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Old May 20th, 2014, 04:57 AM
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I am Teh Fisharmahn, although not on my ID. I once tried making a game on this forum, but people didn't fancy joining in. I decided, that first I'll write something and check whether anyone likes it and then, if yes, try doing the game. This idea evolved into "Actually writting itself is cool, the game isn't a must". Well, I always had this lust for writting anything but if somebody were to share their views on my piece of art, that would be great.

Because of that I want to know if my idea is good, hence I ask here. So, since it's been about 20 years since Pokemon were created, many of those who liked them as children are grown-ups now. This applies to me too. That's why the candy-like world of Pocket Monsters doesn't seem like a thing I'd like (this does not apply to the games, but to the Anime and many peaces of fan art). That's why I decided that what I want to write is to be more realistic. I wrote something that were to be included in the first part of what I want to write, but I can as well put it here.

Please, give me some feedback. It does not include the main plot, just what the world is to be like in a short version. I'd also gladly answer any questions here.

Here it goes:

Although what you are about to read is not actually a Pokémon fiction, it was heavily inspired by the franchise. There are, although, no Pokéballs nor Poké-centers and even no real Pokémon for that matter. There is going to be death, cursing, excessive amount of blood and some mourning too. You have been warned.
But let’s stick to the idea. What will it be exactly?


This world is a pessimistic view of the future of ours. It is the beginning of the XXIV century, year 2311 to be precise. People made a spectacular progress in many branches of technology – electronics makes life extremely simple, astronautics let people touch the stars, genetics saved lives and…
And then took many more.


It was late XXI century when humans learned to manipulate genes at will. Many visionaries appeared telling tales of a world without weakness. There were to be no illnesses, no premature deaths, no fear for the life of your close ones. This led many people to believe this idea and support it.
And this was the first step to their doom. After gene manipulation became available to everyone who had some excessive amount of money, people were divided into “regular” and “superior” humans. This eventually led to a new kind of racism which developed into a world-wide war won by the majority – the ones, who were not mutated – but for a great cost as less than a billion people survived. When everybody thought the genetics was done with, it struck from where the humans did not expect – nature. It turned out that the first tests were run on plants which were then forgotten. They gained sentience and decided to reclaim what was taken from them – the world itself.


Since then humanity struggles to survive in this broken world. They use what was left of “the old world” – the achievements of science – but achieve nothing on their own as the only thing they care for now is to live.
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Old May 20th, 2014, 05:11 AM
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So basically... what one thinks about a more realistic Pokémon world? You may need to be more specific then, or at least give us some examples. ;p For example... in what way more realistic? Say, is there a more active government; if so, how would it be run best in such a world? Age limits on when one can start training Pokémon? Is it even feasible to have gyms/etc and a career as a Pokémon trainer? Are that the sort of things you were considering on implementing.
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Old May 20th, 2014, 05:29 AM
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Well, kay, I didn't really state this one, so I will now :D

Anyhow, my main idea is that it is a future world broken by science achievements gone wrong. The "pokemon" are mutated animals, plants and objects (that were somehow given sentience and a semi-living form). Although nobody here will ever use a term "Pokemon" (maybe in jokes, but I doubt this one), all these creatures will be easy to identify as one of them. I also mean to add a kind of "pokedex" or more likely a guide featuring all these creatures that any character from my fiction might meet. I would, say, add one entry each part. This would look like a page from some scientific book.

But about the novel. There are a lot less humans after 300 years that there are now. Thay all live in cities hundrets of kilometers apart and very rarely venture anywhere beyond the city walls, as that's where the wilderness is and wilderness means death (to most). That's because the mutated animals and plants live there and they do not always like company.

The idea to make it a little more adventurous is to write about certain people, presumably some that are secretly mutated. There still will be prejudice towards them, so they won't be able to come back to the community. Also, to make it more like Pokemon, people will tame some of these creatures. Of course, most will fear this act and even think of it as wrong and show some sort of hostility.

There will not be Gyms, trainers and Pokemon league. Mostly survival and discovering secrets. There will be secret organisations that still work on genes, some, that try to fight them off. My fiction will mostly circulate around people, who are active in either genetics or fighting it.

I myself am a fanatic of science fantasy, hence the idea of not too distant future with genes manipulation to such an extend, that it can be easily classified as fantasy. I am not biology student, I don't even like it that much, but I'll try to make it as accurate as possible.

And of course, shooting a charizard (named elsewise) in the head with a sniper rifle for trophy will be kinda normal.
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Old May 23rd, 2014, 01:23 PM
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I absolutely LOVE writing stories from a Pokémon's perspective. This time, I'll be writing one about legendaries.

Yveltal is in love with the beautiful Articuno, and he believes that she loves him back. However, when he discovers that she never felt the same and has found a mate, he is consumed by envy. He enters the training of a mysterious Honchkrow deemed "The Corruptor," where he learns many sneaky, evil tactics. One day, Yveltal goes too far, and Articuno enters a fit of rage. In order to make up for his deeds, Yveltal must get help from an old friend, sacrificing his life to return peace to his home.
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Hm... I notice that a lot of these story ideas are very serious. It's okay if I post an idea for a satire here, right?

I've noticed that a common plot in pokemon fanfiction seems to be the evil team leaders joining forces and trying to rule the world together. I want to write a comedic fanfiction that somewhat deconstructs this, because I've always find those fanfiction to be not-very-well though through.

Here's my idea: the main character of the story will be Giovanni, and the narration will be in third-person, told "over his shoulder." The story will begin with Giovanni leaving PWT Facility at night, after a tournament. Long story short, he gets trapped in an illusion by a psychic-type, such as a Hypno. Giovanni then wakes up in a strange building with all of his pokemon missing.

Workers in the building escort Giovanni to a meeting room, where everything becomes clear--this building hold E-Anon meetings, that is, a recovery center for evil people (just like Al-Anon, except far more incompetent)! My idea here is that since the authorities of the pokemon world seem rather lazy, all they have criminals do is have psychotherapy. In fact, in my vision of E-Anon, most "villains" are really just mildly petty people, like trainers who feel guilty about not letting they're Pichu evolve because it's too cute the way it is.

The only other actually evil people in the story aside from Giovanni will be Ghetsis (who will be on medication) and Cyrus, because neither of them reformed to died. Cyrus and Ghetsis will be introduced to Giovanni by the workers at E-Anon, who tell Giovanni that those two have been forced to go to meetings the longest, but for some reason they haven't improved much.

The premise of the story will be that Giovanni must find a way to pretend to reform and escape, while not losing his mind throughout all of these meetings and the team-building exercises that go with them. Cyrus and Ghetsis will be involved as well, although Ghetsis will probably end up recovering his Hydreigon and then he'll try to make it eat everyone or something.

I have most of the story worked out, but I'm not totally sure how to end it. I'm thinking that Giovanni will actually end up wanting to do evil effectively again, while it ends up being the workers that "fall off the wagon,'' as it were?
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Old May 25th, 2014, 03:55 PM
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Alright, in hindsight, I really should've said more. Okay, to elaborate on my original idea:

Basically, when Cyrus ended up opening that rift/portal/whatever you call want to call it to Distortion World, even though Giratina was stopped by the original hero, it basically screwed up the barriers between worlds. Meaning that Cyrus screwing with the Legendaries is slowly causing the Apocalypse and that, in a currently undecided upon number of years, the world would essentially get consumed by the Distortion World, which would probably cause the deaths of many, if not all, of mankind.

Saturn, now running the reformed Team Galactic as a sort-of mega corporation, would be made aware of this due to one of the company's projects on Mount Coronet, would end up forming a new Team Galactic to do what he thinks is saving the world by way of trying to use the Legendaries in some way.

It would take a slightly AU approach to Platinum's ending (Lucas didn't defeat Cynthia and become Champion, Barry has ended up working at the Battle Tower and is following in the footsteps of his father Palmer, and Dawn is trying to become a Pokemon Professor like Rowan.)

It would likely be a relatively short-to-average length story in terms of chapters, and I am wanting to use these pre-existing characters and some original characters to try and give an in-depth insight into all viewpoints on the story's conflict and the repercussions their actions would have on everything. I hope that makes sense.

So, I hope that is sufficient information to get a general idea concerning it. I also need to come up with a title, so any suggestion for that are more than welcome. Like I said, suggestions, opinions, etc. are requested.
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Old May 25th, 2014, 09:19 PM
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Basically, when Cyrus ended up opening that rift/portal/whatever you call want to call it to Distortion World, even though Giratina was stopped by the original hero, it basically screwed up the barriers between worlds. Meaning that Cyrus screwing with the Legendaries is slowly causing the Apocalypse and that, in a currently undecided upon number of years, the world would essentially get consumed by the Distortion World, which would probably cause the deaths of many, if not all, of mankind.
This sounds like a fine idea to me. There's only two suggestions I would make:

One, it isn't like the portal to the Distortion World closed or anything. Is Saturn going to go searching for Cyrus? Does Cyrus (assuming he's even alive) know what's going on? If so, does Saturn know that he knows that?

Second, how does Saturn figure out that the world is being consumed by the distortion world? If it looks like some huge disaster, why would Saturn notice before anyone else? People travel around Mt. Coronet all the time.

Because your plot idea is vague, I don't get the sense of Saturn's motivations or anything like that, so I can't offer any advice on that front. Not that I really understand the characters of the Galactic Admins anyway, but...
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I was recently inspired by The Kane Chronicles trilogy by Rick Riordan, and wanted to write something somewhat similar with Legendary Pokemon.

I was thinking (NOTE: the following would make more sense if you have read The Red Pyramid) about which legendary Pokemon the two protagonists should host (like a god possessing a human, for example).

I am having difficulty picking which mascot legendaries I should use...

(Female lead on left, Male on Right)
Ho-Oh and Lugia?
Kyogre and Groudon?
Palkia and Dialga?
Reshiram and Zekrom?
Yveltal and Xerneas?

I have narrowed it down to these. Can someone help me decide?
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Old June 21st, 2014, 07:05 PM
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I think the best answer you're going to get here is that we can't make that decision for you. Each one of those legendaries have their own special powers, and only you can decide which ones would fit your story best.

There's also the matter of how people here might not have read that series of books, and aren't sure how to help you best on your story.
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Asty's right that this needs to be your decision, especially because of how fundamentally this should affect the events in your story. Ho-Oh and Lugia for example have vastly different roles in the world than Xerneas and Ylvelvalvulwhatever. I would pick whichever ones you find most compelling and interesting on their own and use what you find interesting about them to help drive the story.

(And yeah, I don't know what books you're talking about, so I might be totally off base.)

If you're just looking for an arbitrary tie-breaker though, pick Ho-Oh and Lugia because they're the coolest and Gen II was the best. :D

EDIT:

PLOT TWIST they weren't actually legendaries they were just Guilmon the whole time MIND BLOWN
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Hey guys first post here and I'm just looking for possible interest in a retelling of Pokemon Platinum with numerous changes and stronger characters. I'm hoping to make it more serious than the games and without romance being a main factor like lots of other fan fiction.

So far I have thought it would be good to portray Dawn, Barry, and Lucas as more of a team fighting through the Sinnoh and Team Galactic together. Lucas would have to learn to become a better leader and get out of the shadow of his Dad who was looked down upon for his obsession with the trio of Dialga, Palkia, and Giritina. Barry would still be the fast passed hot head he was in the game but putting more emphasis on him having to think more before he acts. And finally Dawn will act as the smartest of the three teaching them about Pokemon she learned about with Rowan and learning to become less of a stick in the mud so to speak.

I was planning on giving Dawn a Piplup because you know.... Barry a Turtwig to help him learn patience better as he has to deal with allow Pokemon and Lucas a Chimchar.

Any thoughts of suggestion would be loved and just an average amount of interest in a more mature and story driven adventure. Thanks
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Old June 23rd, 2014, 03:31 AM
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Hey guys first post here and I'm just looking for possible interest in a retelling of Pokemon Platinum with numerous changes and stronger characters.
Hi there! Just so you know, I've merged your thread with this one in the subsection. The main section is only for stories rather than plot ideas.

Having done a retelling of another Pokemon game myself, I'd say I have interest in the sort of idea. :V With these I feel it's important to make sure that you are putting your own twist on it, and to deviate from just following the game's layout without doing that. Otherwise, readers may as well just go and play the games instead. If you can do that then sure, it's worth trying. I'll add that it'd be a timely process to 'retell' a whole game, speaking from experience.
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Hmm, yeah, romance subplots do tend to get thrown in a lot in standard fics that follow the general game plot or just the standard 'original the trainer goes to become champion while beating team ___' sort of fics.

In what ways do you intend to make the story more serious than it was in Platinum? There's a number of ways to take it, I feel.

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So far I have thought it would be good to portray Dawn, Barry, and Lucas as more of a team fighting through the Sinnoh and Team Galactic together. Lucas would have to learn to become a better leader and get out of the shadow of his Dad who was looked down upon for his obsession with the trio of Dialga, Palkia, and Giritina. Barry would still be the fast passed hot head he was in the game but putting more emphasis on him having to think more before he acts. And finally Dawn will act as the smartest of the three teaching them about Pokemon she learned about with Rowan and learning to become less of a stick in the mud so to speak.
Neat that you already have some characterisation - and character development - in mind, so that's promising. (And gasp - a protagonist with a father? Haha, oh Pokemon.)
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Any thoughts of suggestion would be loved and just an average amount of interest in a more mature and story driven adventure. Thanks
Arguably, their choice of starter isn't quite as important as how they are used in the story. Consider how you'd characterise those Pokemon and maybe also include them in some of those ideas for the trainers (although it seems you may already be doing this too!) - say, how would the Turtwig teach Barry patience? (Think there's a typo there too - 'deal with allow Pokemon' is confusing).
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Old June 23rd, 2014, 11:04 AM
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Hey there thank you for responding first off and thanks for getting my thread in the right place I just got my account and this was my first post.



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In what ways do you intend to make the story more serious than it was in Platinum? There's a number of ways to take it, I feel.
I was thinking about putting a lot more emphasis on the Team Galactic plot and make many more people (Gym Leaders and maybe backup for Looker) involved with stoping them so they would be better represented as a stronger organization instead of a team that got taken down by a couple of kids. So I was go I was also going to try to put more emphasis on Cyrus and a character and show why he wants to destroy the world more than just saying he thinks it is bad. I was also planning on having Pokemon die... I think nuff said.


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Arguably, their choice of starter isn't quite as important as how they are used in the story. Consider how you'd characterise those Pokemon and maybe also include them in some of those ideas for the trainers (although it seems you may already be doing this too!) - say, how would the Turtwig teach Barry patience? (Think there's a typo there too - 'deal with allow Pokemon' is confusing).
Wow can't believe I missed that typo. I meant so say deal with a slow Pokemon as it would clash with his hot headed and fast mind set.

Finally I have a script I just wrote up really quickly to kind of showcase my style. Its not very professional though and hard to read as it is formatted for a script for an anime episode. You have been warned.



This is Lucas. He is a sixteen year old hoping to one day become a Pokemon master just like his father. Nothing will stop him from defeating all 8 gyms and the pokemon league. He as vowed to become the greatest trainer in Sinnoh and maybe even the world! But first he has to get out of his room and away from his TV

TV: Special news today coming from Sandgem town today as the famed Pokemon researcher known to many as Professor Rowan has returned from the Kanto region back to his home, the Sinnoh. He has been quoted saying he will set up the first world class research facility in the Sinnoh in Sandgem Town in order to help research the legendary Pokemon said to be living in Lake Verity

(commotion heard downstairs and crashing heard)

Barry: sorry sorry sorry

(running up stairs heard)

Barry: Lucas Lucas did you hear?

TV: In other news a streak of red was seen in the sky today in Hoenn

Barry: a streak of red huh, wonder what that could be, I mean did you hear?

Lucas: slow down barry hear what?

Barry: Oh my god this is so great some professor guy like rowan or something is in sand gem town. I heard you can get pokemon from him if you get there. We gotta go now Lucas! Before all the pokemon are gone!

Lucas: Ok lets go race you there

Barry: Ha youll never beat me in a race and pretty soon you'll never beat me in a pokemon battle either

(both run out the house)

Lucas’s Mom: Huh lucas where are you going?

Lucas: gonna get some Pokemon mom ill be back before dark!!

(lucas pops his head back in the door)

Lucas: Love you!!

Barry: Your making this to easy come on Lucas!!!!

(Barry’s mom open her door)

Barry’s mom: where are you two going in such a hurry!!
(Barry and Lucas are running until Lucas trips over a branch and hits a small tree dropping a nest from it Starly then attack them both)

Dawn: piplup bubble beam pronto!!

(Piplup scatters the Stary and saves barry and Lucas)

Dawn: Piplup return!

Dawn: you reckless fools you ruined my research i almost had that starly egg

Barry: ughh those Pokemon ripped up my jacket

Dawn: ughh those pokemon ripped up my jacket (in mocking voice) the nerve of you. let me tell you something…

Barry: Barry

Dawn: Barry, didn't your mother ever teach you its not nice to talk over other, and it would be nie if you showed a little consideration for my loss instead of mooring over your ugly jacket

Barry: Hey calm down girl we were just trying to get some pokemon and I take pride in how I dress, something it appears like you don't

Dawn: WHAT IS THAT SUPPOSED TO MEAN!!!!

(Rowan walks up)

Rowan: dawn what is the meaning of this is your yelling what scared off that flock of stary i just saw?

Dawn: Proffesor I’m sorry it just that umm

Barry: wait your professor rowan?

Dawn: what did i say about interrupting me?!

Rowan: yes i am child and whats your name

Dawn: this is Barry hes the nimrod who scared off all the staly

Barry: sorry prossor but me and my friend here were runnig to get pokemon from you

Rowan: (laughing) do you think i just give out pokemon?

Barry: well i mean kind of like i heard you were from a guy who heard it from the news or something i dont remember it could have been lemme think umm

Rowan: My my your brain runs at full speed doesn't it
Barry: (embarrassed) ya well

Rowan: forgive me but im not sure i know your name

Lucas: ohh sorry professor im lucas and im the one who hit the stary nest and made them go haywire sorry

Barry: ya so maybe you should give the evil eye to him not me lady

Dawn: Ill give the evil eye to whoever i want, me and my ugly clothes are free to do as we please. And trust me it not like i want to stare at you, it hard to stare at such a disgusting face to be honest

Barry: Why you I’ll…

Lucas: (grabs barry) we should probably be going back to twin leaf town

Rowan: your going to twin leaf town? why dont you two escort me to Lake verity then its not far off and considering the commotion you stirred up its the least you can do

Lucas: we’d be happy to professor

Rowan: and if you two want pokemon then why dont you try out these two

Dawn: proffesor your not really going to give them those are you

Rowan: well see dawn

(rowan reaches into his bag and pulls two poke balls)

Rowan: for you barry, this pokemon should be right up your alley

(barry gets a turtwig)

barry: really professor and slow turtwig?

(Turtwig tackles barry)

Rowan: hes almost as hot tempered as you'd say

Rowan: here lucas this one is for you

(Lucas gets a chimchar)

lucas: what is it professor?

Rowan: its a chimchar a fire type pokemon

Barry: hey no fair fire beats grass
rowan: ahh i see you know more about pokemon than would meet the eye, dawn you can head back to the lab im sure these two can escort me just fine

Dawn: but but

Barry: you heard the man leave us be we got important stuff to do

dawn: Ohh would you shut up

barry: bye bye love you!!

Dawn: Im going to kill you i swear!!
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Alright, so I have an idea for a mature rated fanfic. Here's what I wrote from my moment of inspiration:

Living in ___, with his father as a doll maker, while his son lives upstairs. He suffers severe mental issues, as his mother died in a freak accident one week prior. He develops connections to the dolls his father has given him, attracting a lone Shuppet to absorb his twisted thoughts, his fear and anxieties. Eventually, the boy notices his manic episodes lessen by the day, and investigates the occasional sounds in the attic. When faced with the Ghost-type Pokemon, he is overjoyed, and loves the Shuppet straight away.

The Shuppet deicdes to stay, and become his partner Pokemon. Mostly because his thoughts can be dark, and twisted, and Shuppet wouldn't want to see his partner go insane. Eventually, the boy is old enough to go out on a journey with Shuppet, challenging Gyms and becoming Champion of the ___ region. But, there's an organization out yet again to destroy humanity. There are known as Team Nightmare, and their goal is to capture Darkrai, and use it's horrible powers to control people through fear.


Side effects: Our protagonist will occasionally see people as dolls, himself as a doll, and view human life on a much smaller scale.

So... what do you think?
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Alright, so I have an idea for a mature rated fanfic. Here's what I wrote from my moment of inspiration:

Living in ___, with his father as a doll maker, while his son lives upstairs. He suffers severe mental issues, as his mother died in a freak accident one week prior. He develops connections to the dolls his father has given him, attracting a lone Shuppet to absorb his twisted thoughts, his fear and anxieties. Eventually, the boy notices his manic episodes lessen by the day, and investigates the occasional sounds in the attic. When faced with the Ghost-type Pokemon, he is overjoyed, and loves the Shuppet straight away.

The Shuppet deicdes to stay, and become his partner Pokemon. Mostly because his thoughts can be dark, and twisted, and Shuppet wouldn't want to see his partner go insane. Eventually, the boy is old enough to go out on a journey with Shuppet, challenging Gyms and becoming Champion of the ___ region. But, there's an organization out yet again to destroy humanity. There are known as Team Nightmare, and their goal is to capture Darkrai, and use it's horrible powers to control people through fear.


Side effects: Our protagonist will occasionally see people as dolls, himself as a doll, and view human life on a much smaller scale.

So... what do you think?
I like the concept of the Shuppet and the boy's relationship. I think it would be very easy to build off of that and add more into the story. So, on that part, I don't have any real critique for, as I like it a lot.

One thing I don't like is the league challenging with the evil team. I mean, it's just been done to death. Although, I've never been a fan of journey fics, so this is just my personal bias coming through. Honestly, it seems like an add-on to me. I would much rather see the bond between the boy and the pokemon grow through another path, but this is only my opinion. If you really want to do a journey fic, by all means, go for it!
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I've already posted my Fanfic here, and I think I should lay out a few plot points. My Fanfic is a mix of Pokémon R/B/G/Y/Fr/Lg, the anime(Kanto & Orange Islands plotline), and Pokémon Adventures, a retelling of the Kanto story, but combined, featuring Red and other familiar characters. So Red will meet Satoshi and other Anime characters like that. Basically what I'm trying to say is that the Fanfic will focus more on the game plotline than the Anime or Manga. I've managed to combine a few things like the Orange Islands are all part of the Sevii Islands, Blue's middle name is Gareth(AKA Gary), and other things like that. As far as the Pokedex goes, it is already programmed the nationaldex, which follows up the current Gen VI one. My main intention is to get through Kanto and eventually reach Johto, in which whatever happened in Kanto will be carried on in Johto like in the games. As how the mood of the story goes, it's all fun and games now, but it'll get darky and gritty later on. R/B/G/Y storyline ends when whoever is going to be champion is defeated. The Fr/Lg storyline will then play out, and the events from the Anime(Orange Islands) will happen too. Yes there is love involved, but it will only be heavy in the first parts of the story and it will quiet down once things start to get more violent. Also, Satoshi's team(Ash) will be different, but will still have all the Pokémon that he has ever caught. My only problem is that I'm trying to get up to Gen 4, Sinnoh, and I was thinking to make Gen 3 and Gen 1 happen at the same time and have Gen 2 and Gen 4 happen at the same time. So Red would meet Hoenn characters like Brendan or May, but the problem is since Gen 1 and Gen 3 happen at the same time, and Gen 3 is having a remake, I need to know what exactly happens in Gen 6's remake of Ruby and Sapphire. I was thinking of waiting for the remake and just play through it and get some elements into my story. I hope I made sense :/
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This is an idea that I'm building a fanfic around. The basic story is this.

Arceus battles Zyta and is badly wounded. He manages to trap Zyta in a pocket demension before scattering his 18 plates over Earth. He crumbles into dust and fades away. On Earth, a new kind of stone has been discovered. Called Bio Stones, they merge a trainer with their Pokemon. Only five stones have been discovered so far. The stones aren't big. The first stone is dark blue and sports a dragon paw print. The next stone is a lighter blue and shows a wave on it. One stone is yellow and bears a thunderbolt, one stone is yellow green and shows an insects wing, and the final stone is white with a brown paw print.

To merge with your pokemon, you need their total trust and you must be very close to them. You also need to have total trust in your pokemon. Lance successfully merges with Dragonite. The merged form is human. You gain a black body suit with a thin stripe of the color of your bio stone that runs down your legs. You gain yellow armor that covers your chest, hands, and boots. You gain your pokemon's tail and wear their head as your helmet. Lance gains Dragonite's wings instead of a tail. While merged, you can use your pokemon's attacks to fight. The normal bio stone is stolen by Team Rocket.

It is discovered that the Universe is crumbling without Arceus's control. A plate is found by Ash in his own backyard. Lance decides their best bet is to gather the plates and take them to the Hall of Orgins. Team Rocket crafts a golden belt like the one found on Arceus. Professor Elm is visited by the Unown who tell him the plates must be gathered and taken to the Hall of Orgins where Arceus will be reborn. This is observed by Silver, Giovanni's son. The next Arceus has already been chosen. Giovanni finds a plate and places it on the belt. He realizes that once the plates are all on the belt and at the Hall of Orgins, whomever is wearing the belt will become Arceus. Giovanni decides that he will become the new Arceus.

Two trainers are drawn to two of the stones. Misty takes the wave stone and bio merges with her Staryu, which first evolves into Starmie. Tracy takes the bug stone and bio merges with Scyther. Ash wonders if he could bio merge with Pikachu, but decides against it as he is setting out to travel to Algid to take on the pokemon league there. While getting the Algid pokedex from Professor Oak, Ash sees a flash of light and his hand touches the thunder bio stone. The next thing he knows, he is bio merged with Pikachu.

Lance calms Ash down and explains everything. He's formed a team with Misty and Tracy and would like Ash to join. Later on the team grows to include Lady J, who found the fire bio stone and merged with her Delphox, and Cilan, who wound up with the grass bio stone and merges with his Simsage. Bio merging is not permanent. It is canceled out with a command of devolve. To merge, the command is pokemon's name and type followed by evolution. Attacks are called out, but it is not necessary.

That is all I got for now. What do you think?
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Hello LonelyPonyta! Since this was asking for feedback on a specific idea, I went ahead and merged this with the Plot Bunny Thread. Now, to the idea:

I think it's creative and original. So far, everything seems pretty solid and well thought out. The only qualm I have is Ash and all of his friends finding the stones. There's no such thing as coincidence in writing, so Ash finding a stone in his backyard doesn't seem that plausible. Now, there are other ways on getting the stones to the people you want.

Maybe someone in Kanto finds the water stone, doesn't know what to do with it, so they hand it to Misty, since she's an expert on water types. Lance is similar, since he's the champion. Tracy could find his, I guess. How about the electric stone gets sent to Professor Oak for research, where Ash finds it and accidentally merges with Pikachu? I don't know, I'm just not a huge fan of coincidences, since you literally control every aspect of your story. You don't have to do this if you like the way you have it set up, so it's just a suggestion.
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First off, thanks for getting my thread into the right forum. I wasn't sure where to post it. I like your ideas. The story is still in research and development. It does make more sense for the dragon and water stones to be found by other people and taken to Lance and Misty.
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A story about a shiny Eevee who becomes an even rarer uniquely colored Umbreon. An ancient evil stirs, threatening to tear the world apart.

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Everything sounds better in my head; when I try putting it into words, it just feels off to me.

What to do?

It's a reluctant hero story; she's just in the right place at the wrong time and gets more or less thrown into chaos
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I've merged your thread with the plot bunny thread sticky.

I'm not quite sure what to say, because there isn't much to comment on. What does for instance the Umbreon being shiny have to do with the evil you mention? Does the evil only come into play when the Pokemon evolves Is this Umbreon a hero/chosen one, or not? What is the evil? Basically, the more you give us, the more we can comment on the idea.

The first post/s of this thread may help you with brainstorming and how to put it into words too.
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Pokemon blame her for the evil, just because she's unique; cast her out of her home and she gets dragged into a fight she wants no part of, but can't run away from because it'll destroy everyone and everything she holds dear
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