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Old July 1st, 2013, 09:56 PM
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With figuring out what can happen next, perhaps try the second post of the Plot Bunny Thread sticky. What's written there offers some advice on plotting out your story. Consider also how character may react to events, as that can help you continue with the plot. 'Okay, so my character might do this, which'll mean that that would happen, so...'

With writing good characters, there's a few aspects to it. There's physical appearance for one - knowing if the character is big or small, maybe some distinguishing features about them, and so forth, can help the reader visualise them better as they are reading. But another important - if not more so at times - point is personality - what the person is like. How they'd act to various events, how they act, and so forth. That's an important thing to build up.

However with those details it's important not to tell the reader facts, but rather show them that. For one, it's usually more enjoyable to read the latter, and two it can help the reader imagine how the character acts. Taking this line for a moment:
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His mother, being deathly afraid of Pokemon, shouted, “GET OUT! LEAVE THIS HOUSE WITH THAT HIDEOUS THING!” Adraer, very scared, ran away, to ____ Town.
You do a bit of showing in here - the fact the mother shouts in all caps and Adraer chooses to run away is showing, but otherwise the majority of this is telling. You state that the mother is deathly afraid of Pokemon, and that Adraer was 'very scared'. Better ways to convey that information is to describe what these character do, which can allude the reader to those facts.

If the mother is scared for instance, what does she do (besides shout loudly)? She could for instance turn pale, or stumble back the moment she sees the Pokemon. As for the boy, there's a lot of ways to indicate if someone is scared or not. Hunched posture, or shrinking away from what they are scared of, sweating/gulping/breathing differently, and so forth.

So in a way, characterisation has some things to do with description, because the latter can help give the reader a better sense about the former. That's not all there is to it too, such as if the characterisation of the character is consistent, and how that matches (or doesn't match!) the plot, and if the character changes during the story (ie character development). If Johnny goes on an adventure and remains the same at the end of it all, then that's not often going to appear realistic or interesting.
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