Thread: [Dead] Pokemon Zero & One
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Old July 26th, 2013, 01:27 PM
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Screens are indeed very nice! However, there are quite some grammar hiccups...

First screen: Coming is spelled with just one m.
Second screen: It should be "I'm sorry, but"
Fifth screen: shouldn't it be "choose between three", rather than "among three"?
sixth screen: You forgot to place another comma after "Wait"

You should be careful with the things you publish, after I found two spelling mistakes I spend more time looking for other grammatical errors than actually paying attention to the screens.

Anyway, keep up the good work, as this looks more than promising! =)
-Arma
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