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Old August 5th, 2010, 07:40 AM
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Magink is an incredibly powerful book of spells, for it contains every spell ever written/made. It needs seven keys to open it, which are spread out throughout the land of Farlock. This book was made by the Elders strictly for use in great peril. As the Keys are being gathered by the King for use to control or destory Farlock it's up to a small rebellion to gather the Keys for themselves and destroy Magink once and for all. (It can only be destroyed by reading a spell from the back of the book.)

I know that the plot line is in really simplistic terms, and I'm usually better with my vocabulary, but I'm really tired.

Anyway; what do you guys think of the plot line; that's what I'm asking about?
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Old August 5th, 2010, 04:43 PM
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OK, I'm kinda new to the Pokemon fanfic world so I'm just wondering if this idea of mine isn't all boring and stuff...

So, the plot of my story is that there is a Chikorita who is abandoned by her Trainer for unknown reasons. She is then found by a group of Bug and Grass-type Pokemon that call themselves the Bug Brigade, and they promise her that they will return Chikorita to her Trainer if she helps them in their quest to take down Team Rocket, because they think that the humans don't really care about Team Rocket's plans.

Ok, the summary's pretty...bad. That's why I need some ideas
Well, I guess you should consider why certain things happen - such as why the trainer would abandon a Chikorita (a reputable rare Pokemon, etc). Is it because the trainer is stupid/bad with treating Pokemon right, or did something happen that separated them and the trainer also wants the Chikorita back? That could add some interesting dynamics to the story... I like the idea about Pokemon banding together by themselves to take down TR as well - could make for an interesting story. Might also want to consider in what way is TR being bad (or is this loosely based on GSC/HGSS?) and how they plan to go about stopping whatever it is TR are doing, and what characters make up said Pokemon. I guess simply just expand on it - the basis is certainly promising though.

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The story begins on a planet called Senterra, which is actually Latin for “Old Earth”. The reason before this naming is because at one point in time, long ago, Earth as we know it was actually the combination of two separate heavenly bodies, one called Vita Corpus (Latin for Magic Body, which became Senterra), and the other, Mors Corpus (Latin for Dead Body, and which is now the Earth we reside on today). When the two worlds were conjoined, civilization thrived on the existence of magic, and magitechnology. Though not everyone could use it, those who could were revered as wise and powerful beings, or Sorcerer, as us Earthbound call them, (Earthbounds being those without magical capabilities). However, some non-magic users began to become jealous of the Sorcerer’s, so, using technology, and machinery to counter their magic, war broke out on Senterra between the Sorcerers and the Earthbound.

The two ended the era of peace, and segregation was born. The two societies were separated. The war, which would be known on Senterra as the “Arcadian Birth War”, went on for many seasons. To end the conflict, both began development on super weapons, which would destroy the other faction. The Earthbound developed the first nuclear weapon with their alliance with science and technology, and the Sorcerer’s began creating a great beast with their alliance with magic. The name of the beast would be known as Ragnapecus, (a combination of the words “Ragnarok”, and “Pecus”, Latin for tamed beast).

The Earthbound launched their nuclear weapon, but it was countered with the release of Ragnapecus, which engulfed the nuke. However, the nuclear radiation spoiled the beast’s radiant shell, turning it into a monstrous demon, known as Ragnafera (Combination of “Ragnarok” and “Fera”, Latin for wild beast). Ragnafera began an uncontrollable rampage, destroying both the forces of the Sorcerer’s and the Earthbound. Desperate to stop Ragnafera, the two came together once more, and decided to separate Senterra into two heavenly bodies instead of one, splitting up Ragnafera’s being with them. The essence of Ragnapecus would reside with the Sorcerer’s, on their world, Pecusterra, and the Earthbound would adopt the destructive Ragnafera, but a concealed form, which would only be released if the wickedness of man reached it’s own. The Earthbound would reside on a body known as Feraterra, but eventually, as the knowledge of their origin on Senterra was lost to the ages, a new name was adopted. Earth.

The Senterrians thrived as a people, and were easily capable of reconstructing their civilizations on a new planet with the use of magic. However, the Feraterrians began civilization over anew as well, but took longer to rebuild their civilizations. However, as the prophecy of Ragnafera had been written, the sin and wickedness on Feraterra eventually began to grow, and it seemed that every time civilization began to prosper, war would only destroy it again, forcing man to begin all over again.

Eventually, the two worlds distanced more and more from one another, until Feraterra, at this point, Earth, completely forgot its origins and the relationship with Pecusterra. It stayed that way for millenniums… but unbeknown to the Earthlings of contemporary days, soon, Ragnafera would be awakened from his slumber on earth, and not even Pecusterra would be safe from its wrath.
Hmm, on the face of it it seems all right - you have the intro set out pretty much it seems - seems to be more an alternate universe as well what with the different planets, etc. Am curious to how it gets awoken and how it is stopped/attempted to be stopped if that is the case. Am also a little bit iffy about how a nuclear weapon turned the summoned beast into a wild one - maybe focus more on magic affecting it or explain how magitechnology makes it 'different'? I can't say I'm an expert on nuclear weapons but I wouldn't imagine the regular kind can do that sort of thing. =p Make sure that much is clear, I suggest.

I like the use of latin naming as well, although this suggests that the anicent cilivisations were Romans or the sort, so is this a name they came up with, or what people on 'earth' later on end up calling it? I guess this also calls into question when does the stuff following the intro occur - present, or future, or just a different Earth completely?

Also 'Earthbound' makes me think of a game 9Mother series, etc). =p

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Setting and Background

Rise of the Earthbound takes place in an alternate reality of Earth, where back in the time before advanced technology magic and sorcery actually existed and thrived, but with the progression of industry and mechanics, the art of magic was slowly lost and forgotten by all but a few remnants, known as “The Remnants”, respectably. [/FONT]

In the year 2084 the all of civilization was destroyed at the hands of nuclear holocaust caused by the quake of World War III, which would forever be remembered as “The Great War”. Survivors of The Great War scattered throughout the remains of the Earth, and began tribes and packs, and slowly began rebuilding civilization through their own separate means; however, there were two general ways of living. There were those who tried to revive the power of technology and machines, and there were those who tried to revive the far more ancient traditions of utilizing the lost art of magic, which they found possible through the teachings of Remnants, and the discovery of lost remains of magical society, revealed by the removal of such things as certain cities and foundations that took the place of where nature once flourished.

Those who used magic to run their culture were now also called Remnants, and those who tried to use machinery and other related means were referred to as “Machinas”. In order to further emulate the former world before the Great War, the tribes of the Machinas began to converge to form cities and nations. Though things began small, over the course of many decades, centuries even, they began to prove successful. The many cities took the form of steampunk, and eventually they formed a government too. And the government was led by a president, who led the nations through democracy.

The Remnants took a different approach. Their societies remained separated in different tribes and small camps, but they remained connected with one another, and were free to interact with one another through forms of trade and more. They were governed by the “Seven Sages”, elders who were all either original Remnants, or descendants of them. The Seven Sages didn’t truly bare any control, but they were revered and respected for their immense knowledge and wisdom.

Peace, more or less, was maintained for hundreds of years, until the year 567 AGW (which stood for After Great War), when a new president was appointed to lead the Machinas, a man named Alexei Balk, took office. This changed things drastically. Eventually, Balk became more of a dictator than president, and waged war against the Remnants after convincing his people that they were to blame for the collapse of the world and triggering the Great War. Though the Remnants were reluctant to fight back, they eventually had no choice, and a battle that would be remembered as the “Balk War” began. It lasted eight months before the Seven Sages came up with a resolution. Using their magic, the Remnants decided to end the war by raising the continents of their land into the sky, making the homes of the Remnants inaccessible to the Remnants. From then on, the Machinas would be known as the “Earthbound”, and connection between the Remnants and Earthbound ceased from then on.
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Hmm, post-apocalyptic, I see. Interesting as well, although for instance things to consider is why Balk wanted to invade/wage war with the other country - especially given the GW and what it resulted in - what is his motivation? Want of power, or does he believe his own tales that he told his people? And also is that how the story ends, or is there more to come after that (say those Earthbound people start making flying machines?)

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InuYasha, Naraku Reborn: Based on the anime. This time things are going to be different. After realizing it was the jewel that was the villian, and it had been controling Naraku all this time, and that his true wish was just to be with Kikyo meaning Naraku was never evil at all Kagome makes a better wish this time. Her wish,"Bring Naraku and Kikyo back to life then disappear forever." Now Naraku gets a second chance at life, to start over a new beginning. And he plans on spending it with the love of his life, Kikyo, who realizes Naraku's feelings and falls head over hills in love, back.
I have no idea on this fandom, so... can't say much especially as this didn't tell me much about who is who, etc. =/ However I'd note that you'd want to check that this is what these characters would be likely to do (research them, etc) - how is this 'different' from the anime - are the charatcers acting differently, or is it a case of 'what if this event happened like this'?
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Magink is an incredibly powerful book of spells, for it contains every spell ever written/made. It needs seven keys to open it, which are spread out throughout the land of Farlock. This book was made by the Elders strictly for use in great peril. As the Keys are being gathered by the King for use to control or destory Farlock it's up to a small rebellion to gather the Keys for themselves and destroy Magink once and for all. (It can only be destroyed by reading a spell from the back of the book.)

I know that the plot line is in really simplistic terms, and I'm usually better with my vocabulary, but I'm really tired.

Anyway; what do you guys think of the plot line; that's what I'm asking about?
Simplistic, yes, but hey the basis of many stories tends to be basic. =p I guess just spend time expanding on each part - such as why the king wants to destory Farlock with this book (and how say the rebellion find out about this), what the land of Farlock is like, etc. Also I wonder how people also know that there is a spell to destory the book written in it itself - seems a bit odd, so some thinking about that (and not necessarily much I suppose) may be warrented. The seven keys things sounds like a Plot Coupon *insert warning about tvtropes link here* but that ain't a necessarily bad thing, as long as you keep the story from being a simple 'key get - go to next key - get it - etc' and all. Also reminds me about Deltora Quest there somewhat, heh. Now I;m going to go have nostalgia about that.
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Old August 6th, 2010, 06:50 PM
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I've come up with a fan fic idea that My Friends find very interesting this is it

We meet Callum Birch the nephew of professor birch from hoenn,we learn his father was a professor and was killed in a experiment gone wrong so to escape the painful memories the family moves to jhoto.He is at his house in new bark town after defeating all the gyms in Jhoto we are introduced to his twin sisters who are starting there journey and his mom who is traveling to hoenn to meet with old friends and family we then meet all of the family's Pokemon. i don't want to give much away but his sister and his mamoswine are attacked by a vicious larvatar it is defeated and they return to his house professes elm and his family come to greet the family and Elm gives detail to why the larvatar may have attacked but can not come up with a plausible reason.some diolouge happens and his sisters get a pokedex each, and Callum has his upgraded everyone goes there separate ways after Callum Defeats Lyra Elm in a battle he is on his way to the pokemon league

on the way he stops at a small island something happens thats a big part to the story and he meets Agatha and Toby his new friend.after the exciting events they stay at her house over night and leave for the league in the morning. at the mouth of victory road police inform everyone (about 60 people)there were Pokemon in the caves attacking trainers and that only a few days ago a person was killed ,mass hysteria takes place and many aspiring trainers don't take the risk and only about 30 trainers are left then we meet Callum's old friend Gwen a Girl he recently caught up with in blackthorn the 3 of them travel in the cave together (hooray for the cliche traveling trio)stuff happens in the cave i don't want to give away and there out more spoliers and there all in the tournament with the elite four. Callum is up againtest will and as he is about to defeat wills last pkemon there interupted by what everyone thinks is a small earthquake a few moments later a tyranitar breaks through the wall of stadium and starts killing people.

I dont want to give much away for the rest of this but I'll say this they travel and find Callum's sisters stuff gose down in the ice path and they go back to new bark where
professor birch,oak and elm all have some news a virus has infected Pokemon in all four regions .
this virus is the experiment that went wrong and killed callum's father we learn they were trying to make the "Pokerus" virus stronger but it went wrong and was not contained although minor at first,.the virus has spreed and evolved into something worse of the course of 4 years(we learn more about the virus),professor oaks adds an application to all pokedex everywhere by satellite that tracks the 4 stages(you learn all this) of the virus and the strongest readings seems to come from cerulean cave.some epic stuff happens we learn about whats happened and tie up all loose end through out the story.So they have cut of the head of the virus and try to cure those Pokemon already infected.but can they cure them all?

It should be way better once its all written out
It rated "R" for blood and gore a lot of it -.-
its horror/adventure/mystery
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Old August 7th, 2010, 04:52 AM
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Meh, I figure I've lurked long enough, so I'll just get down to penning a short story. But before I fully explain the details of the plot, lemme lapse into a brief spot of excessively foreboding and needlessly dramatic dust-cover prose:

DADADADUMMM

***

The story takes place in the Sinnoh region, but not a Sinnoh region any of us would recognize. For starters, the grand cities of the Pokemon universe – Hearthome, Jubilife, Sunyshore – do not exist here. There are instead huge cathedral-like spires that scatter the landscape, intimidating testaments to the power of the all-mighty Team that built them. There are massive stretches of wasteland, veritable seas of dust and roiling sandstorms interspersed with mercifully untouched swaths of sparking green forest. There are the oppressors, staring at the world with steely eyes through their towering glass balconies, and the resistance, fighting a battle to preserve their homeland against an enemy whose ambitions they hardly even understand.

And throughout this land lives not humans, nor Pokemon, but a combination between the two which either, individually, would regard at best as utterly bizarre.

In this Sinnoh lives the Pokemorphs.

***

There, got that outta my system.

And yeah, there WILL be Pokemorphs in this story. I make no apologies for that. But don't worry - I won't try to explain their existence in this fanfic beyond the simple ditty "they're there because they're there". So no cliched laborotary scenes or weird interspecies... relations. I'll just leave it at that.

On to the actual details:

In this story, Team Galactic are the main antagonists. For a while they have known of the presence of dimensions outside the Pokemorph world, and, as is typical for any evil team, are determined to achieve profit from this knowledge. To that end they are constructing a device that will allow linkage to the human and Pokemon worlds.

However, Giratina, one of the legendary trio and a backstage ruler of TG, has a far more sinister hidden motive. He wants to destroy said dimensions using the device, believing that the Pokemorph dimension he singlehandedly created is by far the greatest; his magnum opus. None of the TG execs know about this except for one – a mysterious Infernape, a junior exec yet strangely influential, who appeared under mysterious circumstances and rapidly rose to power.

Dialga and Palkia, realizing the tremendous danger Giratina poses, are desperate to find a way to stop him, as their powers combined are just barely a match for Giratina’s. They conclude that introducing a champion to the dimension, thus giving themselves a clear physical presence on the plane, would be the most effective way to take down TG, allowing them to focus their efforts on bringing down Giratina themselves.
(Each member of the legendary trio is able to physically exist in the dimension, but only for a short period of time. Introducing a champion into the plane is the most effective way to exert control while conserving energy.)

It is under these tumultuous circumstances that a young Turtwig finds himself trapped in this strange alternate-reality Sinnoh. He comes originally from our world, the world exclusively inhabited by the human race, and is both amazed and bewildered by his recognition of the Pokemon traits he sees in his rescuers. But how could that be? After all, those only existed in the diminutive metallic box he often found himself buried in…

Oops, lapsed back into dramatic dust-cover mode again at the end there. Sincerest of apologies.

Nothing in this post should be considered part of the actual story; it's more like a preview of things to come.

EDIT: Also, thanks so much to the mods for helping me move this to the appropriate section of the forum. I really should read the rules properly next time...

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Old August 7th, 2010, 06:06 PM
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alright here i go XD

I've come up with a fan fic idea that My Friends find very interesting this is it

We meet Callum Birch the nephew of professor birch from hoenn,we learn his father was a professor and was killed in a experiment gone wrong so to escape the painful memories the family moves to jhoto.He is at his house in new bark town after defeating all the gyms in Jhoto we are introduced to his twin sisters who are starting there journey and his mom who is traveling to hoenn to meet with old friends and family we then meet all of the family's Pokemon. i don't want to give much away but his sister and his mamoswine are attacked by a vicious larvatar it is defeated and they return to his house professes elm and his family come to greet the family and Elm gives detail to why the larvatar may have attacked but can not come up with a plausible reason.some diolouge happens and his sisters get a pokedex each, and Callum has his upgraded everyone goes there separate ways after Callum Defeats Lyra Elm in a battle he is on his way to the pokemon league

on the way he stops at a small island something happens thats a big part to the story and he meets Agatha and Toby his new friend.after the exciting events they stay at her house over night and leave for the league in the morning. at the mouth of victory road police inform everyone (about 60 people)there were Pokemon in the caves attacking trainers and that only a few days ago a person was killed ,mass hysteria takes place and many aspiring trainers don't take the risk and only about 30 trainers are left then we meet Callum's old friend Gwen a Girl he recently caught up with in blackthorn the 3 of them travel in the cave together (hooray for the cliche traveling trio)stuff happens in the cave i don't want to give away and there out more spoliers and there all in the tournament with the elite four. Callum is up againtest will and as he is about to defeat wills last pkemon there interupted by what everyone thinks is a small earthquake a few moments later a tyranitar breaks through the wall of stadium and starts killing people.

I dont want to give much away for the rest of this but I'll say this they travel and find Callum's sisters stuff gose down in the ice path and they go back to new bark where
professor birch,oak and elm all have some news a virus has infected Pokemon in all four regions .
this virus is the experiment that went wrong and killed callum's father we learn they were trying to make the "Pokerus" virus stronger but it went wrong and was not contained although minor at first,.the virus has spreed and evolved into something worse of the course of 4 years(we learn more about the virus),professor oaks adds an application to all pokedex everywhere by satellite that tracks the 4 stages(you learn all this) of the virus and the strongest readings seems to come from cerulean cave.some epic stuff happens we learn about whats happened and tie up all loose end through out the story.So they have cut of the head of the virus and try to cure those Pokemon already infected.but can they cure them all?

It should be way better once its all written out
It rated "R" for blood and gore a lot of it -.-
its horror/adventure/mystery
To be very frank with you, this story sounds pretty much like any typical Journeyfic with some blood and gore thrown in for no real reason other than to make it seem edgier and more mature. You stated yourself in the description that you'll be sticking largely to formula ("hooray for chilche travelling stuff"), but try to avoid that as much as possible; it really turns readers off your story when they know how everything's gonna turn out.

However, that's all I can glean from this brief description. I'm sure, as you are, that the story would look much better written out fully. Your idea of a virus driving Pokemon isn't necessarily unique, but written well it could make for an interesting plot. I would suggest you streamline the overall plot a bit by removing focus from the generic Journeyfic elements and focusing instead on the horror elements of the story, as they would probably strike people as more unique, if nothing else.

And also, one last note: make sure you use proper spelling and grammar in your story. Just spending a few seconds on Spellcheck will make your story look that much more professional.
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Old August 8th, 2010, 07:20 AM
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To be very frank with you, this story sounds pretty much like any typical Journeyfic with some blood and gore thrown in for no real reason other than to make it seem edgier and more mature. You stated yourself in the description that you'll be sticking largely to formula ("hooray for chilche travelling stuff"), but try to avoid that as much as possible; it really turns readers off your story when they know how everything's gonna turn out.

However, that's all I can glean from this brief description. I'm sure, as you are, that the story would look much better written out fully. Your idea of a virus driving Pokemon isn't necessarily unique, but written well it could make for an interesting plot. I would suggest you streamline the overall plot a bit by removing focus from the generic Journeyfic elements and focusing instead on the horror elements of the story, as they would probably strike people as more unique, if nothing else.

And also, one last note: make sure you use proper spelling and grammar in your story. Just spending a few seconds on Spellcheck will make your story look that much more professional.

Yeah I'm not so great with descriptions,Which is why the virus driving Pokemon dose sound overused but they way I've thought it out it quite detailed,as for the cliche journey thing its only the 3 friends traveling.For
spelling and grammar I'll definitely make sure to do that in the future.
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The little plot Buneary I've had nagging me has evolved into a fully fledged plot Lopunny that had taking to dancing around my head occasionally with characters following along behind. So I've come here to get feedback on the idea.

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So the idea is, an alternate universe Pokemon fiction. It's set in a world that is similar our own, except with more advanced technologies that cater to the pokemon and their trainers. Pokemon do replace animals within this world and therefore, most societies choose to find alternate food sources.

In this world, battling is a major televised sport. Trainers partake in official tournaments and battles to receive points and after a certain number of points, the trainer will increase in rank. Due to events of pokemon terrorism in recent years, the government has encouraged the growth of official tournaments, having matches on television almost daily. This, in turn, has created a wealth of young trainers aspiring to reach the coveted Pro rank of the battling tiers.

We're introduced to a young couple, Ethan is a singer in a small-time band and the other, Leon, is an aspiring trainer of the fifth rank. Whilst Ethan watches, Leon battles in the “Psionics Tournament” which will allow him to receive enough points to go up in rank. Leon is declared the winner after a harsh battle for first place. After the tournament, Ethan rushes to congratulate his boyfriend, only to be told by a security guard that he is in talks with the tournament’s organiser.

Three days later, and there’s no sign of Leon anywhere. After reporting it to the police, Ethan is told Leon left the country, just yesterday, on a commercial flight. Originally bewildered, Ethan is convinced something must be up. Determined, he sets out to find his boyfriend.

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Basically, I need someone to poke holes in this idea so I can address any issues before I really flesh it out.

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Pokemon, Shocking Love: This is my fanfic about my two Pichu OCs on my art board. Two Pichus, one abandoned by it's trainer, the other had it's family killed by Pokemon Hunters. What will happen with a shiny female Pichu who had it's family killed by Pokemon Hunters, meets a male Pichu who was abandoned by it's trainer for being weak? For now this is a one shot, unless I come up with some huge ideas.

So for this I need help coming up with a good plot idea.
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Pokemon, Shocking Love: This is my fanfic about my two Pichu OCs on my art board. Two Pichus, one abandoned by it's trainer, the other had it's family killed by Pokemon Hunters. What will happen with a shiny female Pichu who had it's family killed by Pokemon Hunters, meets a male Pichu who was abandoned by it's trainer for being weak? For now this is a one shot, unless I come up with some huge ideas.

So for this I need help coming up with a good plot idea.
Well you'll need far more than you gave. Why did the trainer abandon their Pichu? Obviously it's going to be weak, being the first stage of a three-stage Pokemon, and if the trainer has any common sense they'll know this.

And what do you mean by 'Pokemon Hunters'? Are these poachers who take Pokemon from the wild and sell them to the highest bidder? If so, why would they kill two perfectly good Pokemon? Or are they actual hunters, who kill Pokemon for sustenance?

Why does the fact that the second Pichu is shiny have any significance in the story? And where is the plot? Having the relationship between the characters take center stage makes for a weak piece of fiction, you'll need to find some way to inject some conflict.
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I'm a big fan of fantasy and magic, but I can't write them to save my life. >.< The major problem is that it's hard for me to plot my stories out. I have a couple of ideas, but I really don't know what to do with them. I hardly have enough to write a story, but it seems like I'm just too lazy to take the time to plot the whole thing out. I mean, most of my 'idea's are actually just concepts, and I actually have no idea what the main plot or characters are. I don't expect to get a substantial plot out of this, but I'd appreciate it if somebody just gave me a few pointers or recommendations.

Idea #1: The Book of Spells contains spells and incantations. There are 100 pages, and ten spells per page. The Book of Summons contains the list of supernatural creatures you have signed contracts with. You can sign up to 500 contracts. Then there's a third book, a book used to store magical items and such, though I haven't come up with a name for it yet. Each mage starting out will get one spell, one contract and one item. The first space on the first page of every Book is framed with fancy gold curves. That's where they go. The first spell is nearly always unique to the user. The first contract you sign is different than others, because it's a blood contract, so the beast is bound to you for life. Every time you master a spell, it becomes engraved in your Book of Spells. The Books are written in an ancient rune language (haven't found a name yet). Each mage has their own Frequency (not sure about this name either) of Resonance. Resonance is when you pulse your magic through something, and Frequency is like fingerprints of your magic, unique to a single person. The person's Frequency is inscribed in runes on the cover of the Books. Only the user's Frequency can unlock the Books. The Books are white and colourless when you receive them. When you unlock them for the first time, it takes a huge burst of magic. If you manage to unlock them, they'll get their own colour, depending on the branch and type of your magic. It is the goal of each mage to complete their Books. Everybody has their Books, as they are part of one's soul, but not everyone can unlock them. That means only those with a powerful and pure Resonance can become mages. That's pretty much all I have right now.

Ugh, I have to sleep now, I'll post the rest of my ideas tomorrow morning...
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It is the distant future and humanity, who has now colonized multiple planets is struggling for survival as humans and Pokemon unite to fight against a growing alien threat, which is led by an ancient Pokemon. Seven unlikely trainers are conscripted into the army as supersoldiers.

Rated PG-15 for Violence, Blood etc.

What do you think, it's still under dev. etc.
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i've been thinking about plotting this out for a while,
an action/comedy about ninjas, god knows if i'll finish it, but i hope i do .

Plot Summary:
A fourteen year old boy named by the prophecy has come to America in search of two brothers who are needed to prevent the Moritoki Clan from obtaining the key to unlocking the supernatural abilities performed by ninjas. The fourteen year old boy has been trained since birth in the area of ninjitsu, with expertise in Intonjutsu and Bojutsu, as well as being competent in the other sixteen branches of ninjitsu. As most of his life has been spent training to fulfill the prophecy, he has been deprived a free childhood. The boy finds the two brothers he needs to locate, and prepares them for their battle with spiritual, mental and physical training. While the care-free brothers learn responsibility and discipline, the young boy learns how to have a fun and enjoyable life. After the training is complete the three stake out the Moritoki Clan and after a heated battle stop them from obtaining the supernatural abilities.

Of course, a little suspension of disbelief will be needed to overcome the feeling of absence with adults and that the fact the brothers are older than their mentor will be pretty odd. I also plan to make the fourteen year old boy to act like a mentor who gives the cold-shoulder, but as the story progresses he begins to care for his students. Same with the students, I will make them so they act disrespectful to their mentor, are uncooperative, they won't trust their mentor and don't take the ninjitsu to seriously, but then as the story progresses they respect their mentor and have more trust and co-operation.

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i'm also trying to cover all the emotions and etc for a teenager, as there is the whole puberty thing, and the fact that this is aimed for teenagers, i haven't focused much on adults.
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Okay I want to do a Fan-Fic which kind of revolves around my save game of Pokemon Pearl, not exactly the same as the game story mind you.
So this kid is turning fifteen, he is getting his Pokemon Lisence... bla bla bla... visits Prof. Rowan... bla bla bla... gets a Turtwig and starts his journey.
Accompanying him is his female friend (I haven't decided if they have known each other since they were young or if they meet for the first time in Prof. Rowans lab). They are together for the entire series (which won't be as big as the Anime!!), which will revolve around a mix of the Games and the Anime.
Anyway they go off on their journey together, his mission is to beat the Elite Four, her mission is to fill up the Pokedex for Prof. Rowan.
They also meet a third companion (who is still in the works. Canon character suggestions are welcome!)
There may also be a rival, and a youngster trainer who meets them along the way but doesn't stay with them

But what I really want to lead this all up to is a bigger story involving Palkia, Dialga and Giratina and the Distortion World. Then Arceus getting starts to get frustrated by Pokemon Trainers, and starts to pull all of the Legendary Pokemon out of their habitats and tries to start a war.
Then after these events the main character continues his journey to the Elite Four, challenges them and then off to.....

What do you think? It is very blan at the moment, and I need to do some serious character building, and episode outlines.
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i've been thinking about plotting this out for a while,
an action/comedy about ninjas, god knows if i'll finish it, but i hope i do .

Plot Summary:
A fourteen year old boy named by the prophecy has come to America in search of two brothers who are needed to prevent the Moritoki Clan from obtaining the key to unlocking the supernatural abilities performed by ninjas. The fourteen year old boy has been trained since birth in the area of ninjitsu, with expertise in Intonjutsu and Bojutsu, as well as being competent in the other sixteen branches of ninjitsu. As most of his life has been spent training to fulfill the prophecy, he has been deprived a free childhood. The boy finds the two brothers he needs to locate, and prepares them for their battle with spiritual, mental and physical training. While the care-free brothers learn responsibility and discipline, the young boy learns how to have a fun and enjoyable life. After the training is complete the three stake out the Moritoki Clan and after a heated battle stop them from obtaining the supernatural abilities.

Of course, a little suspension of disbelief will be needed to overcome the feeling of absence with adults and that the fact the brothers are older than their mentor will be pretty odd. I also plan to make the fourteen year old boy to act like a mentor who gives the cold-shoulder, but as the story progresses he begins to care for his students. Same with the students, I will make them so they act disrespectful to their mentor, are uncooperative, they won't trust their mentor and don't take the ninjitsu to seriously, but then as the story progresses they respect their mentor and have more trust and co-operation.

-

i'm also trying to cover all the emotions and etc for a teenager, as there is the whole puberty thing, and the fact that this is aimed for teenagers, i haven't focused much on adults.
Some focus on the prophecy here would be something to consider as well - where did it come from, and any reason for it to have 'spoken' about these characters in particular? And how does this 14 year old know of the Moritoki clan?

I would also think that if you were to write this (it seems like it has potential) you'd also have to look into ninjitsu fairly extensively for the accuracy (e.g. training techniques, attacks/style the art tends to involve/use... I would also think a suspension of belief may be needed for the bit concerning the key to supernatural abilities - that may need to be particular well-established too - make sure it doesn't seem like a wishy-washy reason for the Moritoki clan to be the 'evil team' or whatnot.
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Okay I want to do a Fan-Fic which kind of revolves around my save game of Pokemon Pearl, not exactly the same as the game story mind you.
So this kid is turning fifteen, he is getting his Pokemon Lisence... bla bla bla... visits Prof. Rowan... bla bla bla... gets a Turtwig and starts his journey.
Accompanying him is his female friend (I haven't decided if they have known each other since they were young or if they meet for the first time in Prof. Rowans lab). They are together for the entire series (which won't be as big as the Anime!!), which will revolve around a mix of the Games and the Anime.
Anyway they go off on their journey together, his mission is to beat the Elite Four, her mission is to fill up the Pokedex for Prof. Rowan.
They also meet a third companion (who is still in the works. Canon character suggestions are welcome!)
There may also be a rival, and a youngster trainer who meets them along the way but doesn't stay with them

But what I really want to lead this all up to is a bigger story involving Palkia, Dialga and Giratina and the Distortion World. Then Arceus getting starts to get frustrated by Pokemon Trainers, and starts to pull all of the Legendary Pokemon out of their habitats and tries to start a war.
Then after these events the main character continues his journey to the Elite Four, challenges them and then off to.....

What do you think? It is very blan at the moment, and I need to do some serious character building, and episode outlines.
Thing I wouldn't mind knowing about is why the choice for having the character to be 15 years old for starters - are you intending for there to be a romance between him and this 'female friend'? If so be sure to make it realistic - build it up, as a problem for some trainer fics is that said romances don't come off as believeable/rushed.

Be careful too with mixing canons so that nothing contradicts each other, although theere's nothing wrong with doing that, certainly.

Another thing to consider is why is Arceus being frustrated by Pokemon trainers - that would need to be established/expanded upon I feel in the fic (maybe you already thought of that, but idk =p). I'd worry about thinking upon that part of the story - why Arceus tries to 'start a war' and how he goes about with using Pokemon to do that - and how it is stopped (assuming you want it to be stopped that is XD).
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Okay I want to do a Fan-Fic which kind of revolves around my save game of Pokemon Pearl, not exactly the same as the game story mind you.
So this kid is turning fifteen, he is getting his Pokemon Lisence... bla bla bla... visits Prof. Rowan... bla bla bla... gets a Turtwig and starts his journey.
Accompanying him is his female friend (I haven't decided if they have known each other since they were young or if they meet for the first time in Prof. Rowans lab). They are together for the entire series (which won't be as big as the Anime!!), which will revolve around a mix of the Games and the Anime.
Anyway they go off on their journey together, his mission is to beat the Elite Four, her mission is to fill up the Pokedex for Prof. Rowan.
They also meet a third companion (who is still in the works. Canon character suggestions are welcome!)
There may also be a rival, and a youngster trainer who meets them along the way but doesn't stay with them

But what I really want to lead this all up to is a bigger story involving Palkia, Dialga and Giratina and the Distortion World. Then Arceus getting starts to get frustrated by Pokemon Trainers, and starts to pull all of the Legendary Pokemon out of their habitats and tries to start a war.
Then after these events the main character continues his journey to the Elite Four, challenges them and then off to.....

What do you think? It is very blan at the moment, and I need to do some serious character building, and episode outlines.
Also, you're going to have to try and make your fanfic different from the games right from the start. Not only by making your character older, but other ways. I'm going to have to agree with bobandbill: why make them older? You have plenty of reasons to choose from, since you are allowed to have older trainers start, but...why? Work it out in the story.

Same with why and how your starting trainer gets involved in this war. And why Arceus is starting a war. What would suddenly make it want to start a war with trainers now, when Arcy has been around since the beginning of time?

I know that right now you only have the bare minimum, so hopefully this helps you out with working more on this story.
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Some focus on the prophecy here would be something to consider as well - where did it come from, and any reason for it to have 'spoken' about these characters in particular? And how does this 14 year old know of the Moritoki clan?

I would also think that if you were to write this (it seems like it has potential) you'd also have to look into ninjitsu fairly extensively for the accuracy (e.g. training techniques, attacks/style the art tends to involve/use... I would also think a suspension of belief may be needed for the bit concerning the key to supernatural abilities - that may need to be particular well-established too - make sure it doesn't seem like a wishy-washy reason for the Moritoki clan to be the 'evil team' or whatnot.

It has potential? Wow, thank you .
but I have been pondering over the ideas, and have made some slight changes to the plot, probably resulting in a sequel or two.

The moritoki clan is replaced by just one person, but he pretends to be the protagonists friend and manipulates him into training and finding the supernatural powers (using the prophecy to do so). The reason so he can stop the another evil person wanting to take the powers. but through out his training the protagonist slowly turns evil, and plots to take the powers himself, outsmarting the evil other two. i cant explain it well, but in the story i will.

In the next one it shows how the two other people team up against the 'protangist' and try to steal the powers back. But the protagonist can't control his powers well at the beginning, and the two evil people can now shapeshift into animals, thanks to them kidnapping scientists and making them create a machine that allows their DNA molecules to form those of animals.

i can't explain it well.
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Thankyou everyone for the replies and the critisism, I will now answer some of your questions.

Question: Why is your character 15?
Answer: Well this is because I would like to have a romance between him and his friend, and I thought back to Ash being 10, and romance doesn't seem as serious, so I thought older. There may be a reason story-wise, like his parents are really protective, or I dunno.

Question: And why Arceus is starting a war?
Answer: I really want to bring Team Galactic into that. With Cyrus wanting to create his own universe, and Arceus feeling that some trainers are no longer placing themselves as equals with Pokemon, but as their masters (which is un-true). I want to bring the Distortion World into it, and at the very end I would like to have Arceus pulling legendary Pokemon out of the real world and into the Distortion World. Remember this is still very early in production and I still have to think up somethings.

I am even thinking of bringing Riley in as the 'Brock' of the series, but I am still debating that too.
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It has potential? Wow, thank you .
but I have been pondering over the ideas, and have made some slight changes to the plot, probably resulting in a sequel or two.
Be sure you have enough ideas/content to make up a 'sequel or two' then, I suggest. =p

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The moritoki clan is replaced by just one person, but he pretends to be the protagonists friend and manipulates him into training and finding the supernatural powers (using the prophecy to do so). The reason so he can stop the another evil person wanting to take the powers. but through out his training the protagonist slowly turns evil, and plots to take the powers himself, outsmarting the evil other two. i cant explain it well, but in the story i will.
I'd would suggest having some backstory about these characters would be a potential idea to use then so we know all this (maybe even changing POVs between characters throughout the story?) But some character history and how they know of this power and so forth would be needed methinks (if you haven't already planned that, that is =p).
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In the next one it shows how the two other people team up against the 'protangist' and try to steal the powers back. But the protagonist can't control his powers well at the beginning, and the two evil people can now shapeshift into animals, thanks to them kidnapping scientists and making them create a machine that allows their DNA molecules to form those of animals.

i can't explain it well.
(So I assume that means the protagonist (or anti hero?) does get the powers then?) You'd need to explain how they can steal the powers off then - is it a spiriatual thing or something like in Avatar, or is it an object that grants the bearer said power? The latter part feels a bit too hard to swallow as well - DNA to shapeshift into animals would likely come off as rather unrealistic no matter how well you protray it due to the very iffy-ness of that nature. I do feel it'd be better sticking to the first one rather than the sequel as the ideas seem too radical/out-of-the-blue in the latter, here.

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Thankyou everyone for the replies and the critisism, I will now answer some of your questions.

Question: Why is your character 15?
Answer: Well this is because I would like to have a romance between him and his friend, and I thought back to Ash being 10, and romance doesn't seem as serious, so I thought older. There may be a reason story-wise, like his parents are really protective, or I dunno.
I guessed as much. I would make sure that the reason for them starting later is well established though as it is often a common complaint people have with such fics - the reason is lame/not well developed enough, and that including the 'protective parents' deal as one would argue that the Pokemon world is quite different to ours which is why the pokemon-world parents allow you to go off and all. (In saying that however [5TH GEN SPOILERS]):
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Question: And why Arceus is starting a war?
Answer: I really want to bring Team Galactic into that. With Cyrus wanting to create his own universe, and Arceus feeling that some trainers are no longer placing themselves as equals with Pokemon, but as their masters (which is un-true). I want to bring the Distortion World into it, and at the very end I would like to have Arceus pulling legendary Pokemon out of the real world and into the Distortion World. Remember this is still very early in production and I still have to think up somethings.
That seems to make sense in part... Cryus certainly isn't a good role-model, although given Arceus' power I would question why he thinks that because of Galactic everyone is like that or why everyone deserves 'punishment' over it via a war (as it would likely impact negatively on everyone), and why he'd want the legendary Pokemon in the distortion world as well (and how they would react to that as well). Maybe try those parts as a focus point if you get stuck in plotting that out?
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I am even thinking of bringing Riley in as the 'Brock' of the series, but I am still debating that too.
This I would advise again - then you'd be using the all-too-often used forumla of the trainer-fic-with-2-guys-one-girl travelling senerio (and also trying to base the fic too much off of the anime as well), when Riley would likely not fit into this either canonically and so forth. Bunch of issues with that, basically, and I don't see how it'd necessarly add much to the story either.
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Whee quick initial thoughts to idea replies. Be sure you have enough ideas/content to make up a 'sequel or two' then, I suggest. =p

I'd would suggest having some backstory about these characters would be a potential idea to use then so we know all this (maybe even changing POVs between characters throughout the story?) But some character history and how they know of this power and so forth would be needed methinks (if you haven't already planned that, that is =p).
(So I assume that means the protagonist (or anti hero?) does get the powers then?) You'd need to explain how they can steal the powers off then - is it a spiriatual thing or something like in Avatar, or is it an object that grants the bearer said power? The latter part feels a bit too hard to swallow as well - DNA to shapeshift into animals would likely come off as rather unrealistic no matter how well you protray it due to the very iffy-ness of that nature. I do feel it'd be better sticking to the first one rather than the sequel as the ideas seem too radical/out-of-the-blue in the latter, here.
yeah, i think your right .
I've been thinking, maybe the protagonists gets the powers and turns evil,
then his 'mentor' and the other evil person are rivals, working under their boss to deliver him the supernatural powers, and now that the two have failed they have to remove the supernatural powers from him (using an item im creating yet). The 'protagonist' finds the link between the two and finds the boss, battling him and a little more will happen.
I think it gives the storyline more sense, because im making the protganist get kicked out of home, sleeping at the dojo and then the map to an ancient cave is stolen. then the protagonist knows where the lair of the other evil guy is.

Thanks for all your help ,
i think i could actually be making some progress .
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Hello, I'm a huge fan of writing and this idea has been in my head for a while. I'll just get right to it. Yes, it is Pokemon, but I thrown in a little sic-fi and fantasy since I'll be more comfortable while writing this.

Plot Idea:
This takes place several years after Ash and gang's journey (I'm looking between 30-40 years, I still don't know what roles they'll have). They discovered multiple regions since then, some are high-tech while others are behind in technology. This story takes place in one of the regions that isn't high-tech (I currently don't have a name for it), but the region has a lot of history. (Note: I'll still include some other regions, but I don't want it to become a typical journeyfic.)

A ancient pokemon which has been lost in history except for the people of this region awakens. How? Still not quite sure. However, it's only the spirit/soul of the pokemon, its body is lost. This "spirit" pokemon wants revenge on the pokemon world for destroying and forgetting about it. It is up to trainers from all regions to stop this pokemon and save the pokemon world.
End Plot (for now)

I know it sounds inoriginal, but it'll be different once I write it. So, any help and criticism? Thanks for the help.
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yeah, i think your right .
I've been thinking, maybe the protagonists gets the powers and turns evil,
then his 'mentor' and the other evil person are rivals, working under their boss to deliver him the supernatural powers, and now that the two have failed they have to remove the supernatural powers from him (using an item im creating yet). The 'protagonist' finds the link between the two and finds the boss, battling him and a little more will happen.
I think it gives the storyline more sense, because im making the protganist get kicked out of home, sleeping at the dojo and then the map to an ancient cave is stolen. then the protagonist knows where the lair of the other evil guy is.

Thanks for all your help ,
i think i could actually be making some progress .
So you plan to have a boss now? I'll add motivations for the boss to have them do the work for them (instead of doing it himself) would be something to consider. Make sure the 'item' that can remove said super-powers is well established in the story too so it doesn't appear to come out of left field.

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Hello, I'm a huge fan of writing and this idea has been in my head for a while. I'll just get right to it. Yes, it is Pokemon, but I thrown in a little sic-fi and fantasy since I'll be more comfortable while writing this.

Plot Idea:
This takes place several years after Ash and gang's journey (I'm looking between 30-40 years, I still don't know what roles they'll have). They discovered multiple regions since then, some are high-tech while others are behind in technology. This story takes place in one of the regions that isn't high-tech (I currently don't have a name for it), but the region has a lot of history. (Note: I'll still include some other regions, but I don't want it to become a typical journeyfic.)

A ancient pokemon which has been lost in history except for the people of this region awakens. How? Still not quite sure. However, it's only the spirit/soul of the pokemon, its body is lost. This "spirit" pokemon wants revenge on the pokemon world for destroying and forgetting about it. It is up to trainers from all regions to stop this pokemon and save the pokemon world.
End Plot (for now)

I know it sounds inoriginal, but it'll be different once I write it. So, any help and criticism? Thanks for the help.
I'd consider then what the charatcers are like as well as their rols 30-40 years in the future, as well as what the did during that time in general (I can't say I know much about the anime characters though as I do not watch it too much, although I know the general stuff). Establishing the region and making sure we know what places look like would be important too as you're using a fan-made region rather than one already existing in canon.

Same goes for this Pokemon - I do wonder about how it was 'destroyed' and how it plans to get its revenge as well - just genral mayhem or using ghostly powers to say possess/hynotise others or whatnot? It does sound interesting though, so if you think up the right stuff for the current gaps from that summary it could go rather well, that fic idea IMO.
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I was thinking last night, since this pokemon doesn't have a body, that it could use powers to possess others. I'm still working out why he wants revenge, I'm working out ideas. I might (keyword: might) also add a sub-plot where he tries to find his body. I'm not 100% sure on that one though.

I might not introduce this bad pokemon for the first chapter or two, that way I can spend a little extra time developing the region, explaining what happened in those 30-40 years, and character development. I'll have hints of his upcoming awakening/return, but not right away. I'm also going to explain why some regions are more high-tech, while others are still medieval-like.

I still not sure what roles the anime characters will play (if any), but I know they'll be mentioned here and there. If they do appear, I'll try to make it related to the story, and not where they just appear out of no where.

Also, in this story, instead of the characters being 10 and such, they'll be 14 (maybe 15). Don't worry, I'll explain why you have to be 14-15 instead of 10. I forgot to mention that in my original post.
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Old November 19th, 2010, 11:07 PM
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Not quite sure if this is exactly where something like this belongs, but I'll take a shot in the dark here.

Question for you all. What effects do you guys think a Pokemon's attack - specifically Confuse Ray from a weak Pokemon - would have on a human? How long do you think it would take the effects to wear off?

Yes, this is to help with a part of the plot of my current story. Help would be appreciated.
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Old November 19th, 2010, 11:28 PM
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Not quite sure if this is exactly where something like this belongs, but I'll take a shot in the dark here.

Question for you all. What effects do you guys think a Pokemon's attack - specifically Confuse Ray from a weak Pokemon - would have on a human? How long do you think it would take the effects to wear off?

Yes, this is to help with a part of the plot of my current story. Help would be appreciated.
personally, i think it would depend on who is getting hit.
If you have a psychic trianer compared to a little girl,
the effects would be different. And I would think the effects would be coherent to the intentions of the pokemon attacking, whatever you think should happen .

...I hope that makes sense...
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Old November 21st, 2010, 11:05 PM
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Hey guys!!! Amaya here (But you can call me May, lol)

I'm working on a new FanFic (Prologue is up in fanfic section), But I need some help.

Plot Idea:
Takes place in an imaginary region called Morea
The main character's (Maria's) mom gets kidnapped, and her father dissapears. This takes place a week after one of her long-time childhood friends is kidnapped. She quickly deduces that Team Luna(ris( is optional, but is part of teams whole name)) has taken them because of their trademark "Lunar Beam" Beacon. (Kinda like the Dark Mark, lol. Didn't realise that until now!) She teams up with her friend Jonathan to go save Akira and her parents. But is that exactly what Team Luna had expected?

lol gotta love the drama. This isn't going to be a big Journey-Fic, but I might expnd it over a couple of regions. Tops two plus Morea. Keyword here is TOPS.

Anyway Maria doesn't like being a trainer, but in the Morea region every child has to have at least one year of experience. Her Eevee has become quite bonded to her, and saves her from danger more than once. Her Eevee has almost a psychic nature(hint-hint nudge-nudge on Eeveelution.). In the first chapter (which I have written, but not posted) she and her friend Jonathan are talking to Professor Willow and the radio comes on. But halfway through the announcement Team Luna pre-empts it and gives a threatening warning.

I'm also working on some new Pokemon superstitions(kind of like animal superstitions).

If anyone wants to see the first chapter, or even wants to help me edit, let me know. I don't want to post it until I have at least 99.9% of the kinks out
EDIT: About to be posted! lol! =3

Thanks in advance!!!

P.S. I my use of parentheses bothers you, let me know. I tend to overuse them a little bit.
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