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The Plot Bunny Thread

Is Fire Emblem: Conjoinst Souls something that you'd be interested in reading?

  • Yes

    Votes: 4 50.0%
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JX Valentine

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I do realize what a plot Buneary is, and mine breed like the real things. However, I didn't think it was worth creating an entire thread for one off-the-wall question on opinions.

Just tip for wherever you go: it's best to create new threads for any subject that isn't already covered by ancrazy thread. If it's not a plot Buneary, for example, you don't want to put it in a plot Buneary thread, even if it's a minor question. Besides the fact that it could potentially create more work for the mods (what with separating topics into their own threads -- see note below), it sometimes makes the vets look at you sideways.

Moreover, this kind of question could actually elicit a full hotel room. I mean, despite placement, it's actually a good question because there's different opinions on whether or not this kind of thing would automatically trip Sue alarms, and people's definitions for Sues tend to be widely different from one ancrazy because it's that kind of thing that's more along the lines of "you know it when you see it."

Just as a heads up for next time, really.

But yeah, if you don't have a Sue, you really don't have much to worry about.
 

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Moreover, this kind of question could actually elicit a full hotel room. I mean, despite placement, it's actually a good question because there's different opinions on whether or not this kind of thing would automatically trip Sue alarms, and people's definitions for Sues tend to be widely different from one ancrazy because it's that kind of thing that's more along the lines of "you know it when you see it."

Just as a heads up for next time, really.

But yeah, if you don't have a Sue, you really don't have much to worry about.

Mmm. Well, I suppose I could make a thread specifically for this question. But, I do have a rather valid question relating to plot bunaries now. According to a friend that has and beaten Pokemon Black/White, about a third (timewise) of my plotline for my original region now mirrors canon with the release of GenV. I certainly don't want to have to trash that part of my plot, but I also don't want it to be seen as a cheap ripoff.
 

JX Valentine

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Mmm. Well, I suppose I could make a thread specifically for this question. But, I do have a rather valid question relating to plot bunaries now. According to a friend that has and beaten Pokemon Black/White, about a third (timewise) of my plotline for my original region now mirrors canon with the release of GenV. I certainly don't want to have to trash that part of my plot, but I also don't want it to be seen as a cheap ripoff.

Side note: The proper term is "plot bunny." (Note the title of the thread.) The plot Buneary thing was the result of some brilliant ideas involving PC and April Fool's. Just to give you a heads up.

That being said, that depends on what you're trying to do specifically. If your plot is about an evil organization using a teenage boy who they call a king to take control of a legendary Pokémon, all while the teenage boy is harping about how everyone else needs to release their Pokémon because it's wrong to enslave them and if you don't do anything to make it seem like your story is different from that one, then sure, it might look like a rip-off to some readers. (Some; not all.)

However, if your plot just coincides with the timeline of the games, if your plot borrows or references the Gen V events as part of its background, or if that's your plot but you take it a step further and bring something new to the table (as in, it's not a word-for-word copy of the games' plot), then there's really nothing to worry about at all. This is because there's not really much that would cause the reader to look at your story and instantly think, "Well huh. This sounds a lot like the games I just played."
 

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Heh, well, no ... I'm not using a teenage boy who calls himself a king. The thing I had a problem with is that the alternate world for pokemon alone plot point is a pivotal part of my story, at least with Minerva. Sure, Minerva is a bit of a well intentioned extremist that's lost a few nuts and bolts along the way, but she's not crazy enough to pose no threat. And honestly, things are better off when she's in charge. >_>

But, no, it's certainly not going to be a carbon copy of Generation V.
 

JX Valentine

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Heh, well, no ... I'm not using a teenage boy who calls himself a king. The thing I had a problem with is that the alternate world for pokemon alone plot point is a pivotal part of my story, at least with Minerva. Sure, Minerva is a bit of a well intentioned extremist that's lost a few nuts and bolts along the way, but she's not crazy enough to pose no threat. And honestly, things are better off when she's in charge. >_>

Believe it or not, this plot isn't exactly new to Pokémon canon. Before N was talking about it, the Elite Four in Pokémon Special were trying to decimate the human race because Lance thought Pokémon deserved a better world. After that, this would pretty much be the background of every Mystery Dungeon game ever. (The Pokémon-only world, at least. Apparently, there were humans. There just aren't that many anymore.) Likewise, depending on which canon and how one feels about Cyrus, this could also be what Team Galactic was trying to do by creating a new world free of corruption (read: people screwing things up in Cyrus's view).

This isn't to say that the concept won't work. As I've already implied, it's a base concept. What you do with it beyond that can make or break your story. The "beyond that" part can be provided through a whole host of methods. For example, what's Minerva's beef with the human race? How is she planning on creating this new world? (Are there legendaries involved? Is it science? Keep in mind that every evil organization uses legendaries to achieve their plots, so... yeah.) Where does the protagonist fit in? Why does the protagonist disagree with Minerva? What does that character do to stop her? And so on and so forth.

Keep in mind that these are all rhetorical questions (meaning I don't actually want you to answer them -- especially given the fact that, judging by how you just said your story isn't a carbon-copy of the games, you don't really need too much help in figuring out whether or not the answers to these would help you avoid giving a reader the feeling that your fic is a rip-off). They're just there to provide examples of the kinds of questions you should be asking yourself in order to build your story a bit further.

In short, though, if your story isn't a carbon-copy, then there's nothing you need to worry about.
 

SeleneHime

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Believe it or not, this plot isn't exactly new to Pokémon canon. Before N was talking about it, the Elite Four in Pokémon Special were trying to decimate the human race because Lance thought Pokémon deserved a better world. After that, this would pretty much be the background of every Mystery Dungeon game ever. (The Pokémon-only world, at least. Apparently, there were humans. There just aren't that many anymore.) Likewise, depending on which canon and how one feels about Cyrus, this could also be what Team Galactic was trying to do by creating a new world free of corruption (read: people screwing things up in Cyrus's view).

This isn't to say that the concept won't work. As I've already implied, it's a base concept. What you do with it beyond that can make or break your story. The "beyond that" part can be provided through a whole host of methods. For example, what's Minerva's beef with the human race? How is she planning on creating this new world? (Are there legendaries involved? Is it science? Keep in mind that every evil organization uses legendaries to achieve their plots, so... yeah.) Where does the protagonist fit in? Why does the protagonist disagree with Minerva? What does that character do to stop her? And so on and so forth.

Keep in mind that these are all rhetorical questions (meaning I don't actually want you to answer them -- especially given the fact that, judging by how you just said your story isn't a carbon-copy of the games, you don't really need too much help in figuring out whether or not the answers to these would help you avoid giving a reader the feeling that your fic is a rip-off). They're just there to provide examples of the kinds of questions you should be asking yourself in order to build your story a bit further.

In short, though, if your story isn't a carbon-copy, then there's nothing you need to worry about.

Yeah, PokeSpecial did do the base plot as well. But as I'm sure you know, nothing is completely original anymore. It's making it your own that counts, and doing it well. Your point about the original PMD arc also holds true. Humans seem to have died out in that world.

Mmm. Those are good questions, and I've already gone over them a few times. Sorry that my reply isn't near as long as yours, but I think that we've said pretty much everything there is to say on this without rehashing things. Thanks for your input, JX.
 
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I know this sounds stupid but... Would a playthrough fic of an OCR (Original Character Reigon), with Serebii-esque details of every-route and encounter (albeit with some humorous, snappy dialouge) be considered a 'good idea'?

I mean, would you read it even if there was a pictures thrown in and a subplot of me being held hostage by GameFreak to play it after a misunderstanding with Ken Sugimori on Twitter?

Noob out.
 

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I know this sounds stupid but... Would a playthrough fic of an OCR (Original Character Reigon), with Serebii-esque details of every-route and encounter (albeit with some humorous, snappy dialouge) be considered a 'good idea'?

I mean, would you read it even if there was a pictures thrown in and a subplot of me being held hostage by GameFreak to play it after a misunderstanding with Ken Sugimori on Twitter?

Noob out.
The Noob, if you mean making a playthrough like how IGN does with walkthroughs, I don't think I'll be excited about it, even with humorous dialogue. I might get bored after a while.

As for pictures, I tend to not like pics in fanfics as it'll distract me from the writing itself. I'm fine though if the pics are separated from the story. As for the subplot, you'll have to be careful with that as having you as a self-insert like that could either be really funny or it might look like you're forcing the comedy out. I tend to be skeptical over comedic situations like that.
 

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The Noob, if you mean making a playthrough like how IGN does with walkthroughs, I don't think I'll be excited about it, even with humorous dialogue. I might get bored after a while.

As for pictures, I tend to not like pics in fanfics as it'll distract me from the writing itself. I'm fine though if the pics are separated from the story. As for the subplot, you'll have to be careful with that as having you as a self-insert like that could either be really funny or it might look like you're forcing the comedy out. I tend to be skeptical over comedic situations like that.


Heh, I was expecting such things. Maybe I've been doing too much Cracked.com, and I've been wanting to write something similar to one of their (hillarious) articles.

I'll go for a traditional fanfic about how the internet would work in the Pokemon World instead.

Noob out.
 

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But as I'm sure you know, nothing is completely original anymore.

To put it bluntly, yes and no. Yes, I do know that it's difficult (but not impossible, just to encourage a good number of you) to come up with an original idea. In fact, I believe I mentioned in the second paragraph of that other post I wrote that the part I was referring to (Pokémon Special, Mystery Dungeon, et cetera -- or, put it in different terms, the theme of "humans are a detriment to the world"... which, yes, is a theme) is a base concept, not a full concept.

That being said, I will have to say I hate it when people say that no story is original anymore. That's partly because it sounds so much like an excuse (and frequently is used as one when an author decides to write a "same plot, different character names" kind of story) and partly because it's still not entirely true. As I've said in that other post and the above paragraph, I was referring to base concepts, otherwise known as theme. The theme is not the entirety of the story; the theme is the thing that the story is built upon. All of those examples have similarities, but does that mean Pokémon recycles its own plot over and over again? Nope. Does it mean that its own storyline isn't original? Nope. What it means is that all of those examples attempt to answer the same question of whether or not humans are forces of good in that world. Those people say no, and they plot to do something about it. As you can also tell, they had completely different methods of going about and solving this problem. Lance had the Elite Four attack cities with legions of Pokémon. Cyrus attempted to use Dialga and Palkia to create a new world without humans and move on over (leaving this one intact). No one's quite sure what happened with the Mystery Dungeon universe, but it's implied that humans simply mass-migrated somewhere else (because there are still humans, just not there). For that reason, each story called for the protagonist to do something a little bit different. PokéSpe had the main characters team up with Team Rocket in order to defeat the Elite Four one by one. DP has you capturing the legendary at Spear Pillar to stop Team Galactic once and for all (and even then, in the anime, the story and manga differ completely from this still). Mystery Dungeon doesn't even bother solving the problem because it turns out their world really is better off without humans. So, each one isn't really unoriginal. It just so happens that they share some very basic concepts.

Is it possible to avoid sharing very basic concepts (like themes, character types, settings, and so on)? Probably not, and in that sense, sure, nothing is "completely original." However, this is like saying everyone is the same person because we share parts of our personalities and interests with other people. This is really no reason to call every story unoriginal.

And I'm sorry for being biting, but this topic comes up now and then, and it gets really frustrating because, as I've said, it's usually from people who want to defend a bland story idea. Not saying yours is. Just saying I'm really, really tired of hearing that phrase "no story is completely original." It's original when you build your plot in a way that doesn't make it sound like it's just a rehashing of an already trite storyline.

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Just to exercise my brain and writing muscles I have decided to write a fanfic where Ash and Co. visits my home country of Singapore.

I am using the cast of BW season in Pokemon.

Basically Ash travels to an island nation known as Entepore. Odd things happen to Ash and Co. once they land on this island whose people speak Singlish and end with "lahs".etc

Also laws that oppress Pokemon-related activities are abound in this island just as strict laws with big penalties exist in real world Singapore.

However as the 3 part series goes on, Ash and his new friend discovers that there is more than meets the eye with laws that defied those used by the Pokemon Association.

The Plot is still being concocted.

I wonder if I am going to write this in 3rd person in the point of view of a minor Character who comes in contact with Ash. Or maybe from Ash's point of view.

Just some updates on the Entepore chapter, the Ash and the protagonist discover that the reason behind the laws that indirectly make Enteporeans somewhat Pokemon haters was because the opposition team believes that one of the governers of Enterpore is part of Team Plasma. The protagonist believes that the only way to save Enterpore is to find the pokemon, Entei.
 

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To put it bluntly, yes and no. Yes, I do know that it's difficult (but not impossible, just to encourage a good number of you) to come up with an original idea. In fact, I believe I mentioned in the second paragraph of that other post I wrote that the part I was referring to (Pokémon Special, Mystery Dungeon, et cetera -- or, put it in different terms, the theme of "humans are a detriment to the world"... which, yes, is a theme) is a base concept, not a full concept.

That being said, I will have to say I hate it when people say that no story is original anymore. That's partly because it sounds so much like an excuse (and frequently is used as one when an author decides to write a "same plot, different character names" kind of story) and partly because it's still not entirely true. As I've said in that other post and the above paragraph, I was referring to base concepts, otherwise known as theme. The theme is not the entirety of the story; the theme is the thing that the story is built upon. All of those examples have similarities, but does that mean Pokémon recycles its own plot over and over again? Nope. Does it mean that its own storyline isn't original? Nope. What it means is that all of those examples attempt to answer the same question of whether or not humans are forces of good in that world. Those people say no, and they plot to do something about it. As you can also tell, they had completely different methods of going about and solving this problem. Lance had the Elite Four attack cities with legions of Pokémon. Cyrus attempted to use Dialga and Palkia to create a new world without humans and move on over (leaving this one intact). No one's quite sure what happened with the Mystery Dungeon universe, but it's implied that humans simply mass-migrated somewhere else (because there are still humans, just not there). For that reason, each story called for the protagonist to do something a little bit different. PokéSpe had the main characters team up with Team Rocket in order to defeat the Elite Four one by one. DP has you capturing the legendary at Spear Pillar to stop Team Galactic once and for all (and even then, in the anime, the story and manga differ completely from this still). Mystery Dungeon doesn't even bother solving the problem because it turns out their world really is better off without humans. So, each one isn't really unoriginal. It just so happens that they share some very basic concepts.

Is it possible to avoid sharing very basic concepts (like themes, character types, settings, and so on)? Probably not, and in that sense, sure, nothing is "completely original." However, this is like saying everyone is the same person because we share parts of our personalities and interests with other people. This is really no reason to call every story unoriginal.

And I'm sorry for being biting, but this topic comes up now and then, and it gets really frustrating because, as I've said, it's usually from people who want to defend a bland story idea. Not saying yours is. Just saying I'm really, really tired of hearing that phrase "no story is completely original." It's original when you build your plot in a way that doesn't make it sound like it's just a rehashing of an already trite storyline.

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I understand your sentiment all too well. However, as you have mentioned, many do use that line to defend bland and overused works. I suppose I should've saved you the rant and expanded upon what I was thinking. My apologies.

I was underlining the fact that every work is inspired by something, or in some cases, many things. People take inspiration from some of the most random things, and usually every author has someone they look up to. So, while it is up to the author his/herself to make sure their work is original, it will carry a hint of flavor of something else in it. However, while you are right that to call everything unoriginal is a bit cynical and lazy, it is only as original as the storyteller makes it.
I'm not trying to start a debate and/or dissection of writing with you, and while it seems to have already happened, rest assured it was not my intention. Perhaps I'd best bow out before I dig myself into a deeper hole, eh?
 
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I have an idea for a future fanfic

Right after completing my current fanfic, I plan to write another crossover of pokemon/mario. It will be a novelization of paper mario and another which will be paper mario: the thousond year door. It will include several of my main characters of my current fanfic, link, zelda, kirby, and possibly sonic, and of course mario. And when I get started, I want someone to work with on this fanfic. Any ideas on how to get started.
 

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Hey! Thought bubble!

I'm in a sort of 'I wonder what N's childhood was like?' mood. It would be interesting to make a quick oneshot about a day in N's life, specifically one where he meets Pokemon for the first time, or he gets beaten up and mentally tortured by Ghetsis and his Pokemon, etc.

I've seen a few before on FF.net, but they're usually Harmoniashipping, which means that Ghetsis rapes him, often times while N is playing with blocks. The description these fangirls go into to describe how it would feel to be cornholed by a family member with children's toys digging into your chest makes you wonder what happened to them as children.

As such, I'd rather have Ghetsis be more of a verbally, psychologically, or physically abusive father than a sexually abusive one. I don't even think he would be monstrous enough to rape N.

Also, I think he's an immortal sorcerer, and has had a crapload of kids before N, one of them being Hunter J, if you go by anime canon. But that's just my thoughts regurgitated onto text.

Noob out.
 

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I have a -er- bunny to pull out of a hat.

I have explored this idea in the past, back when I failed to understand what a 'paragraph' was. I'm hoping to get some feedback!

Title: Nyu Jirando

Genre: Action/Adventure/Drama/Comedy

Meet Auster. He is a university student, slacking off with his research, partying, setting couches on fire and pretty much anything besides studying for his exams. When he falls just short of the mark to pass he receives an offer from the head Evolutionary professor to study evolution in the field and recording it. The problem is, in order to do this, Auster has to take the Nyu Jirando league challenge.

Auster hates Pokemon trainers, and being around Pokemon all together. He sees them as souless beasts, growing up on a farm has desensitized him to the fact that they have emotions too. He detests wannabe try-hard trainers, running about cities and the countryside like they own the place, commanding their powerful creatures for the bidding.

But he has no choice, in order to make the cut to pass (he has no money to try again next year) he takes three Pokemon from his fathers farm, a Ponyta, a Mareep and a Spoink and heads out into the harsh world of Pokemon training. Not an easy thing to do for someone an 'attitude' and the inability to accept defeat.

Trouble is brewing in Nyu Jirando however. The uprising "Mongrel Mob" are causing havoc throughout the country. They are bent to steal as many Pokemon as they can, and the testing they perform on them... is not pretty. If they succeed, evolution around the entire world will change forever, infact. It will never occur again if the Everstone Bomb is released.

Their gang-like intimidation is forcing even peaceful people to join their ranks. They are operating in secret and attacking using terrorist strategies. If this continues, the entire country will fall into chaos.

Meet Sue. A french Evolutionary Studies student who corresponds with Auster. She is beautiful and has a great singing voice. She has a wealthy background and never hesitates to splash out on bizzare and beautiful outfits. Her true passion is Pokemon and evolution. She is travelling to meet Auster and help him record his journey and any evolutions he may witness, she is going to compete in the Nyu Jirando league too. She carries with her specially bred Pokemon gifted to her from her father to aid her quest. However, with the Mongrel Mob controlling the airport she lands in, things could turn ugly quickly.

Meet James. A runner up of the Kanto league losing narrowly to his rival. He specializes in combination attacks and can often tutor Pokemon to use techniques they cannot usually learn. All of his Pokemon are unevolved despite their huge power and speed. It was the only thing that stopped him from becoming champion. There isn't a day when he doesn't wonder why none of his companions had changed form yet. After hearing that Nyu Jirando boasted the top evolutionary professors he travels there, on the same plane as Sue to compete in the Nyu Jirando league and hopefully discover the secret planted deep inside his Pokemon.

These three lives all meet, and they realise one shocking fact.

They need each other.

A heavy weight rests on the shoulders of these three individuals. If one falls, the other will crumble.

Unless they can defeat the demons inside themselves, put aside their personal issues and focus on the bigger picture...

Nyu Jirando will fall into chaos.

Experience action, humour, and a burning passion for sucuess as these three unique personalities travel this young land in search of strength, wisdom and the most important thing of all... truth.

Featuring new Pokemon, new evolutions, an evil group that is prepared to shoot, and kill and the greatest power struggle that threatens to tip the balance of all energy into oblivion.

If the bomb is created... and the bomb is set off...

Not only will evolution cease to exist...

But so will all people

so will all places

so will all Pokemon

so will...

everything...


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Just a rough idea, can I please have comments and if anyone has questions I am happy to answer. There is plenty I haven't covered but that is just because I would have an even bigger text wall for everyone to trawl through =D
 
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Here are a couple of plots which I have had in mind. I would like to get some criticism on each, and hear what people feel would be the best fanfic to go with. I'm fond on both ideas, and at some point plan to complete both, I'm just unsure as to which I would like to go fourth with right now. So here are my two plot summaries for the fanfics, "Pokémon Fossil" and "The Melodic Mare". A t the moment I am leaning towards "The Melodic Mare" but I'm open to opinions.

Pokémon Fossil
Adio was an atypical kid, while other children his age began their journeys as Pokemon trainers, he instead would spend his days visiting the nearby ruins. Adio studied as ruin maniacs would scan the area, searching for fossils of ancient Pokémon. He would watch as dust gather, and slowly drifted in the air as the prospect of finding something was all to real. The ruins went without much of any findings for an extremely long period of time, to an extent where all the ruin maniacs packed up and left the site. Adio was disheartened, the site where he had spent a tremendous portion of his time was never to be touched again- unless.

Adio ran back to his house and gathered numerous objects, a brush used to comb the fur of Pokémon, a toothbrush, some steel objects and a few gardening tools from his mother's garden. Day after day, Adio would proceed in where the ruin maniacs had left off, he would patiently scrub the gorund to an extent where his fingernails became tattered and his hands rough as the ground that he would dig through. With his clothes dirty and tattered he would leave the ruins depressed. The day that he had almost completed the dig was a depressing day, not a single fossil had been found. Adio stared at the final plot of land, questioning as to weather he should even bother to finish the dig. As he stared, he turned to see someone else enter the ruin site. Adio watched, guessing it was just another passer by, was he ever wrong.

This unknown figure made his way towards Adio, almost as though he was inspecting the job he had done. Adio shied away from him, but the guy was persistent in starting a conversation. He complimented his work, and was appalled by the fact that he had accomplished so much with such makeshift tools. The man introduced himself as Bill, a researcher who has had a grand amount of experience with Pokémon paleontology and had an immense conversation dealing with his findings, but was disappointed to hear he had no findings. Bill noticed the patch of land untouched and questioned why it was untouched. Adio explained that he was going to leave it as he believed there to be no point. Bill was shocked by what he had heard, and was sly in convincing Adio to continue fourth. The duo spent the entire day, and most of the night searching, nothing was found until an orange glow emitted from the ground. The two stared at it, amazed. The two became hysterical, dancing and frolicking in the dead of night.

Bill made an inquiry, asking Adio to come to his lab with him, as he was impressed with his drive and uncanny ability. In Bill's lab, Adio learns an extensive amount of knowledge. The most amazing thing Adio witnessed was this machine that Bill had claimed to be able to resurrect fossils in present day, as well as a certain invention that when finished would presumably allow travel to a Pokémon region, in the past. The two continue their studies, eventually completing both machines. The Amber found back in the ruins was taken and inserted in the machine. Both of the ruin loving boys gazed, bewildered, as an Aerodactyl emerged from the machine. Amazed with the fact that the machine worked, the two began to extensively work with the machine that would allow time travel -along with extensive research of, and immense playing with Aerodactyl-

Work continued, and finally the machine had been finished, ready to engage in something none other had every attempted, time travel. Both Bill and Adio entered, Aerodactyl at their sides. The switch flicked and they watched as the world around them transformed, they weren't in Johto anymore, they found themselves in the Mesozoa region, surrounded by the Pokémon unseen before, besides in fossil form. The two travel throughout the Mesozoa region, studying, sketching, battling and foiling a huge dilemma that plagues the region.

The Melodic Mare
Many years ago, in the Melodic Mare (A region East of the Orange Archipelago that consists of floating paradises.) there existed a group of Pokémon trainers who were referred to as PokéMinstrels. They would train Pokémon as normal trainers do, but also would aid in developing a Pokémon's musical ability. Throughout the region people would gather in the numerous colosseums that were found in each town, in order to hear the beautiful melodies that the PokéMinstrels would teach their Pokémon. A PokéMinstrel's goal was to become the Master of Melody, receiving the greatest positive response from the crowd at each of the colosseum shows.

Brighton, a boy with an undeniable talent, a true ear for music has recently turned 12, the age at which people begin their journeys as a true PokéMinstrel. Along with his lifelong companion, his beloved Chatot he looks to achieve his dream of becoming a Master of Melody. Brighton finds himself encountering numerous hardships, from an easily distracted, thick skulled Chatot, to a rival who seems to be the epitome of perfection when it comes to PokéMinstel standards. Brighton is determined, but his quirky fun loving personality, mixed with his seriousness that is associated with music leads to some crazy situations.
 
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Okay, MayNoWriMo Novel.

- Six years prior to the start of the story, Sarah Scott falls asleep in her home while only her son, Terrence, is in the home, sick- she is watching over him. Father Christopher Scott and daughters Elizabeth and Sierra are out to go see a movie. Sarah is a known insomniac, and has not slept for two days. She makes the mistake of falling asleep with a cigarette in her hand, and the house goes up in flames. Sarah and Terrence are burned badly, and in the ICU ward of Azalea General Hospital, the next morning, Terrence passes away. Sarah passes away just three hours after.

To escape the town in which the tragedy occurred, as well as find a new home, they move to Pallet Town, Kanto.

Six years later, single father Christopher Scott spots a story in the Pallet Gazette, a local newspaper. ANTI, the Annual New Trainer Initiative is coming to Pallet Town! Normally, ANTI travels around the region, going in the "traditional" order set up in order of gyms by Red, a local legend from about eleven years ago, thus making trainers in any other town either catch their own Pokemon, or go to the town ANTI is in. This year is their restarting, having been in Cinnabar last year.

He decides to enroll his daughters in the initiative. This is for two reasons; one, he hopes for them to see the world, find new, fun experiences. Second, he thinks they would be better off. Training in these days was a way for people to make a living, even young ladies like themselves, and Christopher Scott needed to see that. He had a bit of difficulty holding down a job, and thus money was always kind of tight around the Scott House.

So, he does, and tells them: Elizabeth, who has chosen by now to go by the name Beth, is awestruck, but excited. Sierra was a lot closer to their mother than Beth ever was, though, and had been struck by it harder - she was still acting out to this day. So of course daddy dearest's decision didn't sit well with her.

So he leads them to the area where ANTI starts, and they go through it, Sierra forcibly.
On the way, they run into Matthew Joyson, part of an established family: the Joysons were better known for their female members, with their curly pink hair and medical skill. Called Nurse Joys, who tended to volunteer in the local Pokemon Centers, and Pallet Town's Daisy Oak Nursery was no exception. Matt battles both Beth's Squirtle, Shelly, and Sierra's Bulbasaur, Venus, with his Charmander, Blair- and loses against both of them, interestingly enough. He declares them his rivals, then runs off.

The story is basically running off typical journey fic-isms for a while. The two sisters travel together for a bit, then drift off while Beth decides to take a detour for exploration and experience purposes, and Sierra wants to go on with the flow. One more rival fight with Matt Joyson.
At Cerulean City, Beth runs into a woman in all black, leather clothing. On the front of her shirt is a pink label - TR.

She identifies herself as being from Team Rocket.

Beth, of course, recognizing the name, is shocked. Team Rocket was supposed to have disbanded nine years ago with their total defeat by Johto's famous trainer, Ethan. So she figures this must be a hoax. She battles the girl with all three of the Pokemon she has by this point and loses horribly against the girl's single Pokemon, an odd steely thing with blades for arms.

She identifies herself as Tierra I, and says to Beth to spread the word. Team Rocket is coming back strong, and will make their first move soon- and it will deal a devestating blow to Kanto's economic system.

Sierra, in Vermillion, and Matt in Mt. Moon run into similar circumstances themselves, against a man identifying himself as Tierra II, and a woman identifying herself as Tierra III, respectively.
Things run smoothly again for a while at this point. In Vermillion (once again, this 'traditional order' most trainers follow, thinking, 'Hey, if RED did it and got so good, maybe I can too!'), Matt and Beth join together to travel, figuring it to be a good money strategy as well as a bit of safety, they both figure- though the latter, neither tells the other.

Now, in Celadon City, an attack on the Department Store occurs. Local Gym Leader Erika comes to defend the place, but is overriden by the sole numbers. Beth, Sierra and Matt are all in the city at this point (Sierra, admittedly, has a bit of a gambling problem; was in the local game corner, wasting her time away), and with Beth swearing and frightened, are all drawn into the fight.

But of course, they all recognize that pink "TR".

They run into Tierra II ater fighting through a few lower grunts of the team, and fight him in a triple battle. They win by a thread, more than anything by a lucky shot by Blair, now a Charmeleon, and his Flamethrower, and of course, a bit of last minute aid from Erika.

The Rockets retreat. The Department Store is devestated, and closed down for a while; which is bad, as it provided most of the supplies to Kanto's Pokemarts, forcing them to import from Johto. But suddenly, a woman calling herself Arianna Dupree comes up and offers assistance. The Pokemarts accept it, and they are given what seems to be a limitless amount of supplies.
The next Rocket incident is in Fuschia City. The Safari Zone is a large, untamed patch of wilderness which has only recently been reopened to the public, and it gets invaded by Rocket Grunts, as well as Tierra III. Beth and Matt only take this one on, and lose this time due to the powerful, rare Pokemon that Tierra III seems to have control over- even though they aren't in Pokeballs. T

Now of course, two major blows to the economic system occur. A major source of Fuschia City's income for its government programs was planned to be the Safari Zone, and due to the incontrollable wild Pokemon, it is closed down. Guess who comes to the rescue with donations to Fuschia City? Arianna Dupree.

This is starting to grow serious. A Police Investigation of Team Rocket is started, and Beth, Sierra and Matt are asked for assistance due to their involvement in the Celadon Incident.

But, they decline, claiming themselves to just be children wanting to get their Pokemon Journies onward. So, the investigation goes on without them.

Normality 'till Sierra's visit to Cinnabar. Sierra finds out that a rampaging Nidoking is going through the island, and even Gym Leader Furn is unable to stop it. So Sierra goes to check out, battling it intensely, and catches it, adding it as the final member of the team.

Furn offers her a treat to dinner and a battle, free-of-charge (Gym Battles in these days cost a bit of money), for her help. She agrees, and says she'll meet him in the gym later that night.

She does not show up.

Guess who shows up to fund the reconstruction after the Nidoking rampage, by the way? Arianna Dupree.

Later, Beth and Matt show up to the gym, challenging Furn. He makes an offhand remark about Beth's resemblance to a girl who had saved the town, so Beth asks her name; Furn responds with Sierra, and mentions that she went missing.

Beth and Matt finish up the battle, then go to fervently search for their disappeared sister/friend, of whom they cannot contact over the phone or through any other possible way. They manage to locate a old detective who speaks in strange language and calls himself, "Looker". Looker is a local retiree, but has come out of his rest for the new Team Rocket case, and locates through some old friends an old abandoned base that suddenly came back to life in the Sevii Islands.

So with their gratitude (and a bit of their money) toward "Looker", the two rush off toward that base. They are convinced that the new Rockets have kidnapped Sierra. In this base, they run into the three Tierras, who try to stop them.

They are captured and thrown into a jail, while their boss, acclaimed as, "Tierra Radiance" (TR! It was all a ploy, the Team Rocket part, to scare people and generally leave them with as little competition as possiable), tries to decide what to do with them. They recognize this face as the world-famous Arianna Dupree. Arianna decides in the end that their punishment is to be executed. Tierra I, who Arianna refers to as Nicole, and her Bisharp are given the job.

Tierra II is left to guard them while they wait for Nicole to come. He introduces himself as Roy Undelle, and offers them a chance to escape and go after their Pokemon. Roy, who in the past worked as a behavioral analyst for the Guardia Civil, Kanto's FBI, tells his own profile- an organized narcissistic psychopath. He loves the thrills. Such an organized execution is revealed to be, to him... boring. So he hands Matt the jail cell keys, makes Matt punch him in the face to break his nose, and watches them escape.

They manage to sneak round the underground jail cells a bit and find their Pokeballs, only to be confronted by Nicole, Tierra I. Matt offers himself to battle her. They nod to each other, and Beth sneaks off with a bit of distraction from Matt.

Matt's battle is difficult. Pretty much because of that Articuno Nicole is using. He manages a win, but is down to one, exhausted Pokemon because of it. He rushes off after Beth.

Beth, in the mean time, manages to find the cell in which Sierra was indeed being held, an early capture for disrupting their plans on Cinnabar with a certain rampaging Nidoking. After defeating a grunt in charge of guarding the cell, she frees Sierra; but the noise draws in Tierra II, Roy Undelle. Sierra offers to do this one, while Beth reluctantly agrees, as she knows her sister and sees no point in arguing with a stubborn personality.

Sierra's battle is also difficult. She had her Pokeballs in the desk drawer of the room that her cell was in, so they were an easy find, but the not-so-easy part was that Zapdos Roy has. He reveals that Team Radiance, or TR- or, Team rocket-, used control chips that Tierra III, their technology expert, created. They have control of all three legendary birds. Sierra wins also, but with the same predicament as the last one to go through this trial.

Beth is the one to finally encounter Tierra III, who reveals her name to be Victoria. Of course, she has Moltres, and Beth and her fight fiercely; it ends in a tie. Beth's Blissey helps heal two of her team members, at the cost of basically draining all of her energy, leaving her unable to battle.

Being the only one with more than one functioning Pokemon, Beth is left to battle Arianna Dupree. The backstory of this rich girl is revealed.

Arianna Dupree was the daughter of Richard Dupree, a man who once monopolized all of the Kanto region's 'marts. Richard was a cold man who's thoughts were business; and sex, so much to the point of using his daughter for it. She was molested by him, and her mother did nothing about it. She left home at an earlier age than most did of her class, at around thirteen. She was living the life of a normal trainer for a while, conditioning her to that lifestyle; but when her father died of 'mysterious' circumstances, which she identifies to be her own fault, the inheritance money is just about enough to feed her for life.

She wants more.

So, bitter and angry with the world, and greedy, she begins to gather people. The first major promise of this group was Nicole Hendricks, a single mother with a three-year old son. She offers her a spot in a criminal gang for protection of her son, consistent pay, and the mother-daughter relationship in which this girl craves. She lost her mother early, and her dad was a deserter. The girl all-too-eagerly plain ol' ditches her son, and agrees.

The next person she confronts is a man named Roy Undelle. A former cop gone bad, she digs in some dirt and realizes that this man has taken quite a few lives- not all in justifiable spirit, either. Both with this dirt as bribery and using this man's thrill seeking wishes, she convinces him to join.

Finally, the third and most important person was Victoria Smith. Victoria grew up in relative normalcy- except for the whole, 'Hey, daddy hits mommy some nights when his breath stinks and she apologizes for it. That's weird' trauma. Victoria simply fell in love with technology, and that's what gave her the appeal that Arianna sought out. She joins with little to no problem.

With these three people as underlings, she begins to plan. Plan, grow and plot for her revenge against the world.

The battle is long and difficult. While she holds no legendary Pokemon, Arianna is an excellent battler with skilled and strong Pokemon. Beth loses.

Sierra comes into the picture next. Manages to defeat one or two of Arianna's Pokemon with her exhausted Venusaur, but ends up getting all of her team taken out, too.

Matt also defeats one or two of her Pokemon. This narrows it down to one Pokemon on Arianna's side, and none on the kid's.

What saves their lives then is simple. Furn, hearing about this base from Looker, gathers Erika and Janine, the two leaders also affected by the plans of Team Radiance. They, having had the opposition cleared, rushed through easily and found the children on their last leg, about to get their butts stomped into the ground by a Rampardos.

Arianna Dupree is defeated. In the typical cliche of a badguy, she pulls out the good ol' self-destruct button.

Within three minutes, the old base will self-destruct. With the help of Janine's two Scythers and their agility attack, they make it out in time.

And from here on out, story is typical rip-off from Kanto plotline. Matt and Beth fight one more time, Matt loses; Beth goes onto the Indigo Plateau after winning the eighth badge, and gets through Victory Road (barely), fighting the Elite Four and finding...

dun dun dun, Sierra as the champion, having reached the position just an hour before her. The two fight intensely, and the only plot-twist is that Beth does end up losing. Beth goes back to Pallet to live as quietly as possible (beating up a major organization sort of puts some press on you, though luckily Sierra's championship does take some of the spotlight) with her father, letting Sierra have her fun up at the Indigo Plateau.

End of story.

So, any major kinks? I would appreciate quick response if possible, as you know... I only have 'till Sunday in order to really work out the majority of the stuff. =p Then I gotta get 'ta writing. Kinks in the later plot, though, can be done a few days after, of course...

Any feedback at all would be appreciate, though. :p

*phew* Spent all day writing all this up.
 

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I'm confused about my Pokemon Adventures story. I don't know what should happen when Paul and Kairi get to the Viridian City Pokemon center. I don't want it to be what happened on the show. My sister suggested that the Center loses power and there's a Pokemon that's real sick and could die if power isn't returned soon. And Kairi and Paul help Nurse Joy treat it. Is that a good idea? Would Paul really do something like this?
 
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That's still rather close to what happened on the show. Team Rocket's attack cut the power to the Center, and the characters were worried about the Pokemon at the Center. The same thing happened in another episode of the show, where the power of the city went out, and there were plenty of sick Pokemon at the center. Ash and friends had to go to the power plant and return power to the city, or else the Pokemon would not get better.

I'm not really sure how Paul would react in that situation. I want to say that he'd scoff at the idea of helping a Pokemon that's weak, but then again, I'm really not an expert on Paul's character.

What result do you need from this chapter? I mean like what information do the characters get from this event, or how do the characters change, or how does the plot need to move on from this? Because there might be a way to get the result you want without using an attack on the Pokemon Center. If that makes sense.
 

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There is no attack. I was thinking Team Rocket didn't cut the power. It just went off cause of a huge storm. And my point is I'm trying to show readers that deep down inside even though Paul can be a jerk sometimes, he does really care about people and Pokemon.
 
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