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[Other FULL] Atlantis Awakening [OOC+SU] [M]

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Alternatively, if your character is rebellious and a bit of an badass, you could write a post about avoiding the situation, though be warned: any Atlantean caught crossing a border without a licence will face the consequences! Atlantean tattoos are not easy to hide at all, especially with that serum which determines if a person is Atlantean or not.
 
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Hah, last time I managed to get Helena out without registering thanks to her ability and Atticus :D I felt like it was a good upper hand that the Royal Family and authorities had not registered her. But this time I don't really know how to avoid it... Maybe I'll just register Agnes.
 
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because she squats
lolol

Btw, the rest of your SU still says Riley xD

Anyways, yeah! It would be fun if we met somehow in the queue and decided to run away together! Or maybe just met and then passed through registration and then met again on the inside, waiting for the ARF to eat our souls... come rescue us pls AUP
 

Swolligator

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@Retro Bug: Dayum, Delta sounds way more brutal than she was in Arising.

IC posts are looking good, can't wait to see some more! Skymin and I have started working on follow up posts for you guys whom have already posted. And so it begins...
 
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Should I post again or wait for Tom or wait for someone else?

Btw don't take my AUP/ARF bashing seriously. I'd be very happy to be in ARF this time to get to see a different side of the RP from when I was in AUP in Arising :3
 

Nakuzami

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Edit: Downgraded to NPC status, if she ever even makes an appearance.

Remnants of a Lost Dream - Nakuzami's Sign-Up


Main Information:

Name: Krystal Kollyns
Alias: Chrysanthemum
Age: 17
Height: 5'8" :: 172.72 cm
Weight: 130 lbs :: 58.967 kg
Location:

Appearance:

Atlantean Tattoo:

Krystal's Atlantean Tattoo resembles a heart surrounding a crystal in the center, with lines that could be wings radiating from the crystal. The tattoo is about fifty percent larger than Krystal's hand and is located on the outside of her right thigh.​

Physical:

Krystal is a fair-skinned Caucasian woman standing at about five feet eight inches and weighing about one hundred and thirty pounds. She has long, straight, dirty blonde hair that reaches about halfway down the back of her torso and bright, hazel eyes that are tinted with a light blue. Her hair never really gets too much brighter, but during winter months it darkens to become a relatively deep brown. Her bangs sweep across her forehead and hang near her right eye. Her eyebrows are thin, her facial features are well sculpted and the corners of her mouth always seem to be turned in a small smile, no matter the situation.

Krystal is thin and light on her feet, allowing her to move with both speed and silence. She's not very strong, but her litheness and agility more than make up for this.​

Clothing:

Krystal wears a light blue beanie with a purple flower design, or a light blue Fullmetal Alchemist beanie. She typically wears a light blue tank top with the same flower design as her main beanie, or a variety of tee-shirts decorated with designs of various cartoons, anime, and video games. When the weather gets colder, she wears a Kingdom Hearts Organization XIII hoodie or a light blue Fullmetal Alchemist hoodie. She wears blue and black striped, elbow length fingerless gloves and light blue knee-high converse. Depending on the weather, she is either clad in blue denim jeans or blue denim shorts, and she wears a Kingdom Hearts necklace and a silver Kingdom Hearts watch on her right wrist. She carries a grey Soul Eater shoulder backpack to keep her things in, which is adorned with many pins. x x x x x x

Personality:

History:

Ability:

Krystal has the ability of Dream Manipulation, sometimes known as Oneirokinesis or Oneiromancy. This ability allows her to control, modify, suppress, fabricate, influence, manifest and observe dreams, nightmares, and even daydreams, with enough control. This lets her produce and modify dreams and nightmares, and she can also allow herself or another to enter a lucid dream state. She can also trap a person in REM sleep and essentially read the thoughts of a sleeping person, so long as she can maintain her concentration. With enough will and concentration, Krystal can influence a person from within their dreams, such as planting thoughts in their head or even inflicting wounds upon their body. When inside a dream, Krystal can do practically anything, although it doesn't always necessarily effect the physical body of the person whose dream she is within. With enough practice, it is possible that Krystal could cause things to manifest within the real world, allowing her to effect others physically, not just mentally, and perhaps even induce sleep upon a person who is awake. Currently, Krystal can cause small energy bursts to manifest, giving her a rather small offense in the physical world.

Positively, this gives Krystal power over the mind; both her own and those of others. She can influence her own dreams and fit days of meditation within a few hours as she sleeps. She can enter the minds of others to learn their thoughts, feelings, loves, fears, and secrets, so long as they remain asleep and unaware of her presence. She can repair a person's mind if it becomes fractured in some way, and she can also fracture a person's mind if she so wishes, allowing her to literally mess with one's sanity. With enough power, she could also kill someone by killing them within their dreams.

On the other hand, there are quite a few negative effects of her ability. It is entirely possible for a person to create a mental barrier and lock Krystal out of their mind, but that would require either a lot of practice or some sort of ability relating to the mind. It is also possible for someone to trap Krystal within their dream if they become aware, and this also allows them to take control of their dream world and fight back, putting Krystal in extreme danger is a situation turns awry. There is also the question of Krystal's own mental state. If something goes incredibly wrong or she exerts herself too much, it is incredibly possible that Krystal could literally lose her mind, driving her to insanity.

I may use this page for more ideas later on: http://powerlisting.wikia.com/wiki/Dream_Manipulation

Writing Sample:
 
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MinnesotanGamer

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Okay, took long enough, but finally finished up with my SU, mostly...

Main Information:

Name: Minerva Sirmais

Alias: (For later reference)

Age: 18

Height: 5'7"

Weight: 120 lbs

Location: Riga, Latvia

Appearance:

Atlantean Tattoo: Minerva's tattoo is located on her lower left shoulder, and looks like this:
Spoiler:

Physical:
Minerva's bright green eyes shine out from underneath her wavy blond hair that falls past her face and onto her back, reaching just past her shoulders. She takes care of her hair religiously, and always has it loose, refusing to put it up at all. Her bright smile often lights up her face, her thin arching eyebrows emphasizing her grin. Her smile displays her straight white teeth, thanks to several years of braces and religious brushing. She often wears earrings that dangle down, although they are often covered by her hair. Her choices of jewelry are a bit odd, her favorite earrings being two owls with amethyst for eyes.


Minerva stands at about 5"8', and has a more of a slightly build. While not weak, Minerva has never really put any thought to working out, counting on a high metabolism to keep herself in shape. So far it has been working, as she has very little fat on her body. She does have somewhat more muscle in her upper arms due to loving swimming. The beach in Riga is relatively cold, but Minerva still goes there regularly and swims, leaving her with a healthy tan in the summer that doesn't wear off until about December.

Clothing:
Minerva's outfits vary quite a bit depending on mood and season, but her clothing always echoes how outgoing her personality is. She loves more colorful clothes, always matching various colors and designs. Her usual casual outfit includes close fitting blue jeans and a tank top, which of course is brightly colored, and a loose cardigan on top of that (looked up that word just for this). Jewelry is of included, always a bracelet or two, and a pair of earrings.

Personality:
If you asked Minerva to describe herself, she would probably say something like friendly or outgoing. While those adjectives are definitely fitting, others would use descriptive words such as "crazy" or "insane". It doesn't help that she is diagnosed with ADHA and OCD, which is an interesting mix for sure. She takes everything lightly even with bad news. She has developed the idea that bad things happen, and there isn't much we can do to stop it. So she easily accepts the reality of situations. This makes her seem somewhat unfeeling or uncaring to others.

Because of her OCD, Minerva has a crazy attention for detail, and is very good at analyzing the situation around her. Unfortunately, due to her detail oriented mind, she lacks the ability to see the big picture or see anything in a long term sense, which never helped with projects in school. She is also very creative and likes to think of new original ways of doing things, not just the typical solution, partly because she likes doing it and partly because she gets bored of repetition very quickly.

Minerva is a people person, and practically relies on other people to survive. She loves working in groups on projects, and needs positive feedback for her work, or she feels like she failed on her part. When working with friends on projects, they enjoy needling her on her work, which causes her to sulk and throw a bit of a tantrum, although she bounces back very quickly. Even though she loves being around people, she has a hard time trusting people due to past experiences in her life, and this keeps her from getting very close to anyone really, leaving her with many friends, but no close friends.

Despite seeming so positive, she has a bit of a darker side too. When Minerva becomes angry she sort of loses herself mentally and becomes much more aggressive and does things that she normally would never do. She also seems to forget most of the things that she does during this period of time. While not quite mental insanity, her mental psyche is significantly altered until she calms down. For whatever reason, this sort of mental disorder or whatever it is has occurred twice in the last two weeks since the Atlanteans revealed themselves. Whether this is by chance or not is yet to be discovered.

History:
Minerva has had what some would call a troubled childhood. Her father was killed in the Latvian military and was killed in 2003 during the Iraq invasion, and as such Minerva was left as an only child raised by a single parent. The single parent only lasted until she was nine when her mother remarried, then divorced a year later, then repeated the same process two years later. Home was hell, and the only place where Minerva could feel accepted was at school with her friends.

She became more rebellious into her teen years, disliking her mother more and more, often spending more time at her two stepfather's homes instead of her mother's. It eventually escalated to the point to where Minerva's mother forbade her to go to either of their houses, and she saw less and less of her extended family as time went on. Despite the absolute hell that she saw her home as, she took her stepfather's advice: "A positive spirit and a positive attitude can only amount to a positive outcome." Minerva took the words to heart to the point of looking at absolutely everything with a positive attitude.

Growing up in Riga, Latvia also had quite the effect on Minerva. After communist control was removed from Latvia, the people almost instantly became much more expressive through various arts. Similarly, the expressive nature of the people rubbed off on the girl, and especially the art portion, immediately taking to drawing through middle and high school. Although she was surrounded by friends, she had a hard time expressing her feelings to others, and so she expressed those cooped up feelings through drawing instead. At first it was just a hobby, but eventually she decided to turn her hobby into her career and go to an art school after graduating from high school.

She moved out of her mother's house in suburban Riga as soon as she graduated and rented a flat closer in the city working two jobs as a waitress and a swim teacher to pay for her bills and saving up for art school. Her plans were abruptly changed when the Atlanteans revealed themselves and Minerva found that she possessed the ability to manipulate metal. No longer sure about anything, Minerva is trying to continue to live a normal life, but is more focusing on finding out what the hell is going on rather than her long term future.

Ability:
Ferrokinesis (Metal Manipulation) – Minerva has the ability to manipulate metal by causing it to melt, reform, and shape the metal in various ways.

The melting part of her ability causes the metal to become liquid very quickly. Normally, extreme heat must be applied to cause metallic objects to melt and become liquid. However Minerva's ability allows the metal to remain the same temperature by causing the molecules to un-bond with each other. She currently has very little control of this part of her ability, and often causes random metal objects she touches to randomly melt into metallic sludge.

Minerva is also, although she is currently unaware of it, able to cause the metal that she melts to reform into a new shape. Just as with melting, she bonds the molecules in the metal together again. This requires intense concentration to achieve, especially if the reformation of the metal is in a specific or detailed shape.

Minerva has very little control over her ability simply because she hardly understands it herself. Her lack of control leads to problems, and she has since resorted to constantly wearing a pair of gloves to keep herself from inadvertently touching something important by accident. Whenever she enters one of her mental relapses, she has become significantly more competent with her ability, although her skill reverts to normal as her mental state does.

Writing Sample:
So far, Minerva had melted a spoon, two forks, three pens, a rung from a ladder, a screwdriver, an iPhone, and a fold out metal chair, all within a week. Which really sucked, especially since the iPhone wasn't even hers. Minerva ran her fingers through her hair as sighed, leaning back in her chair. Late afternoon light leaked in through her closed shutters, leaving a pattern of lines slowly move across her table moving as the sun slowly made its descent. One of the lines intersected with a plain metal knife lying table, reflecting the light back into her eyes. She scowled at the knife, her current target for her frustration. She had been trying to replicate the events of the past week for the past hour, trying to melt the knife into the same metallic sludge that her other casualties had become.

She picked up the knife once again, turning it, watching the light play off its reflective surface, sending rays of light reflecting around the small plain room. The light illuminated the small kitchen of her apartment. The beams of light flashed across the gray tile counters, across the oak wood cabinets, the fridge littered with magnets, notices and pictures, and then flashing out of existence as the blade of the knife became shadow and the other side of the blade began reflecting light along the same path as before. She picked out small details in the blade, a nick here, and fingerprint smudge there, the curve and sharpness of the blade. She closed her eyes and focused, putting all her concentration on the object clenched in her fist, trying with all her might to will the blade to melt and spill through her fingers onto the table below. But when she opened her eyes, the blade remained just the same, taunting her with its defiance to her so called ability.

She slammed the blade down onto the table in exasperation, sighing again. "What am I doing wrong? There wasn't anything that I did special before, it just happened! So why won't it happen now!" She pounded the table with her fist, causing the knife to bounce slightly. She stared at the blade once again, slowly calming down as she watched the reflection in the blade. She contemplated the fact that she was in fact insane, and that the events of the past week had never happened. But she shrugged away the thought; she knew what madness felt like, and this wasn't it. This was something new.

She supposed that it probably had something to do with those Atlantean people she had heard about on the television. Sneaking around for who knows how long, then they finally reveal themselves when they get backed into a corner. Suddenly people popping up everywhere with weird abilities and stuff, it was a little hard to process. The news was full of skeptics, but when you start to see metal melt when you touch it, it becomes much more believable. The few news networks that were half reliable were still vague about them, nobody seemed to know much about them at all.

Minerva stood up abruptly tipping the wooden chair over behind her, bouncing a couple times before coming to a rest, the sound of the impact echoing slightly in the kitchen. She was sick of this, all of this stupid power stuff. She debated calling a few of her friends, but tossed away the idea. She didn't have any close friends anyway. Sighing again, spun the knife lying on the table in circles, the dying evening light barely touching the metal from through the slits in the window. Scowling at the blade, she snatched it off the table, and walked over to the fridge. She opened the fridge, cool air spilling out of the frigid box, and stared at the various contents. Abilities could wait, food was now required. Tossing various ingredients onto the counter, she began to assemble a sandwich. Lettuce, tomato, mayo, Minerva nonchalantly piled ingredients on the flat slab of bread. Taking the knife to cut the sandwich in half, she felt something wet on her hand. Looking down, she noticed a slowly dissolving thing in her hand, small beads of metallic liquid fall onto the bread. "Course, now you work, just in time to ruin my dinner." She rolled her eyes, slightly elated that something had happened. She cleaned off the counter, tossing the sandwich in the garbage, then went back to preparing her dinner.
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[FONT=&quot]Alright, rough draft for now. I might change up a few things. Clothing section sucks and I know it, and history could use some work too. I hate SUs. Blargh. Also, I declare CSS to be stupid.

Also, dont have the Alias yet, still working on that bit.
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CarefulWetPaint

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Wait for me! I should have a post up soon uni has just bee insane the last couple of days. But I have weekends of so should be done soon! (Cause by weekends I mean Thursday to Sunday)
 
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Swolligator

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Wait for Tom, then Skymin and I will follow up with a post for you two.

EDIT:@Nakuzami: While I like the ability, you may want to change it to something more practical. If you can, this would me much appreciated, since it can involved certain discrepancies with other RPers.

@MinnesotanGamer: I understand if you want to change parts of your SU, but it looks fine to me XD. Just remember to put IMG tags around the Atlantean Tattoo link. Feel free to add in an Alias later, but so far, you're ACCEPTED!
 
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Nakuzami

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Spoiler:


EDIT6: Put it in a spoiler because it was getting obnoxiously long, lol.
 
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Leonknight

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[FONT=&quot](man this looked better in Office...)[/FONT][FONT=&quot]
-Main Information-[/FONT]


[FONT=&quot]Name: [/FONT][FONT=&quot]Leon Stoner[/FONT][FONT=&quot]
Alias:Nightslayer
Age: 20
Height: 6'2"
Weight: 212lbs
Location: Washington D.C., United States[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]-Appearance-[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Atlantean Tattoo:[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]It takes the form of two tribal skulls facing away from each other, with a pitch black dagger right in the middle of the two, covering up most of the back side of the skulls. It covers his left pectoral[/FONT]
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Physical:[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Leon's Natural Hair color is that of a light brown color, but he has dyed it black due to the fact that he has always like the black color of hair more, also strands of his bangs are dyed a dark green just to give some contrast and people now recognize that as his normal look. His hair comes down past his chin, straight as an edge, though he has it layered. His eyes are a deep and dark blue in color. He has also a soul patch for his choice of facial hair.[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]He has a very athletic body build due to the fact that he enjoys skateboarding and also taking up parkour as hobbies. Though his skater like body may not make him out to be all that tough, but he uses his quick movement to trick people that he does get in fights with. He has one ear piercing that has a lone silver loop in it.[/FONT]
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Clothing:[/FONT]


[FONT=&quot]His shirts can range from anywhere to long sleeved shirts to button up business shirts. Though he is more commonly seen in the button up casual shirts of a solid color that are short sleeved. When he is out skating, he is wearing t-shirts and some long sleeve shirts with t-shirts over them, the normal skater like look. Though he does have a few goose down vests he wear's over the t-shirts also.[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]For pants he has pairs upon pairs of jeans, most of them a little baggy so that he doesn't feel trapped in them. He also has pairs of Khaki pants for when he was to change things up a bit, and also a few pairs of khaki long shorts that he has. He does have a few pair of dress pants just in case he needs them for those special occasions so he doesn't look like just some skater punk that he is usually portrayed as.[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]As for accessories, he has a pair of gunnar PPK eyeglasses that he does wear most of the time, and a few beanies along with ball caps, as well as a fedora. He also has two blazers to go with his business outfit and a few ties to compliment them.[/FONT]
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Personality:[/FONT]



[FONT=&quot]He is a man who tries to hide the scars of his past life. A facade is what he tries to put up just so that he just doesn't let people down for the most part. He is usually seen all happy and without a care in the world, trying to live everyday like it was his last. For the most part that is true, yet everyone in the world has their own dark secret that they want to hide. He acts strong for his family, especially his younger siblings. They look up to him as their father figure since their father was never around to see them all grow up.[/FONT]
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[FONT=&quot]When things do go wrong, or he is just having the occasional off day, he does sink into a deep state of depression. This state can last anywhere from an hour to the whole day. No one knows about his depression except for the people that have raise him, his grandparents. They have had told him to go get it checked out, but he never has cause he didn't want to seem weak to the two people who thought of him as the strongest. His grandparents have understood this and lately have stopped bugging him about it.[/FONT]​
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[FONT=&quot]He also is quick to anger, especially if betrayed by people he held close. Getting into fights have been constant thing in his life. The fighting usually involves words rather than fists, as he believes that words scar people more than a fist could ever, but there has been times where he had to resort into fist fighting, not because he wanted too, but because the person who started it all took the first swing at him.[/FONT]​
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[FONT=&quot]Other than those two things, when he is in a good mood he is about one of the most pleasant people to be around, Always trying to get people to laugh and at times and trying to lively up anywhere he is, cause he knows how it is to be in the darkness of one's own mind. He does believe in trying to live life to fullest and not to have no regrets, but that is hard when he does have regrets of his own.[/FONT]​
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[FONT=&quot]He is also a people person, and usually the party person out of a crowd. He finds it easier to fit in with a multitude of people rather than just a few close friends. He lives for the social life and if he isn't working, he is hanging out with his group of skater friends or out at a club having a few drinks with random people he meets.[/FONT]​
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[FONT=&quot]If it comes to a life and death situation though, he will take the stand and take the hits for anyone, even if it means his life. He believes that if the people that he cares about can make it out alive, that he had served his purpose and will gladly accept death.[/FONT][FONT=&quot]

[/FONT][FONT=&quot]-History-[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]He's life was not the very best of ones, but one he wouldn't change no matter if he was even offered the chance to. Though he did not like his past, it was something that melded him, and his younger siblings. It was a part of him that he would never let go.
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[FONT=&quot]He was born in a small town of Bryan, Ohio. His mother was a worker in the Spangler Candy Company and his father was in the United States Marine Corp. He lived in that small town until his mother was pregnant with his little brother, he was 4 when he heard the news and was excited about having a little brother. His family moved to D.C. so that they could be closer to his father and then when he turned 5 his brother, Sam was born.
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[FONT=&quot]2 years later, his mother got pregnant again with his little sister Rayne, and that was again another moment he couldn't wait for, but this time it was different. This time their father wouldn't get to see his daughter. Eight months into the pregnancy they got a knock on the door; it was their father's Commanding Officer, the knock no Marine wife wanted to get. Her husband, his father had died from an IED. This destroyed the fabric of the house and it started to fall downhill.
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[FONT=&quot]He tried to keep everything alive, tried so hard for an Eight year old boy. Though he tried so hard his mother just feel apart, turned to drugs and alcohol to solve the heartbreak that she had. She became so much into debt that they had to live in homeless shelters, and all the money that she was getting was just going into more and more drugs and alcohol. Even though he tried to even hide them, he would just get yelled at and hit, but he had to take care of his siblings as well.
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[FONT=&quot]Then finally the time came when he was eleven, he called up his grandparents and asked them to take them away from the household they were in, and they complied not wanting their grand children in any more harm than they already were. They got in the car and didn't look back at the house, though the tears couldn't be held back. After a few weeks though cops did come to their grandparents' door but they fought their mom in the court and won custody of them. They haven't spoken to their mom since.
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[FONT=&quot]During the time that he and his siblings were with his grandparents he actually got a good education and also got a work ethic, from his strict yet kind grandfather. He got a job at a small [/FONT][FONT=&quot]convenience[/FONT][FONT=&quot]store when he was sixteen and kept it, he also moved into his small apartment when he turned eighteen and since then he has never lost his smile.
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[FONT=&quot]The day came when the Alanteans made their existence known, he had heard about it when he was on break one day from his brother, but really didn't think anything of it. He actually thought that it was just some hoax just so that the governments could get media attention. Though a few hours later when he was in his apartment, he had an extremely strong nosebleed and he could feel the blood pumping through his body more so that he come before, there was also some other things that he could do that he couldn't before, and again his life had been changed. [/FONT]
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[/FONT][FONT=&quot]-Ability-[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Hemomancy[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]Hemomancy is the power to control on owns blood or free blood. Free blood is blood that is outside a beings body, so it could be from blood banks, bottles, or anything like that. It can be used to create projectiles, or it can be used to crystallize blood into more hand held weapons or even walls to stop attacks. All this though is if the blood is free flowing. If the blood is still in the user though it can be used to raise the density of it to give the user a sort of derma armor but only for an extremely limited time and also can be used to give the user more stamina and power along with the ability to move one's own limbs if paralyzed.[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]The positive about this ability is the fact that the user has increased blood [/FONT][FONT=&quot] blood regeneration so that they can use their blood as a weapon. It also gave them a kind of sneak attack if the opponent doesn't expect that a cut that they gave the Hemomancer was actually their undoing.[/FONT]

[FONT=&quot]The most negative side effect of Hemomancy is death. If a Hemomancer does not control their self or let their body regenerate to enough blood that they will just bleed out and die. Also after a battle a Hemomancer must rest, they cannot do sustain fights back to back, and must rely on quickly killing their opponents.

(Note: Hemomancy usually allows one to control the blood of an opponent as well, but for the sake of balance I have completely removed that concept, as I did find it to be extremely powerful[/FONT])

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Swolligator

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Okay guys, internet is due in about 5 days, so I will resign to using the universities internet and, as such, will not be on as frequently.

@Leonknight: I see you are new to the board, Welcome. Keep an eye on your spelling and grammar, I noticed a couple of mistakes, but overall I enjoyed your SU, the only thing that really subtracted was that Leon doesn't really seem to have any flaws nor depth to him. After all, not everyone is flawless, if you could edit his personality to have some flaws and delve into his personality more, then I would be happy to accept you into the RP.

@Nakuzami: If you need to talk more, feel free to PM Skymin or myself to discuss this matter further.
 
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Silly people.

I'm gonna start my AUP posts very soon. ;D So keep a watch!
 

Leonknight

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After rereading it myself I do have to agree, I did make his personality without flaws and I did heavily change, but still trying to keep the happy go lucky feel to Leon. I did also try to add some depth to him. Writing about the personality of my character is one of my biggest flaws when it comes to rping, never have been good at it.

Also the spelling and grammar mistakes could be due to office screwing me over with the spelling and grammar check...<.< happens all the time xD
 
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