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FlareBlue

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  • Age 24
  • Seen Feb 28, 2015
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Nolafus

Nolafus

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Thanks for posting your story, but I'm afraid people aren't going to be too inclined to read it, since the giant block of text is not only intimidating to read, but bad for the eyes. Don't worry, with a few spacing tips, the story can be very inviting to read, so let's start!

You want to create a break after each paragraph and dialogue lines. The thing to remember is to hit that enter button twice to create a space between the paragraphs, and not just a new line. I learn best with examples, so let's apply this to some of your writing here.

This is what it is currently:
Everyone was wearing different coloured warm fluffy jackets for the low temperature in the cave. The boy had a cyan blue one on him. All the kids entered the cave after their teacher, which revealed an amazing site of blue glittering ice covering the room that had been pre lit up with torches in some areas. White clouds billowed out of the talking kids mouths while they continued through the cave into a slightly darker area. Some friendly Seel approached the class. One rubbed against the boy, its fluffy white coat shining in the reflection of the ice. The boy patted it on the head and it kept its usual relaxed face with its tongue sticking out of its mouth. "Seeya." The boy whispered to the pokemon as the class moved on to their next area to explore. "Follow me class and don't wander off." The female teacher said whilst the class settled down in an area with a lot of Seel in the room.
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And with spacing, it turns into this:
Everyone was wearing different coloured warm fluffy jackets for the low temperature in the cave. The boy had a cyan blue one on him. All the kids entered the cave after their teacher, which revealed an amazing site of blue glittering ice covering the room that had been pre lit up with torches in some areas. White clouds billowed out of the talking kids mouths while they continued through the cave into a slightly darker area. Some friendly Seel approached the class. One rubbed against the boy, its fluffy white coat shining in the reflection of the ice. The boy patted it on the head and it kept its usual relaxed face with its tongue sticking out of its mouth.

"Seeya." The boy whispered to the pokemon as the class moved on to their next area to explore.

"Follow me class and don't wander off." The female teacher said whilst the class settled down in an area with a lot of Seel in the room.

After about 10 minutes of the teacher talking about Seel, the boy felt something alluring him to a certain dark tunnel to the left of him in the room. He felt like he had to go in there. An aqua blue light was illuminating the small room he had arrived in. The light was coming from, what looked like a blue orb at the end of the room wedged in the ice.
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With the spacing, the story doesn't look like a giant wall of text, and people won't be straining their eyes to keep their place. It will help people that click on the title to actually read it through, which might net you a few more readers. If you have any questions with this, don't be afraid to ask away!
 
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