How did he know his father was murdered if he did not know who he is? I suggest you clear this up but since I really did not ask for this before, I'll go ahead and
accept you.
Also, you missed sentence number 1 in personality. It starts with the word "likes" instead of "he likes."
Some improvements: vary your word usage. I noticed you always seemed to use "he has" in starting your sentences and that kinds of put a monotonous tone in your writing.
Some notes again. This would be for improving your SU from a GM perspective and from someone who's been roleplaying for quite some time now. No need to flip out.
For your appearance, I wouldn't exactly call 5'3" "whopping" as that term is usually used for larger things. Whopping 1 million dollars. Whopping 10,000 meters high. Whopper from burger king. You could use other terms to strengthen that Seraph is a short guy. "Merely" could be used in terms of whopping. Or "only."
Also, I couldn't imagine a community where babies and toddlers are 5'3". I think you could remove that part and the sentence could still convey your idea properly. And "alot" in your last sentence in appearance should be two words. Aand I think you missed a "team plasma uniform" in there.
For your personality, "in his perception" is better to be combined to the sentence before it just to invite continuity for the readers.
For your history, I noticed you only changed Plasma to Rocket. While, this RP is indeed set after the original disbanding of the Team Rocket, it certainly doesn't happen thirty five years into the future of that disbanding. And certainly not 35 years into the future after the team's disbanding of Johto under Archer's leadership.
Might I suggest that your family isn't too heavily influenced by other teams as it isn't really doing well in terms of coherence with the timeline. As I said before, your character may be influence by the other teams merely because of his knowledge of them and agrees with them to some extent and plans to create his own team.
I'm not sure if I'm going to accept two characters from players from now. Maybe I'll do that in the future, but let's limit each person to one character. Decide which one you're going to use. Nonetheless, this one is
accepted. Just tell me which one you're gonna use.
"currently nomadic." Which trainers are not? LOL.
anyway,
accepted. I'm not sure if smoking is part of the rating [T] but use it in your posts sparingly. We have some young kids here that are easily impressionable. JK.
Okay, first, regular people have surnames. I don't like people like Red who doesn't have anything after their name. It's just me being picky but could you add a surname there? I wouldn't reject you for not adding one but surnames makes characters more real.
There are a few sentences here that could easily be combined. This one is an example.
He ignore people who come up with reasons why you can't do something. Because according to him nothing is impossible. And since you mentioned about the boy's past, may I ask what happened to Ace that people feel sympathy for him while others just straight up dislike him?
Also, most of your paragraphs are not coherent. Try grouping sentences with the same thoughts into one paragraph and start a new one with a new idea. Try lumping the sentences where people dislike ace but sympathizes with him with that of not being able to make new friends and his Pokemon being his only partner. Try creating a whole new block of text with battle style since that is inherently different from social skills. Then create a new one for other random quirks. For now, you're SU is pending.
That's all SUs I guess. VM me if I missed something lol.
