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Acrutheo

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Thanks for the comments, bobandbill. ^_^

bobandbill said:
Although I wasn't certain that he would, it immediantely told me there was a good possibility of such a thing happening. And it did, but the instance of it happening was still sudden and well done. A bit given away beforehand - but then again, a good knowledge of martial arts helps one to recongize such things...

You picked it up. :D I like to leave hints in my story. Originally, I said something about him shuffling back, but changed it and decided to see if anyone would notice. I've dropped a few other subtle hints throughout both this chapter and the prologue as well. ;D (And a few red herrings)

bobandbill said:
Sounds just a bit hasty, the second part - maybe 'nor did they even appear in public'.

Good point. I'll edit this.

bobandbill said:
Erm, not enitrely sure, but pretty sure that the first word after the quotation mark should be capitalised (and there another sentence after this as well). Might need some clarification.... somewhat debatable but leaning towards the capitalisation.

Really? In my experience it would start with a non-capitalised letter. o.o;

bobandbill said:
'Dogi' didn't quite work for me... meh. Does seem a tad unnesserary though.

I actually quite liked it: it gave a good mix of drab same-colour and sense of fighting. Why didn't you like it?
 

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Really? In my experience it would start with a non-capitalised letter. o.o;
Yeah... I recall seeing both used before, and for the life of me can't recall which is the 'right' one, or if they are both right...
I actually quite liked it: it gave a good mix of drab same-colour and sense of fighting. Why didn't you like it?
Meh, just doesn't quite fit in - I don't really think that a dogi (which is a sort of 'gi', or uniform for martial arts generall) really quite suits the uniform for guards, and considering the Pokemon world. This one is changed though, and it is more an 'opinion' thing.
EDIT: Saw sig - Beta reader? Am interested...
 

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I see what you mean, now. It's just a misunderstanding; that's the uniform for cadets, not the qualified Guards; the cadets don't get full uniform yet. Here's the description of the qualified Guard uniform:

Me (in chapter one) said:
They were in full Guard uniform: a dark metal armour with their faces masked behind thinly-spaced flexible metal rods running horizontally past their faces.
 
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I agree with bobandbill. The Dogi uniform doesn't do much for me. If it's a temporary thing, it's fine but it just seems out of place in pokemon. It's hard to imagine a pokemon trainer wearing a gi with a pokeball belt.
 

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Yeah, it's definitely just a temporary thing; qualified Guard uniform is too expensive for Cadets, and still leaves them exposed to attacks from qualified Guards. Should I make this more obvious?
 
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Yeah, it's definitely just a temporary thing; qualified Guard uniform is too expensive for Cadets, and still leaves them exposed to attacks from qualified Guards. Should I make this more obvious?

I think you should clarify this, so that readers don't get confused(if any would)but I think it would be a good idea.
 

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I've added an explanatory paragraph about why he receives such a uniform as a cadet, directly after the paragraph where his uniform is mentioned.

EDIT: w00t, over three hundred views. :D Thanks to all my readers and reviewers; I appreciate your interest. ^___^
 
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His uniform was temporary; as soon as he qualified to become a guard, he would receive an intimidating armour that would drown passing citizens in fear. But for now, this monotone uniform was to instill a sense of conformity within him, and the easiness of penetration was to allow the qualified Guards' strikes to him to cause maximum pain. All in all, it was to remind him that he wasn't a Guard yet; still a lowly Citizen.

All right that makes more sense now. This paragraph also adds to the doom-feel of the fic, giving the reader an idea of how terrible Hoenn's riegn is.

I'm looking forward to the rest - keep at it!! :)
 

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This is really interesting. At first I was a bit put-off by the title (although in hindsight I'm not exactly sure why... Maybe I thought it sounded slightly cliche? Which it's not), but now I can't wait for what happens next.

For that non-capitalised and capitalised thing, I thing that if it's the first time they speak in the sentence, then it's capitalised and if it's the second time in the same sentence, it's not... I'll give you an example because my explanations are usually very confusing.

Capitalised:
"She gasped as blood welled from the cut on her hand, exclaiming, 'Ouch, that hurts.'"

Not capitalised:
"'Ouch,' She gasped as blood welled from the cut on her hand before exclaiming; 'that hurts.'"

At least, I think that's the difference. It's what I do, at any rate.
 

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I've looked it up, and Wikipedia seems to agree with Sweet_Dreams and bobandbill. So, I'll correct those problems. xD;

And thanks to Mewtwo42 and Sweet_Dreams for the compliments. Sweet_Dreams, yeah, the title is a bit bland. I fully expect to change it by the end of the time I've finished my fic, but for now, I think that, since the Empire is such an important part of the fic, that is the best title to represent it so far.

Titles are always something that I like to do last. :P
 

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Firstly, I would like to thank bobandbill for BETAing this chapter, which was a really useful report. ^_^

Chapter Two: Blackmail

First class of the day.

Amply spaced across a large training room, a hundred students eagerly stood. Quite typically, four black marble walls imposed themselves on the room, but the floors were covered in blood red sponge mats, with the colours unevenly distributed. Was it possible that the mats were once not this colour?

Despite this possibility hanging over the cadets, almost all of them looked excited in their own way; some had arrogant smiles, others nervously looked around the room. A short, bruised girl by the name of Kayla Oxford, on the other hand, had her own way of showing her determination.

Glaring into the back of the head of her assaulter.

One of the Guards had inquired about her bruise earlier, without sympathy in his voice; merely the sadistic desire to punish the offender. Kayla had replied that she tripped and fell, to which the Guard chuckled unkindly, calling her an idiot. Many male cadets had approached this attractive girl and offered to defend her honour by breaking a few of Watson's bones. She declined fiercely; she wasn't about to become the damsel in distress who needed saving.

One foolish cadet didn't want to take no for an answer. Watson, being quite powerful, had this future Guard pinned against the wall, immobile, in seconds. So, the class resorted to the tactics of ostracisation, which Watson was all too familiar with.

"Settle down," commanded an entering voice.

A gruff, muscular man with a mane of greying black hair entered the room. He was a fully qualified guard, yet wore a black dogi, to associate himself with his students. His dark brown eyes flared with a deep loathing at the cadets; they were still, after all, Citizens. Watson wasn't sure whether he'd look more intimidating with the Guard's armor on or off.

He strutted powerfully towards the front of the class, and issued another order, "Release your pokémon."

The opening of master balls sounded and a hundred houndour emerged, all looking fierce, ready to battle. One houndour in particular seemed more bloodthirsty than the rest. Watson's houndour, Amicus, after witnessing the events of the previous night, seemed to have a newfound respect for his trainer; Watson had established himself as the alpha male between the two. Watson had always sought loyalty from pokémon, but he couldn't help but wonder if his wish had been ill-received.

"And this, cadets, is what you're aiming for," gloated the instructor, releasing from his master ball a houndoom. It had a fierce hatred in its eyes that matched its master's, with demonic horns protruding from its head; a symbol of power. It was significantly larger than the houndour, yet still possessed the intimidating black fur, vicious teeth, and a vaguely exoskeletal protrusions.

The ultimate predator.

The two hundred beings in the class gazed in wonder at this magnificent creature, knowing what the reward would be should they succeed. The fantasy of the houndour had passed; they were now mere puppies; weapons for the weak.

"Now, everyone get a partner and prepare to faint, and faint only. If you kill the opponent's houndour, you'll be sent to Mt. Ember for vandalism of Empire property," sneered their teacher, revealing his yellow teeth.

Mt. Ember prison. The most feared place in the Hoenn region. Every criminal, regardless of the level of their crime, would be sent to this gargantuan complex. The conditions were terrible: the fierce climate, the most sadistic Guards in the region, and, most horribly of all, complete isolation from friends and family. Nobody was entirely sure what was there, but silent rumours of torture chambers had been passed around. The Guards made no effort to quash such speculation.

After all, it was they who started them, and not untruthfully.

Kayla moved with swift determination towards Watson, piercing those who would try to steal her prey with her furious eyes. Watson doused her fiery glare with his cold, blue eyes, taunting, "Come back for another one?"

"We'll see who's laughing when I humiliate you in front of everyone."

More social threats. Watson was surprised: she was either very perceptive or incredibly oblivious. He had shown no signs of caring about his recent excommunication from the social hierarchy of the cadets, so why should humiliation harm him? On the other hand, maybe she had detected his secret, insecure need to be seen as powerful by others, to be feared?

"Ready your pokémon! On my mark! Three, two, one, fight!"

"Fortis, launch into his neck!"

Kayla's order was the first in the class, but Watson was quick to respond.

"Amicus, fall to the side!"

Amicus couldn't see what Watson was trying to do, but obeyed him unhesitatingly. Fortis, in its haste, missed the now falling houndour's neck and tripped over its body, flipping halfway into the air and landing on its back.

"Amicus, leer!"

Amicus's eyes became an angry red, locking Fortis in a trance. Fortis could now not hear the desperate, shrill screams of her master; she simply continued to lie on her back. She didn't even hear the attacking order of the enemy trainer: before she knew it, she had been struck by the tough head of Amicus, and had been knocked even further across the room.

Kayla, in a cool shrillness, cried, "Fortis, rip into its leg!"

The female houndour attacked the male one's closest leg, and pulled it across the floor, vigorously shaking its head. Under Watson's orders, Amicus bit back, but the counterattack only served to release, not to cause any damage. The two houndour stood, furious and weak. Fortis was unspeakably tired and hurt from being thrown across the room, and Amicus had a wounded leg.

It was now a battle of endurance: if either went forward to attack, they would collapse in pain, so they stood weakly, panting, eyes locked in fierce contact. It was a magnificent sight: all other houndour in the room had now either one win or one loss. However, these two stood strong against those resting, determined to win.

Fortis faltered.

Amicus leaned forward in anticipation.

Fortis stubbornly regained its stance, growling to show that it was not defeated.

And finally, one fell, utterly defeated. It was obviously the second strongest houndour in the room, but with one loss, it would be considered to be in the bottom half in terms of strength. One of the weak ones. Two cries were released: one gleeful, the other disheartened.

As Watson rushed forward to collect his defeated soldier, he couldn't help but smile at its courage and determination. Despite the loss, he was proud of his pokémon. He was undoubtedly disappointed in himself, yet this emotion was drowned by his pride.


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Six o'clock.

Watson had suffered many taunts that day after his morning loss. This is, of course, despite the fact that Amicus and himself together had won every other battle throughout class that day, and the most prominent jeerers were those who he defeated. Either way, his loss to Kayla now left him, in the eyes of others, weak.

He pondered about how he thought about it. He'd always assume he'd be angry at the pokémon should he lose: after all, it's the pokémon doing the battling, not him. Yet, this did not match his true emotions. He instead felt immensely disappointed in himself, for not reacting quick enough, not predicting his opponent's next move, not maximizing Amicus's potential.

He only felt pride and gratitude for the fearless houndour that had unquestionably obeyed his orders for his master's ends.

Watson lay on his bed with his houndour on his chest, trying to understand his various repetitions of its own name. It was not as he expected: when he tried to learn patterns in their speech, he was unsuccessful. There seemed to be no grammar to their language, at least by his standards. It was when Watson stopped trying to decipher the language, and just listened aimlessly, that he understood.

He chatted with Amicus about battle strategy, sometimes not understanding huge blocks of what his pokémon said, but he didn't care; at least they were communicating.

"When a pokémon charges at you, drop low and attack their leg."

"<With my teeth or claws? Teeth give me the advantage of strength and grip, but … more maneuvering capabilities.>"

"Which do you find easier?"

"<Claws, usually. I often find it hard to retain a grip. However, you need to be my eyes when I'm doing this, and…>"

And so they jabbered, Amicus understanding Watson's speech fluently, while Watson only having a fragmented knowledge of what his houndour was saying. And Watson, for the first time in years, was finding himself to be experiencing a foreign emotion. An emotion that was so odd, yet seemed so obvious and natural.

Happiness.

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Midnight.

A lone palace stood strong against the isolated forest, darkened by the night. It was a fortress, surrounded by Guards and all kinds of vicious, bloodthirsty pokémon circling the black, towering, titanium fence. In day, it was just as gloomy as it was at night: a violent violet, dark and deadly. As one would expect, its fortress exterior has a lavish interior, the most lavish in the entire Empire. For this palace housed a Hood, the most powerful and terrible of all.

The Emperor of Hoenn.

This particular Hood had recently been called into a large room. Its walls were a beautiful crystal blue, and its floor was emerald green. Its only spoiling factor was that it had no windows. No room in the residence of any Hood did.

Two Guards stood, holding a wounded middle-age man between them, each unkindly clutching an arm. He had scraggly, greying brunette hair, and a suit that may once have been nice. Not now, though: it was now covered in dirt and torn in various places. His head sagged down, as he did not want to look into the empty void of that hood. Not again.

The Emperor telepathically induced the emotion of job satisfaction in the Guards' heads. A signal for them to leave.

What he had to say was far too important for them to hear.

The Hood tilted his head to look down at this pathetic figure. This man once had a bright future; a successful career awaiting. Unfortunately for him, he threw it away. He tossed this happy, successful life off a cliff to fulfill one thing. His principles.

Such a pathetic concept.

The pathetic man involuntarily lifted his head – try as he might, he could not resist telekinesis this powerful. His hazel eyes looked into the dark void, fearful, once again. The Emperor began to communicate telepathically.

"[You've caused me a lot of trouble. Your society has been looking for you.]"

The victim enragedly protested, "Society hasn't been looking for me! You have! You and your lackies! How dare you equate the Empire with society? This isn't a society! It's a mass of terrified people living under a shroud of secrecy and oppression, a pain that you inflicted upon them!"

"[Was it me, or was it you?]"

"How was I to know that this would happen!?"

"[You placed those master balls on the black market, Mr. Eckleberry. Surely you expected malicious use?]"

"Not like this. I thought maybe you worked for Team Aqua or Magma, at worst," whispered Eckleberry. He was desperate, even in the face of such a powerful adversary, to maintain his innocence.

A surge of pain was telepathically induced by the Emperor through the former Deputy Head Ball Developer of Devon. A punishment for his naïveity.

Eckleberry rolled on the ground for a few seconds, attempting to regain his sense of existence. Eventually, he spluttered, "Why don't you just kill me?"

"[I have no intention of doing that. But, I did call you here for a reason. I take it you don't recognise the Empire as having the right to rule?]"

Was this some kind of trap, so this villain would have an excuse to psychically induce more pain in him? He chose not to answer.

The Emperor coupled his telepathic message with a sense of mockery. "[If you refuse to answer, I'll answer for you: you don't. You still think the Republic should govern, correct? Well, I recall a Republican law stating that, as a consumer, I have the right not to receive faulty goods.]"

What was the Emperor talking about?

"[And yet, I'm unhappy with these master balls.]"

"What?"

"[They're good, but not perfect. I require a much more powerful product.]"

"The master ball is the most powerful thing possible! There is nothing with it you can't catch," said Eckleberry with a tone of finality.

"[Lies.]"

The poor man, who was still groveling on the ground, received a further jolt of pain. It was truly agonising, as if his entire body had simply became a wound, a giant reservoir for all the physical pain in the world.

"[There are a set of pokémon that it can't catch. The Fabled Ones. The Legendary Pokémon.]"

It suddenly dawned on Bjorn Eckleberry what this man was trying to say. He was horrified: legendary pokémon could quash the rebellion once and for all. He was, of course, far too craven to join the rebellion, but he was a strong sideline supporter of it.

"[Yes, the rebellion will be quashed,]" the Emperor started, examining Bjorn's thoughts. "[However, it will allow me to do something much more.]"

Bjorn's eyes widened fearfully, and he managed to whimper out a single word: "What?"

"[I shan't reveal anything more than I have to.]"

The destruction of the rebellion would be a useful side effect of gaining the Legendary Pokémon, but that wasn't all. He had a far more diabolical plan in his mind, which only the upper echelon of Hoods knew about.

The Hoenn Empire was planning to expand its borders.

"[As I said before, Mr. Eckleberry, I have no intention of killing you. I need you to create for me a master ball that has the capability to capture the Legendary Pokémon. Regardless of whether you comply, you will be sent to prison. The variable, of course, is where.

"[If you help me, your prison will be a luxurious mansion with a sizable budget. You will live with the luxury of an average Hood, save the ability to exit the house. On the other hand, you can be sent to the underground sector of Mt. Ember prison. And I will personally tell the Guards there that I will find favour with those who show the most schadenfreude with you.]"

Mt. Ember prison was terrible. Everyone knew this. But the underground sector was reserved for the most loathed enemies of the Empire. One of the few things the Empire did in public was show imprisonment. And they made extra care to make imprisonment in the underground sector big news.

The situation was ironically similar to that of twenty years ago. He could live a life of luxury and betray his conscience, or live a life of hardship but keep his conscience clear. He stared desperately into the darkness of the Emperor's hood, contemplating his past and future. The latter was riding on this one ultimatum that the most powerful man in Hoenn had provided.

Blackmail.
 
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Chapter 2!! I gotta read this......

Okay done. - I thought chapter 2 was written very well with a couple of problems. there is no description to the dialogue, which doesn't paint the smoothest picture in a reader's head. Add some description to the dialogue:

EX. ["Look who's acting so tough!" the toughest looking Gaurd with a jagged scar across his right brow sneered.]

Also the sentence
"This isn't society! This is you, forcing people to live in fear!"
is a bit ambiguous. I'm not sure what Bjorn is trying to say right there, but I think "society" should be capitalized. Either that, or make the message a little clearer.

Other than those problems, I really liked it. the characters and plot line are well developed and keep me wanting more. I'll be waiting for more chapters! ~ :)
 

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OK, the forum didn't properly post my last message, so let's try again.

I've reduced the ambiguity of the statement and made it more significant to the story. Bjorn believes he's about to die (as shown by the "why don't you just kill me" statement), and so at this point is totally honest about his opinion of the Empire, as someone who's been hiding from the Empire; not under their control. Is this representative of the general populace's opinions? You decide. :P

I've also added some outside comments to the dialogue to show some emotion, also as you suggested. Thanks for the review, Mewtwo42. ^^
 

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This is great. Wonderful. Brilliant. Will he or won't he? Hmm. I'm not sure whether I want him to try and improve the Master ball or not.

Let's see... right now, I'm not in the mood to try and pick out small mistakes, and so I shall just call the post fantastic and leave it at that. Trust me, it is.

Please, please, please keep posting! I have had too many instances on another site where the author only posts one or two parts and leaves it at that. It's excruciating, I'll have you know.
 

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Thanks for the compliment, Sweet_Dreams. ^_^ I assume your plea for me not to stop writing was preemptive: I have absolutely no intention of ending this prematurely, and I hope I haven't been giving off signals to suggest such a thing.

That being said, updates will be a little slow because I have mid-year exams this week.
 

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I think this may be the best fanfic I've read yet, everything's just done perfectly! I think what I admire most is how you weren't afraid to make a flawed and complex protagonist. Anyone can write about a typical hero who does nothing wrong, but it takes real talent to make a lead character who has these kinds of problems and still is likable. Also, you show hints of a really strong plot behind the characters, I can't wait to see how it gets fleshed out! Another thing I liked was the extensive vocabulary, the usage of Schadenfreude sent a chill up my spine.

I'm not sure if this was intentional, but "Walter Whittaker" is a nice homage to The Russians are Coming!

One thing that I would change (I wouldn't comment without at least a bit of advice) is the phrase "ill-gotten" in "but he couldn't help but wonder if his wish had been ill-gotten."

I may just be being nit-picky, but it sounds awkward to me. I think "ill-received" might be the phrase you were thinking of.

Everything else, however, is gold! You're really breaking the norm, here; keep it up!
 

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Wow - that means a lot to me, icomeanon6 (I made sure I got it right this time XD;). That homage was definitely unintentional, but hey, if it works, it's great. :D

As for Watson, I'm glad you said that, as it means I must be doing well to give Watson the effect I wanted. You should hopefully notice a similar idea with the antagonists when I decide to develop them, as well (as in, not just simple destroy all good guys while having no emotion villains).

On reflection, I think you're correct, "ill-received" does work better. I'll change it.
 

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A big thanks to bobandbill for BETAing this chapter. ^_^

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Chapter Three: Prey
Two weeks.

Two long weeks of training: grueling battle after grueling battle, with a touch of theory. The theory classes consisted of a myriad of useful topics, including but certainly not limited to: why Citizens are inferior, the numerous good deeds and humanitarian efforts of the Empire, and what best to say when giving thanks to the Hoods before eating a meal.

Standard stuff really.

Today, there would be no classes. Instead, the cadets had an exam. According to their long-range attack instructor, it "will expose the grimer: those of you pathetic enough to have just oozed past the Guard interview will be exposed as the weaklings you are."

Over the two weeks, a far more definite hierarchy among the cadets had been established, centered around the two most proficient students in the class. The cadets were clearly divided in support: how one side would jeer when the leader of the opposing pack would lose.

The leaders were, unsurprisingly, Watson and Kayla.

They handled their positions differently. Watson had an air of anger and strength constantly hanging around him, and even his most loyal supporters kept their distance. He pretended to not care about his position, but secretly, he was pleased. They feared him. To Watson, fear was respect: he'd make the perfect Hood. But, for some reason unbeknownst to him, he didn't feel this principle should extend to pokémon. A philosophy that many in the Hoenn Empire would consider insane.

Kayla, on the other hand, took every opportunity to closely surround herself with friends. She enjoyed amazing them with her extensive knowledge of pokémon and taking every opportunity to humiliate her rival. Kayla was an interesting person: she was incredibly intelligent, and, out of school, could have easily applied for a reasonably high-ranking Suit. But instead, she wanted to prove to everyone that she was more than just an intellectual.

She was a warrior.

And now, for the first time since they'd been here, the future Guards were being called outside. Cold, damp, caliginous: dark clouds smothered the sky, threatening to fall upon this sandy flatland. If depression had a house, it would be built somewhere here in this desert.

As Watson confidently strode out of the building, he laid his eyes upon a sight that evoked genuine sympathy within him. Cold, dark grey cages were stacked upon each other, containing many different kinds of pokémon. All looked as if their best friend had died. Or, as Watson guessed, and quite accurately, they had been violently taken from their families. Each pokémon had a small, black ring around one of their appendages.

A symbol of slavery.

More filed out, including Kayla and her friends. None expressed sympathy; only excitement. Kayla, surrounded by about five people, sauntered up to the lone Watson.

"Quite barbaric, locking them in cages, isn't it?"

Watson looked at her oddly. She didn't seem to care about pokémon before – what was she trying to say?

"It's a bit like punching someone when they're turning to walk away," Kayla sneered. Her bruise had healed, but she certainly hadn't forgotten the incident. "But you didn't find that barbaric, did you? And yet, you looked so horrified when you saw these in cages!"

Damn, she was good. Was there anything she didn't notice? And once again, she had demonstrated that she still had a callousness towards pokémon that Watson so loathed.

"This wouldn't be the first time you've noted something incorrectly," smiled Watson arrogantly. "I recall from our last battle: Fortis, move to the left! Wait no, the right! Bravo."

Kayla returned his smile with a feigned kindness and spoke pompously, "If you possess the unfortunate disposition whereby you are unable to fully comprehend the human capacity to verbally utter misnomers at irregular intervals that do not completely, fully, and thoroughly epitomise that person's complete ability, and, furthermore, that capacity's tendency to enact itself when it is in a state of undesirability, especially when time is scarce in general and not economic terms, whereby the length of judgment must be sizably decreased, then you, good sir, are a complete and utter idiot."

Nobody listening could understand the point that she was trying to convey, except of course for the last part, which was purposefully succinct. Kayla, staring at Watson's dumbstruck face, added with an air of satisfaction, "I rest my case."

Watson was silently furious: he was made to look like a fool. Who would fear him now?

Their battle instructor strode past the huddle of a hundred students, his mane of hair swishing powerfully in the breeze that his walk created. He was, as Kayla liked to note, the instructor when she won her first battle against Watson.

He started talking in his usual gruff voice, "Behind me, eighty pokémon sit in cages. However, there are one hundred and three of you. Your challenge today is to catch a pokémon. The twenty-three of you that fail to do so will be sent on the train back home."

At this statement, there were anxious mutters around the crowd. The metaphorical grimer were restless.

The instructor angrily yelled, "Silence! There is something else you must know. This morning, you were each given a special kind of master ball, called a pokéball. This is what you must catch your pokémon in. It will only capture a weakened pokémon, so you must use the attacking skills you've learnt to hunt down these pokémon."

One student, who had been noted for asking a lot of questions (hence his multiple bruises), raised his hand. "Sir, somebody told me that pokéballs were used in the Pre-Empire period."

The instructor grimaced menacingly at this student: how many times must he be struck until he understands that questions are not tolerated? Nevertheless, it was his responsibility of the instructor to correct this foolish cadet's mistake.

"Whoever told you that was either a liar or insurmountably stupid. The Pre-Empire period, as you should have learned in school, was a time where pokémon were savage and untamed. They would openly attack humans without provocation and many would fall dead at their hands. Humans had no tools to tame these wild monsters.

"That, of course, was where His Imperial Majesty comes into it. He invented the master ball so we could defend ourselves against pokémon. The pokéball is merely a type of this with decreased power so we can test your training ability."

The two star pupils both knew this story, and had their suspicions about its veracity, which they daren't voice. Watson could not accept that pokémon openly attacked humans without provocation. He knew this was completely illogical, but he felt a loyalty to pokémon that ran strong within his veins.

Kayla, on the other hand, took a slightly more logical approach. She had deduced, unlike most of the population, that there was a world outside of the Empire. She found it hard to believe that her kind Emperor would leave the outside world to suffer at the hands of vicious beasts. There must be a civilisation out there somewhere that has already discovered some coping mechanism.

It was probably evil, of course – why else would the Guards deny access to it? But that was besides the point: if others had a coping mechanism, so should have Hoenn in the Pre-Empire period. It was only twenty years ago. Society must have existed: several metropolises spanning an entire Empire couldn't have been built in just twenty years.

There must have been civilisation before the Empire.

These questioning thoughts were rare among Hoenn. People had been disallowed from having pokémon for so long that these creatures were now feared immensely: "demons" and "fiends", they were often described. The Hoods, despite their constant use of pokémon as tools of fear against the Citizens, were seen as saviours: the people who brought civilisation to the savage Pre-Empire period. It was widely recognised in other regions to be the equivalent of a cult.

"Hold still, cadets, and choose your prey."

Watson scanned the pokémon, and laid eyes on one that brought back familiar memories, and caused the scar on his thigh to tingle with unwelcome nostalgia.

Scyther.

It was a sizable, light green insect with ferocious blades, which were being held up defensively in fear behind the cold, metal bars. Its pale wings were curved uncomfortably to fit inside the small cage: a pathetic sight.

Watson smirked unkindly, but then withdrew this facial expression immediately. He'd smiled at one scyther's misery because another had caused him pain. Was that how he truly felt? A tinge of shame danced on the edge of his mind.

His musing was abruptly interrupted as the top layer of cages noisily and electronically unfolded: most of their former inhabitants shot off in all directions. And off went Watson's future scyther. Or so Watson hoped.

Their battle instructor then pushed the black remote in his hand that he must have pulled out earlier again. The second layer of cages unfolded, and once again, pokémon fled from their prisons. One dazed teddiursa fled in the wrong direction: toward the students.

Laughing, one of the instructors on the side pointed what looked like a flashlight at the small, ochre bear's leg tag. It let out a surreal howl of pain and galloped in the opposite direction. Watson was horrified, but many cadets joined in with the teacher's cruel laugh.

The instructor joked jovially, "That'll be an easy one to catch now."

Watson was now visibly angry. His lips tightened and his fists clenched. He had to exercise all his energy in restraining himself from attacking this cruel man, this teacher of lies.

With a click of a button, the pokémon in the bottom layer of cages were released, and allowed a chance at escaping from their future captors.

"Three," the battle instructor started, and casual looks of anticipation were exchanged. "Two," he continued: a thick tension was evident among the students. "One," he finished, watching students with their pokéballs gripped tightly in their hands, leaning forward excitedly. "Go!"

About a hundred desperate cadets competitively leapt in all directions, all at top speed, all with a greedy determination on their respective faces. Few cared which pokémon they caught – as long as they caught one, they'd feel accomplished. Watson was far more picky and held himself to a much higher standard. He wanted his pokémon to be able to shatter the competition. And above all, he desired more than anything else, to conquer that which had once conquered him.

He wanted the scyther.

There was a trailing stalker though, someone who moved with surprising ability for someone of such short stature. Kayla. She was taking every chance now to prove that she was better than Watson. And catching his pokémon was exactly the kind of victory she had in mind.

After running for about two minutes, he spotted the thing, lying helplessly in the sand. It certainly didn't belong in a desert. Kayla was about half a minute behind; he needed to take this opportunity.

Watson anticipatively shouted as he released his houndour, "Amicus, ember!"

Amicus opened its mouth to release a short burst of orange flame. Scyther reacted quickly and attempted to take flight, but stumbled midair and fell to the ground again, skidding in the cool, grainy sand.

"Use smog, Amicus!"

Amicus opened its mouth once again to release an eerie purple gas, shapeless and deadly. The smoke moved with a feral speed to encapsulate the tired scyther, who screamed with the pain of poison. However, the scyther flew out and towards Amicus, brandishing its large, sickle-like claws. Amicus instinctively ducked, and at Watson's command, released another mouthful of flames, which narrowly missed the anxious insect.

"Fortis, ember!"

Watson mentally cursed this scyther's agility, despite its sickness. All this dodging had stalled long enough for Kayla to show up. Her houndour released a breath of orange flame, which scyther clumsily dodged, and fell painfully on its back to the cool sand below. Its left wing was injured, now.

Kayla smiled at this weakened creature, and ordered her houndour to strike it with flames. Watson wasn't going to let her win this time. Not again.

Amicus sensed his companion's determination and launched at Fortis with its claws. Fortis's master cried out in anger as the flames went in a distant direction, far from her prey. In desperation, she assumed that the tiredness of the scyther coupled with its earlier fall would make it weak enough to be unable to break free from her pokéball.

And how wrong she was.

The pokéball flung itself in a distant direction across the expanse of sand from the sheer force of the breakout of scyther. Republican balls broke after a pokémon broke free, yet the Empire had modified pokéballs slightly to become reusable, simply for Guard examinations like this one. There was to be no waste of Empire resources.

Watson admired this insect – despite all scars, he would still not submit to being somebody's slave. It was as if this scyther knew how badly people treated pokémon, and Watson looked forward to showing this insect some kindness once he'd been caught.

Fortis and Kayla were now scanning the distance for their pokéball, and Watson's opportunity was now. The scyther was cringing from the pain of its poison, barely mobile, curled up weakly in a ball on the grey sand.

"Amicus, ember!"

His houndour released a bright orange breath of fire, causing the scyther, thankfully, to fall unconscious. He threw the red and white ball at his new pokémon, dematerialising it into a stream of red light, and encapsulating it inside the small place. There was no struggle.

This was certainly the most rewarding exam that Watson had ever succeeded in.

******​

It was beautiful: the walls were decorated a lavish scarlet and gold, the bed was especially made for his body type, and a rich, thick, golden carpet supported his feet. Above his large mirror was the symbol of his work: a mighty zangoose towering over a crippled seviper. And in this room, on an expensive mahogany chair, sat an incredibly rich man.

He personally possessed a fifth of the wealth in all of Hoenn. His region feared him. Other regions feared him. He owned the most powerful team of pokémon in the world. Only two of his enemies were unaccounted for.

And yet, the Emperor of Hoenn was unhappy.

He looked at himself in his platinum-framed mirror: a grown man in a Hallowe'en costume. Is this what he'd been reduced to? All he had to do was put a hood over his golden-blond hair, gray eyes and soft facial features, and others would cower in fear and respect.

Or, he thought, simply fear.

He should have been happy. And many times he was; he has to be, or those around him suffer. But when he was alone and with no servants to mindlessly punish, the Emperor was mildly sad. Not angry. Not furious.

Just sad.

He was prone to terrible mood swings: he remembered how happy he'd felt when he'd been contacted that they had captured Bjorn Eckleberry, who was now reluctantly but dutifully constructing for him the ultimate weapon. But he also remember how angry he felt, back in the days of the uprising, when they finally stormed the President's Office in Mauville, only to find that Walter Whittaker had fled.

And this enemy was still unaccounted for.

He never used to be like this. Before the days of the uprising, he was a cheerful, charismatic extrovert. Until that night. That one night when everything changed. Whittaker destroyed him. In turn, he destroyed Whittaker. And now, the former Emperor of Popularity was now the Emperor of Hoenn.

And yet, Whittaker's destruction still remained. The Emperor believed vengeance would make him happy again. Satisfaction had been converted from a way of life to a firework: a powerful explosion followed by an abrupt death.

The most powerful man in Hoenn was not above everything else, despite his constant attempts at self-deceit. He was still one thing, just like everybody else.

Prey.
 
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Fantasic. Good work. I have read published works of fiction that were less entertaining than your fanfiction. I really enjoyed the 103 trainers to catch and 80 pokemon scene. Personally, I wish it had been longer and included a few references to the other cadets and the pokemon they were chasing, but, then again, I am just being selfish because I want to read more!

Allow me to add my 2 cents...

a mighty sangoose towering over a crippled seviper.
Slight spelling error. I believe you intended to write 'zangoose'. :)

"Whoever told you that was either a liar or insurmountably stupid. The Pre-Empire period, as you should have learned in school, was a time where pokémon were savage and untamed. They would openly attack humans without provocation and many would fall dead at their hands. Humans had no tools to tame these wild monsters.
I accepted this while I was reading, but it did disrupt my willful suspension of disbelief a bit.

I got to thinking, if Hoenn is so isolated that this is blindly believed, does this mean that there are no trade relations between Hoenn and Kanto/Johto? Are Hoenn's borders now closed to prevent tourists from contaminating Hoenn society? If so, have the Hoods/Guards created a powerful enough naval force to keep the borders secure?

What happened to the pokemon gyms and pokemon centers? Those buildings would point to the existence of pre-empire pokeballs and peacful co-existence with pokemon. Have public libraries been closed, since they too would contain information to contradict the empire's account of history?

Also, twenty years is not a very long time. Do all of the citizens 30 years old and up believe pokemon were savage before the empire? They obviously were around before the rise of the empire and should remember the truth. I find it hard to believe that none of them would have secretly taught their children (and thus some of the cadets), the truth about the empire.

Those are just my thoughts, but some further clarification may be needed. If you would welcome a suggestion: The Hoods seem to have telepathic powers, perhaps some sort of society-wide brainwashing took place to errode pre-empire memories in the populace.

Then again, maybe you wanted the reader to ask himself these kinds of questions. If that was your intent, you can just ignore me. :)

One last thing (sorry about the length of my review) from chapter 2:

The situation was ironically similar to that of twenty years ago. He could live a life of luxury and betray his conscience, or live a life of hardship but keep his conscience clear. He stared desperately into the darkness of the Emperor's hood, contemplating his past and future. The latter was riding on this one ultimatum that the most powerful man in Hoenn had provided.
This paragraph is talking about Mr. Eckleberry. Wasn't the success vs. conscience dilemma faced twenty years ago by William Whittaker, not Mr. Eckleberry?
 
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