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This story was based off a old RP I use to run on my own forum before it went up in flames. I built its world, laws and so on. A friend of mine liked the world I built so much, he decided to write a story based off the world.
This is the story before the board died. Its a very interesting story and I suggest giving it a read.
I have rights to the world, he has rights to the story.
Outcast is my old Username.
His is Leonise.
Chapter 1 : Prologue
Posting more as I go.
Chapter 2: Awakening
Chapter 3: Race against the Clock, Will Ed fail !?
Will post the rest tomorrow.
Dawn Before War : Endless Dream.
Interlude 1 : End of the exams
/10, 00 ST , Neo Ruins, Mecania City, NeoKnight’s Academy, Classroom 8B/
One thing is feared by everyone in the world.
A universal bogeyman, an diabolic evil that even when faced even the bravest of man will piss they’re pants.
A hellish horror that al men and women must face in their lifetime.
That fiendish unholy vile thing is-
“Students turn your paper around and leave the classroom in an orderly fashion.” Urizuki droned out lazily.
- the bell that signals the end of an important exam.
Urizuki collected all the tests and skimmed over all the exams.
Before the students could leave the classroom Urizuki says.
“Nuegal, Sepra and Medrian I’m happy to announce that all three of you have a score of 0.”
The three dunderheads in question began their outrage before they saw the look on Urizuki’s face.
“Heh so you three think you have the right to question my judgement?
You three decided to ignore the order of a superior officer… Do you know what you did?”
The three only shook their heads. But by the looks on their faces you know they knew.
“You …” Urizuki paused for a dramatic effect. “ CHEATED! “
Before the three fools could respond Urizuki continued.
“Sepra in you left utility pocket is a couple of notes with answers, Nuegal you copied over half of all your answers from Akira… Btw Akira you should really pay better attention to your surroundings.”
At this Akira smiled sheepishly “ Hehe sure thing boss.”
Urizuki rolled his eyes and continued.
“Medrian out of the three of you, the way you cheated was the most impressive. Not only did you copy the question cheat that I made in the short time I left it alone, you did it in a way that I didn’t notice a thing. Almost didn’t notice a thing.”
At this Urizuki shows a circular metal contraption that glows blue in random intervention.
“This is a invention that I asked Mr.Vericite over there.“ At this he points to a half asleep Twitch that joined the classroom to observe the exam. And to annoy Ed of course.
At this Akira whispers to Ed :” Why is he pointing at Twitch I thought he said that Mr. Vericite made that thingamajigg?”
“Twitch is Mr. Vericite Akira.”
“-to make, this device records the crystal wavelength of a person and stores it in a database. As you know each person has his or hers own unique wavelength that makes him or her more or less compatible with an element. Where I’m going with this is that I recorded each of your wavelengths during our crystal lessons. And I left this machine on, on my desk with the question forms. Imagine my surprise when I noticed your wavelength in the area of my desk at home.”
The three idiots are now shaking in despair.
“Still not letting you do the next exam is harsh… I know!” Urizuki said while he has that * I’m going to laugh at your misery* look.
“You can just make a different exam tomorrow, it’s the exam of the advanced class so it’s even harder and more questions in les time !*
The three losers are now practically crying and it’s a know fact that those three were the worst in written exams together with Ed.
“Well my students is time to go home, you’ll receive a message during the week with the location and time of the next exams with the scores of your first one. Have a good week !”
Urizuki said in a way to happy tone.
The students began to leave an all to quick Luna, Akira and Ed and Twitch were the only ones left.
“So..” Twitch began .” How did your exams go?”
“I’m going to fail…”
“I see … Well let’s go to my place for a cup of hot coco !”
/10,30 ST, Weven Woods, Weven General Hospital /
“Alright Mr. Solana you’re all patched up, you’re very lucky that a travelling cabbage merchant was riding under your post otherwise you would have died.” Says a very cheery nurse.
“Yeah I know.” Came the pained answer.
“Hmm hmm now if you feel any pain at all you must come back immediately. Do you understand?”
“Yeah no problem.” Replies Meca while thinking “ Hell No ! I’m not going back to your “care” evil vile woman, who thinks that nurses are supposed to be gentle and caring must never met this gall. “
Meca exits’ the hospital deep in thought.
I became a ranger because my life was boring. But after training life became even more boring. And that accident made me realise that I can die from lame deaths…
I rather not die from falling asleep on guard duty on the Great Wall. If I die I want to die guns a’blazin and eternal glory and all that.
Still now that Dawnlands is in semi peace stuff is going slow here. Not that peace is a bad thing… I’ve got it!
I’ll quit as ranger and go on a world journey. Why not, I probably won’t die in eternal glory but still better then a lame death like falling asleep. And I’ll go to new places, meet new people, maybe even find a girlfriend .
Cheered up Meca began his trek home, because in his mind tomorrow will be a great day.
A new chapter well more an interlude *shrug*
And yes random dude that fell of the wall for humour will get a more important roll now.
Don’t know what but he will.
Short and no plot development but that's why this is an interlude. :D
THIS... is pretty much all he wrote out.
The whole forum board fell apart afterwards and I've somewhat lost touch with him. The RP is still there too, but scarred deeply with signs of trolls.
I built the world from scratch, its religion, history and a few of their own weapons and culture. I even created its bestiary, regions, lands.
Leonise came up with the idea for Chakra, Aura, Mana and Chi; In order to have some sort of premise or idea to build a fighting stage on when he wrote these chapters. He even came up with the characters and the factions along with an authority to govern the world.
If there are no questions or comments, then any mod reading this can lock it, store it, whichever.
If anyone thinks he should have continued, feel free to email me, pm me and I'll try to look out for him.
Last edited by Quto; July 22nd, 2012 at 10:39 PM.