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Old December 1st, 2007 (2:50 PM).
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Hello. This is my second comic, the other wasn't as good.
Here the are.

IntroDuction:
Brendan has moved to KAnto, and is now hunting for the legendary trainer Ash, to prove his power in pkmn battling.
Chapter One:
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z227/ataylan/PkmnAdvanced1.png
http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z227/ataylan/PkmnAdvanced2.png

That's all for now. Please critizice and comment.
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Old December 1st, 2007 (8:02 PM).
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Well, the speech bubbles had a lot of extra room which took up space on the comic. Also, they weren't in any order. They were just kind of slapped on wherever there was empty space. Other than that, there were no severe issues.
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Old December 2nd, 2007 (7:58 AM).
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I like that idea- and other than the speech bubbles, this is great so far c:
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Old December 3rd, 2007 (8:00 PM).
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Your grammar is terrible, add some order to the Speech Bubbles.
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Old December 4th, 2007 (3:13 AM).
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The text bubbles are destorying your comic dude ><
I suggest you fix it (Like everyone else said)
and put in more panels of comic. but pt the panels vertically, not horizontally.
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Old December 5th, 2007 (12:28 AM).
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The text bubbles are destorying your comic dude ><
I suggest you fix it (Like everyone else said)
and put in more panels of comic. but pt the panels vertically, not horizontally.
^I have to agree with Achamo^
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Old December 12th, 2007 (7:23 PM).
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Too short
Bubbles take up space
Doesn't really have a genre
I'm not saying it zucks, i'm just saying improvement nesscesary, I'd be a B in begginers, i was that bad before anyway
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Old December 13th, 2007 (8:10 AM).
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The bubbles do take up quite a lot of space, and i don't know if it was the way i read it, but the second one didnt really make much sense.
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Old December 28th, 2007 (8:37 AM).
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The bubbles do take up quite a lot of space, and i don't know if it was the way i read it, but the second one didnt really make much sense.
Ye, i agree with perry. But the comic hack was quite nice.
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Old December 28th, 2007 (1:18 PM).
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thnx willbey :D you're awesome. I guess a mod
can close this, zince everyone hates it + im to lazy to make more
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