[Pokémon] Magikarp evolved into Gyarados (Chapter1)

[clarence30]

Once upon a time,there was a Magikarp name 'Fred'.He likes to play with his best friend,Mispit the Feebas.They like to play games such as 'Tag'.
One day,Mispit and Fred was playing happily.Then a gang of Sharpedo came.
Leader of Sharpedo Gang : HAHAHA!! You ugly pokemons.
Sharpedo 1 : Yeah! Ugly children.
Sharpedo 2 : Stupid and ugly children.
Fred was hurt by the words the Sharpedo gang said.He felt tired and swam home.
Mispit : Keep your comments to yourselves!
And Mispit swam home with Fred.
The next day
Fred : Mummy!!!! Am i ugly?
Mother : No you're not.Why?You looked worried.
Fred : A group of Sharpedo said i'm ugly.
Mother : Oh..don't care about them.Come on,lets have breakfast.

[Astinus]

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