Two things. Your dialogues have flaws, and I don't understand why you still post them if you can see the flaws.
And, you could make a video for that, instead of putting on 11 screens of the same event. Or just use less screens of it. We all know about Falkner, and yours doesn't seem 'new', in a way.
Oh, I also think that the main ow whistles 'Sienna palette' to me, I don't know why.
And, you could make a video for that, instead of putting on 11 screens of the same event. Or just use less screens of it. We all know about Falkner, and yours doesn't seem 'new', in a way.
Oh, I also think that the main ow whistles 'Sienna palette' to me, I don't know why.