
Okay let me rephrase whatTornZero just said in a nice way

Basically, you need to lentghen your personality and ero about the name, it's creative, what if his mum wanted to call him that. Would you diss someonje because of their name. The only other things is the main idea of your charector hating children and stuff, basically, it's not very good.. Try something like your father was killed by a swarm of children, so had to live with his mum who he hated or something like that, and doesn't like kids, so he trys to act like an adult. It would make more sence than wanting to bring them together again... Don't try and be the hero, it makes it boring.