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Old August 28th, 2012, 02:49 PM
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Join Date: May 2012
Location: Sunny Shore City
Gender: Male
Nature: Relaxed
~ Characters~
~Seasonal wolves~
Erika: Autumn~
Sam: Winter~
Joseph or (JoJo): Summer and spring~

~Character Bio~
Erika: Erika is mostly a motherly figure that usually keeps the gang together between her brothers although she really isn't good at what she does. What will she do? you'll have to read to find out!

Samuel: Samuel is usually calm and collected. Unless Jojo pushes him to the brink with all his quirkiness.

Joseph (JoJo): Sam and Erika just get so enraged with him sometimes. But don't let that confuse you he's got Erika's Kindness and Sam's Calmness!
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~The Changing~

"Jojo quit. Just quit."

He does this all the time, Erika said to herself.

"What?"

“You always do this. Quit being so timid, quit rushing over the simplest things."

"Fine," Jojo said in a cold tone.

"Samuel, can you help me?"

"With what?" Gosh, I have to help her with this and with that

"This is getting old, Erika. You'll never learn with me doing everything for you!" he said quickly before she could interrupt.

"The leaves I create are never the right colors! I will never be able to change my own season! Never! At least not by myself."

"Samuel, I know and I thank you, but it's so sad I have to ask the winter wolf to help me with my own season!"

"You know what, Samuel? I'm leaving tomorrow to go on my own Journey to find out what I do.”

When she went to bed that night she wondered what she would do and who she would meet. Maybe she would find some tricks and be better and what she was meant to do!

"Guys, I'm getting ready to start my Journey," Erika said out loud.

"I really can't believe you're going through with this," Jojo said.

"You'll be fine. I'm sure you'll enjoy it and it will be good for you," Sam said.

Yeah fine, she said to herself. Pshhh.. the only bad thing that could happen was that she would go onto someone's turf and accidentally intimidate them which probably wouldn't be likely since she's so caring. But If I have to I will stand my ground!

"Good luck. Love ya, sis," both of her brothers said.

~The Leave~
"I can do this," she said happily to herself.

What will I eat? The caribou? No they won't be out, at least not for the next few days. Then what will I eat? I've got an idea! Maybe I could trick then with my seasonal powers. Now what do I have to do again? Oh yeah I remember now.

"Καθώς το φθινόπωρο αφήνει αλλαγή στα δέντρα."

"It worked! It actually worked! I can't believe it!" She knew she'd have a slow start though she knew Jojo would do a good job.

She worked half the day to get her plan ready, although she did manage the whole forest she was in.
She waited for quite some just staring at the humongous lake she was near.

Erika soon spotted the prey she needed although it wasn't what she had in mind. She didn't really care. Heck, she'd take anything she could get.

"Erika, if you know what's good for you, you'd better now try to catch that wild boar," was what she said to herself, trying to focus. She was determined to catch and eat it.

Erika eventually got close enough to get it. "On 3. 1,2 3!" she said to herself. "Ha gotcha!"

"Erika you better rethink that. We've got you," it said.

"No! It can't be you... You're supposed to be dead!"
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Old August 28th, 2012, 05:29 PM
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Join Date: Apr 2012
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Alright, this seems interesting , but you seem to be doing a lot of telling instead of showing, and that's distracting me from the storyline. Like, when you have Erika saying the spell, you don't really say what happens as a result of the spell. It's like the script for a game or something. Basically, more description would be great!

But I'm just picky. Carry on~
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