Thread: [Pokémon] Pokémon: Ashes to Ashes
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Old June 4th, 2013 (8:18 AM).
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So far, nothing wrong with the story. It's a cookie-cutter retelling of the Second Gen story with some pretty realistic dialogue here and there.

A few missing commas and some sentence structures are shaky, but nothing's gone wrong with the story for the most part.

Keep it up.
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