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Old August 21st, 2013, 03:18 PM
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The set-up you've got here is really aesthetically pleasing and easy to read, which adds a lot of quality to your guide. The Beemo cursor is a nice touch haha, and your excessive use of 'radical' brings that signature Adventure Time 'comical' feel into play. On top of that, your way of explaining things are light-hearted and easy to understand, so great job there. I picked up a few minor mistakes, but they can be fixed easily.

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so Finn let's him tag along in his backpack
which help increase theses stats.
Obvious fixes here, just typos.
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and also has a screen to show you Finn and Jake's stats/abilities, and a Map Screen (it hasn't been activated yet)
To make the sentence flow better, take out the first 'and' as well as 'also'.

Other than that, I like what you've done so far and I'm always a fan of anything Adventure Time. Keep at it ;]
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