The Winds And Her Smile

Um...hi...
It's been a while ever since I wrote a poem...
So...I hope you guys like this poem I wrote about a special person whom I miss in my life...

-Winds and her smile-

As I stood atop a hill
I felt the wind blow through my hair
It made me think of her
And of things my heart couldn?t bear


The wind reminded me of her smile
A simple thing made in many ways
So beautiful and so innocent
It?s the thing that made my days


The time I remember with her
Was the time when she sat next to me
With her long flowing hair untied
She was like a bird, oh so free

She?s different than any other girl
Her smile is so pure and so soothing
So gentle and so serene
So na?ve and so heart warming


What I want to see in this world
Is to once more see that smile
It makes my heart soar
And living life worthwhile


Winds and her smile
Oh so simple things in this Earth
They?ve been there together
Ever since our birth

They are the things that I love
Within my whole entire life
The free winds and her gentle smile
They make my mind with less strife

That was very deep and emotional.Great Job.

Waii~!

That was so sweet! I <3 how you expressed your fondness over her; it was so touching. I'd really love to see how she reacts.

And, as Kelsey said, there was no spelling errors and this poem is just so heartwarming! <3 I simply can't stand not re-reading it. =3

I love the poem good job ^^ keep goin ^^

Ah...thanks so much, everyone! ^^;;

For a moment I thought that thread won't be discovered...>.>

When a good poem is seen it's discovered.

Wow that thats nicely written, its easily seen that its from inside, with the words that you chose to the way that you wrote it. No complaints here, that was very good, and like I say, hard to critique because you're just writing what you feel.

Thank you...
I did my best when writing this poem...even though I did it in a short time... ^^;;

It doesn't matter how long they take. Frosty once said to be that Ozymandias, supposedly the greatest poem ever written, was written in 15 minutes whilst the author was drunk. He gave this big long lecture to JA about it :P Most of my poems don't take long to write... although I am blowing my own trumpet XD As long sa htey come from the heart - I hate using that word when describing things like these - they'll be fine in the end

oni flygon said:

Ah...thanks so much, everyone! ^^;;

For a moment I thought that thread won't be discovered...>.>

Click to expand...

Awwwws, but how could it not be discovered? <3 This is a great poem, not to mention I'm in here 24/7 anyways. XD So I was only bound to discover it at some point. ^o^

~Kelsey

As was I to discover this poem, and so I have. Great poem.

I love it. =3 I love your choice of words, which expresses your feelings for this special person in your life. =) Just beautiful. n_n