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Old June 1st, 2008 (10:59 AM). Edited June 28th, 2008 by The Confuzzler.
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Hi i decided to make a new fic so now i'll be working on two fics so enjoy!

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Prolouge

'Hello and welcome to the Pokemon Mystery Dungeon Realm!Speaking of Pokemon you have no idea what Pokemon are do you? Pokemon are vast creatures that come in all shapes, sizes and colors. Pokemon come in their hundreds and have evolved over the years. Legends have been formed and expedition teams search lands undiscovered! This world sure is exciting, but can get very dangerous. And is about to indeed. But enough of that you don't want those details yet! First i'll tell you about Expedition Teams!

Expedition Teams are groups of Pokemon that set out to achieve fame and glory! They go on expeditions and are the most courageous of all Pokemon! They never back down from a challenge even when the worst comes. They set out to discover the legends of the pokemon world!

Next is Pokemon types. All Pokemon have a certain type. These types give the Pokemon Strengths and weaknesses! There is a wide range of types. There is Grass,water,fire and much much more types! Trying to experiment with type advantages never gets old!

Next is moves. pokemon have abilities that can put Pokemon to sleep, paralyze, burn, poison ,freeze and even hurt other Pokemon. Some moves can be extremely mind blowing and destructive whilist some can set up great tactics to dominate foes!

And now is Legendary Pokemon. Legendary Pokemon have powers beyond your imagination! Some can control time and space, others can control certain types,and some can even control whole dimension! But sometimes this power is too much sometimes especially when the legendary Pokemon go bad.'

"and that's all about the Mystery dungeon realm for tonight son,now off to bed!"said a man,he was the Pokemon League champion,Drake. Drake was a 21 year old man with black messy hair and sparkling white teeth. he had a well built body with an always smiling face. He had a variety of Pokemon that he liked to train.

"Aww,Dad. Come on just a little more,please!" said his 10 year old son- Sam. Sam had Jet-black spiky hair ans was in his Piplup pajamas. he was a huge fan of Piplups. Piplup is a blue penguin Pokemon in case you are wondering. Sam wanted to learn more about the so-called fake Pokemon Mystery Dungeon Realm.

"No Sam it's bed time!"his dad said,putting him to bed. The moon shone through Sam's window but litle did Sam know he would wake up in a place that would be the start of a legacy

What will happen now? Is the mystery dungeon realm real? find out in the next chapter of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team Trontar's legacy!

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Old June 2nd, 2008 (08:11 AM). Edited June 2nd, 2008 by The Confuzzler.
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okay now chapter 2! Enjoy!

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Chapter 2 Ariados's request!

"That human.. he must become a Pokemon.. for the sake of all Pokemon.."said a mysterious voice.

Meanwhile with Sam...

"Fnyyumumnum.." mumbled Sam in his sleep. He had got a good rest and was ready to take on the world! Or at least the world he thought he was in. Sam opened his eyes and sat up immediately. A slight breeze came through the air as one question arose,where the heck was he?! Sam stood up and looked around. He was in some kind of forest. He was surrounded by trees and couldn't find a way out. Sam sat there in a daze. Where was his Dad? why was he in a forest? Then he heard someone coming. A Cyndaquil came round the corner. sam stared as the Cyndaquil came over.

"Um..excuse me.."said the Cyndaquil. "Are you lost?"It asked. Sam blinked in astonishment. He had no idea Pokemon could talk. Sam began to speak,hesitating as he went along.

"H-how can you t-talk..your a-a p-po-okemon"Sam said nervously. The Cyndaquil laughed. Sam wondered what was funny about this whole thing. He was confused as anyone could be.

"Just like your a Pokemon and you can talk silly!"said the Cyndaquil. Sam stared at the Cyndaquil, which was now laughing. Sam looked down. a beak,webbed feat,blue body. Sam had turned into a Piplup!But how It wasn't possible. Then Sam noticed something even more surprising that he needed to ask.

"Excuse me.."Sam began."Are we in the mystery dungeon realm?"Sam asked. He couldn't believe he was a piplup. he had no idea how it happened or when. it was like he had never been a human but he coukd remember being one.

"Of course we are!"The Cyndaquil said. Sam glared,he was shocked. It just wasn't possible. Everything in his life had changed over-night and he could do nothing about it. Then a scream of help could be heard from the right. Sam and the Cyndaquil turned around to see an Ariados charging for them. Sam just stared while the Cyndaquil looked worried.

"What's up ma'm?"asked the Cyndaquil politely. Sam looked at the tired Ariados. This must have all been a very messed up and weird dream. Yeah that was all this was,a dream or so he thought.

"My..dear Spinarak.. has been kidnapped by the notorious villian,Kadabra!"exclaimed the Ariados. Sam felt a sense of responsibility come over him as he grabbed Cyndaquil and ran off to where Ariados came from,that must have been where Spinarak was. Dream or not Sam had to save the Spinarak at all costs!

Will sam save spinarak with the help of Cyndaquil?And is this all a dream? Find out in the next chapter of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team Trontar's legacy!

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Old June 3rd, 2008 (07:08 AM). Edited June 3rd, 2008 by The Confuzzler.
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Okay here's chapter 3! enjoy!

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Chapter 3 Dark Forest's dangers!

Sam and the Cyndaquil ran along as they saw an entrance to a dungeon. Sam glared at the entrance. He grabbed Cyndaquil again and started into the Dark Forest.

Floor 1

Sam and Cyndaquil looked around and saw several Pokemon sleeping. Poison insect Pokemon named weedle and a caterpillar Pokemon named Caterpie charged towards them. "Tackle!"Cyndaquil exclaimed bravely. Cyndaquil hit the Caterpie and sent it flying into a tree. Sam just stood,that moment he got stung by a Weedle. Sam tumbled back into Cyndaquil. "Use pound you idiot!" shouted the Cyndaquil as Weedle and Caterpie closed in.

Sam stood up. "Okay..Pound!"he exclaimed as he hit the two Pokemon back at the tree,and winning the battle. Sam and the Cyndaquil smiled and went down the stairs.

Floor 2

Sam and cyndaquil ran down. They couldn't see the stairs anywhere. The place was very dark and sinister. They wandered around as a Teddiursa came up to them. The Teddiursa smiled. "You great dinner for Daddy!"it said. Sam and Cyndaquil stood back. The Teddiursa scratched Cyndaquil,taking away a quarter of his HP. Sam and Cyndaquil stood up as they both let attacks out.

"Tackle!" Cyndaquil yelled,Charging at the Teddiursa and sending it flying into the air. Sam knew what to do. He jumped up in the air.

"Pound!"Sam exclaimed,pounding the Teddiursa with his fists and sending it flying into the ground. It was knocked out s Sam and cyndaquil ran up to the stairs and went down yet again.

Dark Forest deepest Part

Sam and cyndaquil rushed down yet again and saw Kadabra,hanging over spinarak. Sam and Cyndaquil stared in horor as Kadabra used confusion on the Spinarak. The Spinarak went lying to the ground as Kadabra turned around. "You've saw too much..."it mumbled. "Time to say bye bye!"it said as Sam and cyndaquil stood ready for a fierce battle. Kadabra kept teleporting around Sam and cyndaquil,making it almost impossible to hit. Sam looked around,trying to find something to his advantage.

"Help!"cried Cyndaquil. Sam turned round to see Kadabra who was holding Cyndaquil. Cyndaquil frowned as Sam thought hard. Then Kadabra knocked Sam down with a powerful confusion. sam tried to stand up as his beak turned white. An array of bubbles came from his mouth and hit Kadabra in the face.

"Now that's skill!"Sam exclaimed happily. He could get used to being a Pokemon. Kadabra tried to stand up but it seemed the bubble was a critical hit. Kadabra lay on the ground. Sam ran over to Cyndaquil,who seemed in pain. Cyndaquil stood up. Sam smiled. Cyndaquil ran over to spinarak as Sam followed. The Spinarak looked grateful,but collapsed. Sam picked it up and walked out with Cyndaquil.

Back outsside...

Sam and Cyndaquil walked out,smiling. They walked over to Ariados. Ariados smiled. "Thank you very much"Ariados said. Sam smiled. cyndaquil smiled too."Here you two,an oran berry and a sleep seed for both of you. Ariados walked away as Sam and cyndaquil smiled. cyndaquil started to talk.

"I don't think i asked your name"Cyndaquil said politely. Sam started to talk.

"My name's Sam and yours?"Sam asked. He was very happy.

"I'm Flame!" Flame said smiling. sam frowned,again realising that he didn't have a place to go and he was stuck like this. sam sighed and started to walk away.

"Hey,wait!" Flame exclaimed. Sam turned around to walk over to flame. "if you don't have a place to go you could stay with me if you want!"Flame offered. sam considered for a minute. Sam then replied.

"Okay"Sam said. Flame smiled and started to walk back to hus house. They finally got there and flame smiled.

"You better go to bed!" Flame said. sam nodded and ran to his room and went to bed. If he was gonna be stuck like this he might as well make the best of it.

What will Sam do now? Will kadabra come back? Find out on the next chapter of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team Trontar's legacy!

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Old June 4th, 2008 (07:11 AM). Edited June 4th, 2008 by The Confuzzler.
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chapter 4 is here! Enjoy

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chapter 4 The Pidgeot guild!

"The break of light..darkness arising..can't control it.."said a mysterious voice

The next day in flame's house...

Sam woke up,surprised he was still a Pokemon. "Oh man.."Sam said. He got up and ran downstairs. The door was open. Sam ran out quickly. He ran into town and it was very quiet. Then a poison sting,he had felt it before. Sam jumped up and saw Kadabra,weedle and an Ursaring!

"surprise!"said Kadabra using confusion and throwing Sam into a house in which a Pikachu lived. Sam got back up,hurt he was almost knocked out. Then the Ursaring gave a huge slash. Then everything went white.

"It..was just a dream.."said Sam. He was confused at what was going on. He looked at his body,as he thought he was still stuck as a Pokemon. Sam ran downstairs to see flame. Flame turned around,a wide grin covering his face.

"Sam look at this!" Sam ran over to the T.V. Sam watched carefully. Sam was confused and this was why.

"Hi Patrick! dai i i!"said a voice. Sam's mouth gaped as big as the moon. Sam just stared at The T.V.

"Hi Spongebob!" replied the starfish. Sam turned to Flame,who was still watching. . Sam began to speak.

"You..wanted to show me SongeBob SquarePants?"asked Sam. What was so special about it. It was funny but not that important. Flame stared angrily.

"No,dumbo keep watching!"he said. Sam turned around. Flame was right,this was exciting. It was an Exploration Guild.

"Are you sick of your normal boring life,like this one?"jestered the T.V. Sam thought to himself: No way is my life normal buddy!"Sam thought. He was still watching though. He turned to Flame,who was smiling like an aipom with a banana..

"Then come to the Pidgeot Guild!"Sam smilied and turned around. Flame had already left it seemed. Sam ran out the door and kept on Flame's track. He ran up to him. Flame just stopped as Sam stood next to him. They looked at the big building with a Pidgot on the top. Flame steeped forward and got quite a shock.

"Footprints of a... Slowpoke detected!"said the voice from under them. Flame stared down and saw an onix looking up. Flame took a deep breath.

"I'm a Cyndaquil you idiot!"he yelled. The Onix frowned as Flame looked angry. Sam just stared at them laughing. Flame stepped off as Sam stepped on. Sam frowned. Flame was gonna be in a bad mood and he would have to put up with it.

"Footsteps of a Piplup detected.."said Onix. "I don't get payed enough for this"The Onix whispered under his breath. The big door opened as Sam and cyndaquil ran in. They climbed down the ladder. Sam and cyndaquil walked in as a Grumpig walked up to them. Grumpig smiled.

"Hello and welcome to the Pidgeot Guild,how may i help you?"asked the Grumpig. Sam began to speak but Cyndaquil tackled him and started to speak.

"We want to join your guild!"exclaimed Flame. sam stood up,frowning. Sam looked at the Grumpig.

"Well you will have to do a test first!"Grumpig exclaimed. Flame's eyes glowed while Sam just stood,not caring about this whole thing since Flame tackled him. flame jumped up in joy.

"yeah we'll do it!"Flame exclaimed. Speak for yourself..Sam thought. Flame stood ready.

"Okay the test is..." began Grumpig. Why the long wait? Sam thought.

What will the test be? And will Sam get in a good mood? find out in the next chapter of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team Trontar's legacy!

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Okay here's chapter 5! This is a very good chapter IMO

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Chapter 5 Mt.Staros's grand treasure!


Sam had now stood for 5 minutes,waiting on the answer. Grumpig looked very excited and Flame was nearly falling over with excitement. Grumpig began to speak. "I want you to bring back the treasure of Mt.Staros!"Grumpig explained. Flame froze while Sam looked. Grumpig smiled as the whole guild just carried on with their buisness. Flame looked worried.

"O-oka-ay.."Flame said nervously. Sam stood confused. Sam grabbed Flame and they ran to the direction of the mountain. Flame was nervous while Sam was as cheerful as ever,if he passed the test he could find out about exploration teams! They came to a huge opening to a dungeon. Sam took Flame in as Flame looked like he could cry.

Floor 1


Sam and Flame wandered in. Flame still seemed worried but was trying to gulp whatever he was thinking down. Thhen a bird Pokemon came flying down the path,a Pidgey. A Pidgey was a kind of pigeon with a pink beak and brown coat. Sam and Flame stood ready. The Pidgey grinned.

"Bubble!"Sam exclaimed,a load of bubbles flew towards Pidgey and knocking it down. Fire started to gather in flames mouth. Flame shot a group of red-hot flames straight at the Pidgey. The Pidgey lay on the floor,knocked out. Sam turned at Flame. Flame was smiling.

"Let's keep going!"Flame exclaimed. They ran ahead and saw a Sentret who looked annoyed. It stood up and shot a tackle at Flame. Flame was knocked off his feet and now lay on the hard rocks below him.

"Oh no you don't!"Sam exclaimed tackling the Sentret. The Sentret skidded back as Flame stood up,he looked like a quarter of his hp was down. Sam stood ready. They shot a combo of bubble and Ember at the Sentret. The Sentret fell to the floor. Sam and Flame walked up the stairs to the next floor.

Floor 2

Sam and Flame walked up. They looked around. Sam and Flame both ran to the stairs whick were right in front of them. A Spoink bounced along,ready for a battle. It hit Sam in the beak and sent him flying into the wall. Half his Hp was taken off. Flame stood angrily. The fire Horse Pokemon shot an ember at the Spoink. The Spoink just stood,minimal damage taken. Flame was already pretty beat by the Sentre t from earlier. The Spoink hit Flame with the pearl on it's head and sent Flame flying into the wall. Sam and Flame were both nearly out. Spoink started to hop to them. It hopped along to Sam. The Spoink's pearl was about to crash at Sam when Flame took the hit. "Sam...take this.."Flame groaned,he was very weak. Sam saw it was a sleep seed. "Sam...throw it..Spoink..."Flame mumbled. Sam understood and flung the sleep seed at Spoink. The Spoink fell asleep. flame stood up barely and Sam stood ready for anything.

"Ember and bubble combo!"they both said at the same time. The Spoink was knocked out so they continued up the stairs.

Floor 3

Sam and Flame continued up the stairs. There was nothing really on the floor so they just rested. Sam and Flame just went for a nap.

30 minutes later...

Sam woke up and saw the stairs. "Flame wake up,let's keep going!"Sam said. Flame started to wake up. He nodded and the two continued up the stairs.

Floor 4


Sam and Flame continued up to floor 4 and saw a lot of Pokemon. A Starly,a Pidgey and a Sentret stood there. All the Pokemon came over. It looked like the Sentret and the Pidgey were the ones from before. The Sentret and Pidgey tackled Flame and sent them crashing into the wall. The stairs were so close they just needed to get there. Then sam had a plan. he used bubble on the floor so it became very slippery. The Sentret crashed into the wall but the Pidgey flew over it. Sam frowned. Flame stood up and shot an ember at the rocks. It made the rocks fall on Pidgey and it crashed to the ground. The ran up to the Starly,who looked ready. Sam pounded it into the ground while Flame kept using ember,it was burned. The Starly was down. Sam and Flame ran up the stairs.

Mt.Staros Summit

Sam and Flame ran up to see an Electabuzz and behind it was the orb of Staros. The Electabuzz stood. An Electabuzz was a yellow and black striped Pokemon with a whole load of electric attacks. it shot a spark at Sam. It must have realised they wanted the treasure. Sam was about to fall off the edge but he grabbed onto a rock. The Electabuzz smlied and ounched Flame into the wall whick made rocks start falling on it. Electabuzz smiled and shot a thunderbolt at both of them,it could kill them both if it hit!

What will sam and Flame do now? Will they get the orb of Staros? Find out in the next chapter of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team Trontar's legacy!

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kay here is chapter 6! Also i've reached over 100 veiws so thanks to all my readers!

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chapter 6 Kadabra's Return and two new friends!

"Grrr....You have the Mystery Dungeon realm at their knees... Deoxys.."Said the mysterious voice,but this time the voice sounded weak.

On Mt.Staros Summit...

The thunderbolt was heading straight for Sam and Flame. Sam couldn't think of anything and neither could Flame. Then a miracle occoured,a form of true pokemon trust. The sentret from earlier took the thunderbolt heading for Flame and the Pidgey took the one heading for Sam. Sam and Flame smiled weakly as the Pidgey and the Sentret fell to the ground. Sam jumped up as Flame stood up,still feeling weak. Electabuzz gave a laugh. "come on half-pints,show me what ya got!"the Electabuzz exclaimed. Sam and Flame nodded and got ready. Flame stepped on top of the rocks. Sam ran and pounded Electabuzz in the face. He gave the Electabuzz minimal damage. Sam fell back as the Electabuzz flicked him.

"sam here you go!"shouted Flame,throwing a sleep seed for Sam. Sam caught it and threw it at Electabuzz quickly. Sam smiled from ear to ear. Flame ran up to Electabuzz and so did Sam.

"Ember and bubble combo!"they both yelled. Electabuzz fell back. Electabuzz still had a lot of hp but it was decreasing steadily. They kept using their combo until eventually Electabuzz woke up.

"Thunderbolt!"Electabuzz exclaimed,shooting a bolt of thunder at them both. Sam and Flame fell slightly. Flame was trying to stand up but could barely manage to move anything. Sam was about to fall too. "Had enough pipsqueaks?"asked the Electabuzz. Sam and Flame shook their heads. The Electabuzz smiled.

"Sam,watch out!"Flame warned. Sam was confused but then got hit in the face with a fierce mega punch. Sam fell to the ground,if he got hit once more he would be knocked out! Flame frowned.

"Don't think so!"said two voices that were just coming up the stairs. One was a Chikorita and the other was a Torchic. The Electabuzz laughed again. "

"Aww the little girlies wanna fight,okay i'll destroy you like i did to them!"The Electabuzz smiled. The Chikorita was green with a leaf on top. It had little horns coming out around its neck and blue eyes. The Torchic was orange with a beak and two webbed feet. Sam and Flame lay on the ground while everything happened. the Chikorite used vine whip,swiping the Electabuzz off it's feet. The Torchic came in for a powerful ember which knocked the Electabuzz out.

"Thanks!"said Flame and Sam. The Torchic and Chikorita smiled. Sam and Flame stood up,but that was only a taste for what was to come. Kadabra then appeared out of nowhere. Sam and Flame were shocked. The Chikorita and Torchic looked angry. Then the kadabra smiled.

"Thank you for taking that Electabuzz out!"Kadabra said. Sam tried to shoot a bubble but Kadabra dodged. Kadabra took the orb of Staros and teleported again,leaving the team of Pokemon stunned.

What will become of our heroes now?And will they ever become an Expedition team? Find out in the next chapter of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team Trontar's legacy

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Oh my gosh! I hope you continue this because this.. is.. AWESOME! And I love how you made your partner cyndaquil 'cuz on my blue rescue team I became cyndaquil! Oh, don't neglect Cyndaquil's Smokescreen attack.
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'Hello and Welcome to the Pokemon Mystery Dungeon Realm! Speaking of Pokemon you have no idea what Pokemon are do you? Pokemon are vast creatures that come in all shapes,sizes and colors. Pokemon come in their hundreds and have evolved over the years. Legends have been formed and expedition teams search lands undiscovered! This world sure is exciting,but can get very dangerous. And is about to indeed. But enough of that you don't want those details yet!First i'll tell you about Expedition Teams!

Expedition Teams are groups of Pokemon that set out to achieve fame and glory! They go on expeditions and are the most courageous of all Pokemon! They never back down from a challenge even when the worst comes. They set out to discover the legends of the pokemon world!

Next is Pokemon types. All Pokemon have a certian type. These types give the Pokemon Strengths and weaknesses! There is a wide range of types. There is Grass,water,fire and much much more types! Trying to experiment with type advantages never gets old!

Next is moves. pokemon have abilities that can put Pokemon to sleep,paralyze,burn,poison,freeze and even hurt other Pokemon. Some moves can be extremely mind blowing and destructive whilist some can set up great tactics to dominate foes!

And now is Legendary Pokemon. Legendary Pokemon have powers beyond your imagination! Some can control time and space,others can control certian types,and some can even control whole dimension! But sometimes this power is too much sometimes especially when the legendary Pokemon go bad.'
Lordy you have a lot of mistakes. First, see the bolded parts? Those are all your mistakes. You need to space between the whole sleep, paralyze, and burn words. 'Certian' is spelled 'certain'. You didn't need to make the W in welcome capital...

Okay, story wise, why did you need to tell us things we readers pretty much already know? Wouldn't 'he read to the kid about a supposedly imaginary mystery dungeon' suffice or something instead of this? And wouldn't Sam himself know what a pokemon is, or a legendary?

I'm not even going to point out all the other stuff in the other chapters. I couldn't really get into it enough, sorry.
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Thanks for the comment! and dont worry i won't neglect smokescreen! xD

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Okay i'll go back and look. and also the reason i done the thing in the Prolouge was just too get the intro in. The next chapter will be up soon so keep checking back!
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Okay chapter 7 is here!

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chapter 7 A Blast from the past!

On Mt.Staros...

The Chikorita and Torchic smiled. They ran over to Sam and Flame,who were still staring at the spot Kadabra had disappeared from. The Chikorita and Torchic smiled. "You guys okay?"they askeed. Sam stood up,trying to act brave. Flame let out a laugh at Sam,who looked quite stupid.

"Yeah,i guess"Sam said. Flame nodded. The Pokemon all smiled as they exited the dungeon.

At Mineral Town...

White clouds floated about the sky while the son shone down. Sam and Flame walked into Mineral Town,along with Chikorita and Torchic. When they got there the Grumpig from earlier lay on the ground. "Grumpig!"Tthe group of Pokemon exclaimed. Thyy ran over to the fallen Grumpig.

"A..Kadab..weed..Ursari-"mumbled the Grumpig. He was just about knocked out. Then a poison sting,he had felt it before. Sam jumped up and saw Kadabra,weedle and an Ursaring!

"This had happened before somewhere..."Sam said. Kadabrra stepped forward and used confusion on Flame,knocking Flame into Chikorita and Torchic. Sam was surprised,it wasd like that dream,but with a few tweaks. Sam stepped back,fear filling his emerald green eyes.

"Surprise!"said Kadabra using confusion and throwing Sam into a house in which a Pikachu lived. Sam got back up,hurt he was almost knocked out. Then the Ursaring gave a huge slash.

"No way!"exclaimed a voice. It was the Torchic,it had burnt the Ursaring. Then the Ursaring tuurned around,it's sharp claws gleaming as the sun reflected off them. Sam frowned.

"Bubble!"Sam hollered. He shot a bubble at the Ursaring's back. Then Torchic came in for a nasty ember attack into it's belly. The Ursaring tumbled a bit,eventually falling over and crshing to the ground.

"Very good.."said a voice, suddenly Sam had been thrown into the grass,skidding along it at a high speed. Then Kadabra teleported behind the Torchic. Kadabra gave off an evil grin. "With this orb of Staros..i shall unleash a devastating power!"exclaimed Kadabra. Then all of a sudden the orb gave off a bright green glow,the grass in Mineral Town lifted up. Sam was stuck in the air as one Pokemon came,a Pokemon that could warp through time lines. The 'protector of the forest' came down. But around it,a dark glow,as dark as the night sky at winter. It didn't seem like the forest protector anymore...no,it seemed like the forest destroyer! And do you know what that Pokemon was,none other than the legendary Celebi.

"Master..what is your wish?"it said. Kadabra smied. The weedle from before seemed to have ran off. Torchic looked shocked,while Sam couldn't believe how high up he was.

"Bring me the Orb of Mortar!"Kadabra exclaimed. The Celebi nodded,flying away to the north. Kadabra let Torchic go and teleported away. The grass came down and Sam crashed to the ground. It was dark so the group of Pokemon just fell asleep. Little did the Pokemon know that this was only the beginning to their almighty adventure!

Wow Celebi came? That's amazing! Make sure you catch the next catch the next chapter of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team Trontar's legacy!

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Okay here is chapter 8! Enjoy

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Chapter 8 Mineral Town Under Attack!

Sam and Flame woke up. The town was bustling, there was Exploration Teams trying to find the Orb of Mortar, People upping the town's defenses and Pokemon doing their daily shopping. "Hey Flame!"Sam exclaimed. Flame stood up and smiled. The Blaze on his back growing bigger and brighter.

"Hey Sam!"Flame said. The sun shone onto Mineral Town. Then Flame remembered somewhere they had to go. "Sam,the Pidgeot Guild!"Flame hollered, running at top speed to the north. Sam followed,speeding along the streets of Mineral Town. They eventually arrived at the Guild, but the weird thing was the door was open. Flame ran in. Sam followed and they ran in. Grumpig was standing, staring at a wall. And approaching Sam and Flame was Torchic and Chikorita, with Exploration Team Badges!

"Guys, Me and Torchic are now an Exploration Team!" Chikorita said. Sam and Flame turned and looked at each other.

"Say hello to Exploration Team Ruby Grass!"excalimed Torchic. Chikorita and Torchic ran out the door, they must have had a job to do. Sam and Flame continued on to Grumpug, who now noticed Sam and Flame approaching. Grumpig put on a cheerful smile.

"Ah,you two!"Grumpig exclaimed. Flame smiled. Sam smiled too, but all the smiles were broken by a loud crashing noise. Then an Aura Sphere sent Grumpig flying into a wall. Suddenly a Lucario came through a hole in the wall.

"Master Kadabra told me to destroy this guild and all that are in it!" it exclaimed. Sam and Flame got ready for a fierce battle. Sam laughed.

"Oh yeah?"Sam asked sarcasticly. "you and what army?" Sam continued.

"This one!" Replied the Lucario. Two Pokemon came crashing through the roof, a Golem and a Gengar! Golem was like a giant rock with a head popping out. It was brown and some kind of shade of green. Gengar was a ghost Pokemon that used ghost type moves to destroy it's foe. the two Pokemon both had red eyes.

"Sam you should have kept your trap shut!" exclaimed Flame. Then Flame shot a smoke screen at the Lucario, Golem and Gengar.

"Run!"shouted Sam. The Pokemon ran out to find.. it was dark? Flame stuttered a bit.

"i thought.. it was the morning?" Flame exclaimed. Everything was so dark it was hard to see where you were going. Sam and Flame ran to the Town Square, gasping for breath. then they saw Chikorita and Torchic, who were surrounded by Pidgeottos.

"Torchic,Chikorita!"Sam and Flame yelled. It seemed the Town's defenses were down. A lot of Mineral Town was on fire,Pokemon were running to the stream to the South to get some water to put it out. Some Blastoise were trying to put out the fire while others were trying to fend off Pokemon that were tryintg to get into Mineral Town. Sam sht a bubble at a Pidgeotto and Flame shot a smokescreen at them all,making them unable to attack. "Bubble and ember multi combo!"Sam and Flame exclaimed. They shot ember and bubble at every Pidgeotto, taking 5 out of 10 out.

"Sam, Flame save us!"screamed Chikorita and Torchic. A Pidgeotto shot a wing attack at Chikorita,knocking her out. Darkness plunged into Mineral Town, making it hard to battle any Pokemon. Sam pounded a Pidgeotto sending it crashing to the ground. It stood back up and all of the Pidgeotto quick attacked Sam and Flame.

"Don't even think of it!"exclaimed a voice. Suddenly,a blur shot across all the Pidgeotto,knocking them all out.

"G-Guild Master Pidgeot!"exclaimed Torchic,Sam and Flame. Chikorita was knocked out and coukdn't say anything. The Guild Master turned aroound and smiled.

"Yeah that's me!"he replied. Then something unexpected happened, the Lucario, Golem and Lucario from before rushed along.

"We finally found you brats!!"they exclaimed. Lucario shot Aura Sphere at Sam, Go;lem shot Rock blast at Flame, and Gengar shot shadow ball at Torchic knocking the trio of Pokemon.

"I'll defeat you!" Pidgeot said. The Lucario smiled and shot dragon pulse at Pidgeot, sending it flying to the ground. Golem shot Rock Blast, shooting Pidgeot up into the air. And Gengar shot Shadow Ball, knocking it out. They picked up Pidgeot. "Let's take him to Master Deoxys, he will be very pleased! Mwahahahahahahaha!" They all said. They took him to their base.

The next day...

Sam and Flame woke up the next day. Torchic and Chikorita stood by their side. "guys.. Guild Master Pidgeot has disappeared!"They shouted in a panic. The whole Town was running about like crazy. The light had came bacjk to Mineral Town.

"WHAT THE HECK?!" Sam and Flame shouted. They jumped up to their feet, and went into a panic like rest of the town.

Where exactly is Pidgeot? And can Sam and Flame with the help of Chikorita and Torchic sollve the mystery? Find out in the next chapter of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team Trontar's legacy!

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Old June 29th, 2008 (04:07 AM). Edited June 29th, 2008 by The Confuzzler.
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Chapter 9! Not as much drama but you know

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Chapter 9 Team Trontar begins!


Sam and Flame stood in shock, the guild master was one of the toughest Pokemon in town. He couldn't be beaten. "Well we got to help a search party, so see you guys!"exclaimed Torchic. Sam smiled and nodded. When the duo of Pokemon left Flame said something.

"Sam let's try the guild, one more time!"Flame said. Sam nodded, if they became good they could find Guild Master Pidgeot and Sam would have a chance to find out more about Exploration Teams.

Unknown Location...

"Deoxys you can't awaken those Pokemon!"exclaimed Pidgeot. Deoxys smiled.

"You're not in a position to talk back!" Deoxys exclaimed. Everything seemed a blur for Pidgeot, there wasn't much hope left for the Mystery Dungeon Realm.

Back in Mineral Town...

Sam and Flame arrived at the Guild's entrance, they slowly walked in and climbed down the ladder. They ran to Grumpig, who was still injured."Grumpig.." Flame began. "Can we join the Guild?"he asked. The Grumpig smiled.

"Sure, you showed bravery and courage over the past few days, so yes!" Grumpig exclaimed. Then suddenly a Torkoal ran in to the Guild.

"Please, help!" it exclaimed. Sam and Flame turned, and the Torkoal frowned. "I just saw a Torchic and a Chikorita, being beat by an Ursaring!" the Torkoal exclaimed. Sam and Flame turned to look at each other.

"Sounds like a perfect first job for you!"the Grumpig exclaimed. Sam and Flame nodded. "Where did you see it?"asked Gruumpig.

"Fiery Cave!" the Torkoal exclaimed."I tried to beat the Ursaring... but it was so tough!" Torkoal exclaimed. Sam and Flame climbed up the ladder and ran to Fiery cave.

Floor 1


Sam and Flame ran inside. A charmander came up to them and scratched Flame. A charmander is like an orange fire lizard that can stand up. It has a fire at the end of its tail. "Tackle!" Flame exclaimed. Flame knocked the Charmander off its feet.

"Bubble!"Sam exclaimed, shooting countless bubbles at the Charmander. The Charmander fell down.

"Nice work!"said Flame.

"You too!"Sam replied. The Pokemon both ran to the stairs and went deeper into Fiery Cave.

Floor 2


Sam and Flame ran deeper in and heard a roar, it sounded like Ursaring but it sounded very far off. Suddenly a Larvitar appeared. It Rock blasted Flame, taking a big chunk of health away. "Bubble!"Sam exclaimed. The bubble blasted Larvitar into a wall, but it wasn't down yet. It shot a rock throw for Sam. Sam pounded all the rocks off and into Larvitar, sending it crashing to the ground, knocked out. Sam and Flame continued to the stairs, Flame limping as they went.

Floor 3


San and Flame walked deeper into the Fiery Cave. Fire streams surrounded them, it was probably why fire types liked the place. Sam and Flame ate some oran berries, and since there was nothing on the floor continued to the next floor.

Fiery Cave interior


Sam and Flame got to the deepest part to find Ursaring, and Chikorita and Torchic wiped out."Master Deoxys will be pleased that you pests have been taken care of.."Ursaring mumbled. Flame shot a smoke screen around Ursaring, making him unable to see. "*cough* who.. the heck are *cough * you?"asked Ursaring.

"Aww you don't remember us, i feel hurt"Sam said. Ursaring turned around and could faintly see Sam.

"Ah you two... more pests!"Ursaring exclaimed. Sam pounded Ursaring, dealing minimal damage. Flame embered ursaring at the same time, taking his Hp down little by little.

"Bubble and ember combo!"the duo off Pokemon exclaimed, knocking Ursaring to the ground. The Ursaring stood back up , about half its HP down.

"Cut!"Ursaring exclaimed. It hit Flame into San, taking some HP off. Sam was stuck fdor ideas.

"Smokescreen!"Flame exclaimed, it shot smokescreen around Ursaring, making it unable to see.

"Ember and buble combo!"Flame and Sam exclaimed, knocking Ursaring out. The Ursaring crashed to the ground and an orn rolled out of his hand, the orb Of Staros!

"Maybe this could be an important clue.."said Sam and Flame. They woke up Torchic and Chikorita. "Lets get outta here!"Sam said. Torchic and Chikorita nodded, and followed Sam and Flame. They got back to the Guild.

"Thank you for saving us! You guys are the best!" Torchic and Chikorita exclaimed. Sam blusghed At Torchic and Flame blushed at Chikorita. Torchic and Chikorita went to their beds, after all it was night time.

"Well done!"Grumpig exclaimed. "Now you two get a long earned rest!"Grumpig offered. Sam and Flame nodded and ran to their beds and went to sleep.

Unknown Location...

"Master Deoxys.. i lost the Orb of Staros.."Ursaring said.

"Who cares, they can have Celebi's power, we already got that other Pokemon from that orb" Deoxys replied.

Finally Team Trontar has begun! But what other Pokemon did Deoxys mean? Find out in the next chapter of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team Trontar's legacy!

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....Seems a bit rushed to me...But I ain't no writer,so haha.
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