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Old December 11th, 2011 (04:16 AM).
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Fly to the Light
the Warmth is growing
closer to the Energy
feeling Safe and Content
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Pain...
I'm going back again.



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Old December 13th, 2011 (07:31 AM).
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Nice poem, but isn’t that a little too short? I know that the poem is describing the moth’s “story” but even so, it could have been larger; well, I like it simple, so ought to give you points for that. But really other than the fact that you capitalized some words when you didn’t need to (safe, content, warmth, light) the poem is great as it is. Congratulations and keep up like that.
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