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Old June 21st, 2013 (11:52 AM).
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a/n - The reviews of my previous flash fiction have flattered me .///. I'll keep in mind those reviews from now on. Anyway, this one is another thing for the flash fiction challenge. I hope it's at least a wee bit better in than my older one XD I actually started this one waay back February, I think. So yeah, this is another one of my lame excuse for writing :p


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August 27

Public transportation is now obsolete. Get your own teleportation device now!

A strange poster appeared in the subway station, just beside the stairs that take you in and out of the establishment.

Spend no more to get to where you want to be. Get your own teleportation device now!

It started appearing in bus terminals, taxi stations, and train stations all throughout the world.

No need to leave the house to travel. Get your own teleportation device now!

Word has it that these posters mysteriously appeared out of thin air.

September 10

It has been two weeks since the ‘teleportation device’ poster phenomena have occurred. It has caught the attention of various groups of people. Religious groups claim that this is the work of the devil. They attribute the mysterious appearance of these posters as invisible devils putting up the posters just behind everyone’s ears. On the other hand, scientists claim that whoever put up those posters must be part of an activist group that is trying to raise awareness of their advancement in science. However, the media claims that there had been no witnesses of whoever was putting up those posters, even false claims were nonexistent. The world is bewildered by the mystery of the teleportation device poster, now more popularly dubbed as “TD posters.”

September 11

The very next day, four planes crashed. Amidst the mass hysteria caused by the claimed terrorist attack, the TD posters mysteriously disappeared, along with the memories that such posters actually existed.
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Old July 1st, 2013 (6:02 AM).
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Interesting choice of dates/events to use for the story, I'll grant you that. Wonder if someone just teleported away the posters though The concept is intriguing, and might have potential in a larger story too.

I do feel that a bit more could have been made about the mystery behind the posters. For instance a bit more setting up of the mood of reaction to the posters rather than just statements that group a said this, group b said that.

A few other notes.
It has been two weeks since the ‘teleportation device’ poster phenomena have occurred.
I think the quotes there could be dropped, and there's a latter case where you used " rather than ' as well, so a touch of inconsistency there.
However, the media claims that there had been no witnesses of whoever was putting up those posters, even false claims were nonexistent
Run on sentence here. Probably a point where some more expansion into the mood as mentioned above could go. (E.g. how did people react to the media reports?)
now more popularly dubbed as “TD posters.”
Besides the quotation mark point made above, I think the full stop should go outside of them.
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