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Old September 22nd, 2009 (03:26 PM).
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I wrote this one shot quite a while ago... I posted it on a lot of places, so why not here? Enjoy!


CHEATER: A ONE-SHOT


The door slides open with a hair-raising screech, revealing the final room; the room that few have ever seen with their own eyes. It is the room where his skills and fears will be put to the test, the room he has endured many long months of rigorous training to get to. And now he's finally here, at the turning point in his life. From here, fate could take him either to his glory, or to his demise. The outcome will decide whether his efforts had been worth it. Will he prevail? Or will he be ruthlessly tossed aside like many others who have gone through the exact same door, thinking the exact same thoughts?

The boy hesitates at first, then enters. He surveys his surroundings with wide blue eyes as he carefully makes his way across a narrow bridge, each step sending tremors through the thin material of his determination. He soon approaches a slab of rock cut into a perfect octagon. Its edges are spaced just a few feet away from smooth tiled walls. Up above light filters through a large glass dome, illuminating the battlefield. The faint sound of churning water can be heard some hundred feet below.

The door closes behind him with a bang, leaving no means of escape except for a door on the other side of the room. It is blocked by a tall smiling man. A wiry strand of blue hair sticks out from under his hat. His frame is hidden by a white cape that brushes the tips of his pointed shoes. It billows around him as he slowly descends down the stairs.

“Welcome challenger,” Wallace says, his calm voice producing a massive echo within the walls. The boy shudders, then clenches his fist as Wallace continues. “You have gone through four trainers, each very unique and very powerful. It has not been easy to get to where you are now. And I'm afraid it won't be as easy to get through the door behind me as it will to beat me... wait- ” he pauses for a few moments, then slams his palm into his face. “Aww, crap! I can never get this thing right!” The boy looks down to hide his smirk. An involuntary 'Ha!' escapes from his pursed lips, echoing throughout the empty arena.

At this, Wallace's face reddens. “Stop laughing! I don't think you would find it so funny if you were in my situation. I'm stuck in this stupid room for nine hours each day! I get no breaks. I have to repeat the same blasted phrase to every last soul who walks in here! It does things to your memory, you know, so it's perfectly normal to make a mistake.” He grimaces and crosses his arms. “You're my second challenger today. The first one was a girl, about your age. She just wouldn't shut up about becoming the Pokémon League Champion! 'Oh, I'm gonna be the best trainer in the world! Every trainer will know my name!' She talks about it as if it's the best thing in the world!”

The boy takes a step back from Wallace, who seems to be lost in his rant. “Hmph!” he snorts. “The only thing that keeps me from quitting this accursed job is the salary. But being paid to stand in a room all day... the least they could do is give me a chair...” Wallace tilts his head to the side, his gaze flickering to the boy. “Oh, sorry. I almost forgot you were there. Sorry you had to hear all that. We'll battle now. But I'll warn you beforehand - I'm paid to win, so you'll be getting no mercy from me!”

The boy draws himself up to his full height, his face heavy with concentration. “I'll battle you no matter what the stakes may be!” he shouts.

Wallace gives a stiff nod. “Everybody says that. All right, let's just get this over with. The match between Champion Wallace and whatever your face is shall now begin, yadda yadda yadda. These formal phrases just drain my energy... Send out your first pokémon.”

Upon his command, the boy reaches into his backpack and pulls out a shiny Pokéball, grateful for its cool touch against his sweaty palm.

“Go, Manectric!” he yells as the Pokéball is tossed up into the sky. At its peak in the air, a jet of red light is released from its center. It travels down to the chipped surface of the battlefield, where a rough outline of a pokémon forms. Half a second later a Manectric stands at the boy's side. The pokémon's thin blue legs tremble under its weight as it lowers into a crouch. It eyes Wallace hungrily, ferocious growls lost in the sound of crackling electricity.

“Great. Another electric type. Aspiring trainers are so unoriginal. Whatever happened to grass?” Wallace sighs, and withdraws a Pokéball from a pocket in his cape. “Go, Wailord.” After the same flash of ruby red, a whale the size of a ship materializes before Manectric. It utters a low, rippling cry that shakes the walls of the arena.

“I'm guessing that's why they made the ceiling so high?” the boy says aloud, looking up at the enormous Pokémon.

From somewhere behind the Wailord, Wallace's muffled voice is heard. “No, it's to make my voice seem deeper and louder! Gosh, does no one read Pokémon League Weekly anymore? Wailord, use Water Spout!”

Frequent giggles still rack his body as he thinks: Pokémon League Weekly? Aw man, this guy is gonna be so easy!

The Wailord's back arches, nearly touching the tip of the dome. It exposes a large blowhole, out of which a jet of clear water shoots out. The water rains down on the battlefield, but does no visible damage to Manectric, whose gaze still doesn't waver from its opponent.

“Uh... okay. Manectric, use Thunderbolt!” the boy commands, watching with pleasure as white sparks gather around its slender body. From the ceiling, a dark cloud begins to form, from which a thick bolt of lightning flashes.

Wailord lets out a terrible cry as the thunderbolt strikes its body. It topples to the side in a fit of high-pitched squeals. It now lies on the ground, twitching from the electricity that still sears through its body. Manectric snorts, and the cloud disappears instantly. A wave of glee washes over the boy as he watches.

“Ha! I paralyzed your Wailord!” The boy shouts over the pokémon's deafening cries. “Now he can't attack!”

Wallace sighs, his words barely audible. “Why do people underestimate me so? Do you not think that I have come prepared?” Once again he reaches into his cape, this time pulling out a small bottle. A mysterious green liquid sloshes around in a glass case labeled 'Full Restore'. Wallace strides over to the squealing Wailord, aims the tip of the bottle at its body, and sprays the liquid. The boy watches as the pokémon's body slowly relaxes. Eventually, the screams stop. With a final grunt Wailord rolls over onto its belly, perfectly balanced, anger swelling in its beady black eyes.

The boy recoils from shock. “What?! You cheater!”

Wallace shrugs nonchalantly. “It doesn't say in the rules that you can't use items to help your pokémon.”

“Still, it's not fair! You're supposed to be the strongest trainer in Hoenn! Don't you think it's a little low for you to be using healing items? Or are you just too soft to take a hit?” The boy taunts.

Wallace gives a wry smile, but does not reply to the boy's accusation. Instead, he turns to Wailord. “Wailord, use Surf!”

The ground begins to shake so violently, that the boy finds himself wondering how the octagon doesn't collapse from the tremors. All around him, water begins to rise in mighty torrents. It groups into a giant column directly behind Wailord, which then sweeps the entire area of the battlefield. The boy watches in horror as Manectric is swallowed by the waves.

“Manectric, no!”

From beneath the waves, a gurgling sound is heard as the frantic pokémon tries to resurface. Twice the boy is forced into a false grin as he catches a glimpse of a triangular yellow head poking out of the water, but Manectric is soon overwhelmed by the sheer force of the current. His bruised body washed up at the boy's feet.

“Manectric is unable to battle. Send out your next pokémon,” Wallace says as the boy leans over to return Manectric.

“Cheater!” the boy hisses, and Manectric vanishes into the Pokéball with a flash of red.

He turns to his backpack and is about to pick it up, only to find that the fabric is darkened with the weight of water. Frantically the boy digs through its many pockets, groaning as he finds each of them to be filled with water. Many of his items are ruined, and his berries are crushed in their pouch. The boy jumps to his feet and faces Wallace.

“Look what you did to my backpack! My mother gave me this, and she told me not to get it messed up!”

“Gotta read the disclaimers,” Wallace steps to the side, and a small sign tacked to the back door comes into view. Bold red letters spell out the words 'THE HOENN POKÉMON LEAGUE AND ITS RESPECTIVE TRAINERS ARE NOT RESPONSIBLE FOR THE LOSS OR DAMAGE TO YOUR PROPERTY DURING BATTLE.'

“Aargh!” the boy groans, almost screaming. “You'll pay for that one! Go, Flygon!”

The boy's next pokémon leaps out of its Pokéball with swift grace, and hovers a few feet into the air. Its wings seem too small for its plump green body at first, but carry it well. Flygon's eyes gleam with joy behind red protectors.

“Fuh-fuh!” Flygon scпreeches as it struggles to gain its balance, hovering at irregular heights.

“Flygon - ”

“Wailord, use Ice Beam!”

“- Crap! Dodge it, Flygon!”

A beam of blue energy forms in Wailord's open mouth and shoots towards an unaware Flygon, striking one of its wings. With a piercing screech Flygon spirals to the ground, its injured wing folded against its body. On the ground it lies helplessly, shivering as a block of ice molds around it.

A smile tugs at Wallace's lips. “I told you not to get cocky,” he says.

“Not so fast!” the boy cries, and shoves both hands into his wet backpack. He returns with two small bottles clutched in his fists, dripping with excess water. He aims them towards the frozen pokémon.

“Full Heal, and Hyper Potion!”

Yellow and pink liquids mix, slowly dissolving the ice as they are sprayed from their bottles. Flygon's scars fade, and the pokémon rises slowly into the air, unsure what has happened. Wallace seems surprised.

“Why don't you just use a Full Restore? It saves time.”

The boy rolls his eyes and tosses the bottles aside. “Because! That Sidney dude took all my money when I lost to him! I couldn't buy anything else! I wasted my last Full Restore on Elite Four Drake, that cheater! These were some of my last healing items, so you better not -”

“Wailord, use Ice Beam again.”

“CRAP! I TOLD YOU NOT TO!”

“I'm being payed to win! Remember?”

Another beam of blue energy shoots out of Wailord's mouth, speeding towards Flygon.

“Flygon, dodge!” the boy cries. From behind their red domes, Flygon's eye narrow. It evades the oncoming beam with a rough backflip, and the Ice Beam hits a wall. The peal of breaking glass rings through the arena as the tiles fall, exposing bare rock.

“Ouch... the managers won't be too happy about that...” Wallace mutters under his breath.

“All right, Flygon!” the boy reaches up into the air, almost as if to high-five his pokémon. "Now use Earthquake!"

“Fuhfly!”

“Wailord, use Ice Beam again.”

Flygon is too distracted by her trainer's praise to notice Wailord preparing for his next attack. When the boy looks up, he is too late.

“Flygon, move!” he shouts. Flygon's head jerks backwards just as the Ice Beam hits.

“Flygon!” the boy yells as he watches the beam of energy mercilessly casts her upon the ground. Her round belly gives a bounce to her fall, then she lies still.

“WHAT?!” the boy roars as he returns Flygon, never taking his eyes off of Wallace. “That's two of my pokémon! Cheater!”

“Flygon is unable to battle. Send out your next pokémon, unless you'd rather give up,” Wallace winks.

“Never! Go, Ninetales!” The boy looks down with anger upon the pale, fox-like pokémon that sits before him, its nine silky tails fanning around it. “And THIS time, I'm using an X-Attack!” The boy reaches into his backpack again and withdraws a single pill. He holds it out to Ninetales who sniffs it twice, then turns away with a snort.

“Nuh-nine!” it sings. The boy's groan turns into an inhuman growl as Ninetales slinks to the side.

“Get over here, you little demon!” the boy snarls. The pokémon pauses as her head innocently turns.

“Eat the pill. Now!” the boy demands.

Ninetales blinks, but remains still. She gazes knowingly out to her trainer, as if trying to communicate something telepathically to him. After a few moments she walks off again, her tails whipping the boy's arm.

“Ninetales, you worthless HOUND! Get! Over! Here!” he screams, vocal cords searing with pain. A triangular ear flicks, but Ninetales does not heed his words.

“Smooth,” Wallace chuckles.

“She's a new pokémon, okay?” the boy looks up. “She won't freaking listen!”

“I wonder why. Wailord, let's put her our of her misery. Use Surf again.”

“Ninetales -”

The boy could not finish, for the mighty current of water had already swept Ninetales aside like a piece of paper caught in the wind. Unlike Manectric, Ninetales lets the current take her without a fight. Its body washes up at the boy's feet moments later. Wallace shakes his head with dismay as he looks at the fainted pokémon.

“Ninetales is unable to battle. Send out your next pokémon. And be quick about it too. I don't think I can stand such epic failure any longer.”

“Epic failure?” the boy repeats, his voice rising.

“Yes, I said epic failure. Now hurry up!”

“Go, GARDEVOIR!”

“Wailord, Ice Beam.”

Gardevoir, a lean Pokémon of tall stature, emerges from the Pokéball apprehensively, its two green arms behind its back. The last of the red light is still fading from its body as the Ice Beam hits, which sends it skidding backwards. The boy lets out an “Oomph!” as Gardevoir collides with him, and the two fall back.

“Ow! Watch it, Wallace!” the boy grunts, dusting off his jeans.

“Gardevoir bumped into you, not me!”

“Well your Wailord forced it to! All right, Gardevoir, show 'em what you're made of! Use Confuse Ray!”

Gardevoir pauses for a moment to watch Wailord, fear trapped behind ruby eyes.

“G-g-g...” it stammers, and backs away.

“Ice Beam again,” Wallace says. “I have to say, this battle is very enjoyable.”

Once again, the energy for Ice Beam grows inside of Wailord, preparing to fire off at any moment. Its raised arms do little to shield it however, and its ghostly dress ripples as it falls onto unforgiving rock.

“No no NO!” the boy seems to be on the verge of mental breakdown. “I DID NOT COME ALL THE WAY OVER HERE SO I CAN LOSE TO A SMIRKING TALL WEIRDO WITH FREAKING BLUE HAIR! BLUE!”

Wallace is taken aback. “Now! There's no need to get personal. My managers thought it would be best for my image if I dyed my hair a crazy color. Is that so wrong?”

“THAT'S IT! I CAN'T TAKE THIS ANYMORE! YOU ARE GOING DOWN! GO, SWAMPERT!”

Swampert, a large blue pokémon with a series of fins protruding from its body, lands upon the floor with a thud, the last of the red giving way to its murky coloring. Its large mouth curls downward into a grimace of intense concentration, letting its opponent know that it will not be beat. Wallace raises an eyebrow.

“Hmm. That was your smartest move today. I'm afraid I'll have to switch pokémon as well. Wailord, you are returned.”

With a flash of red, Wailord melts into the Pokéball. The boy swallows the bile that rises up in his throat, upset at himself for not being the one to force it there.

“Go, Milotic.” Out of its Pokéball comes a long snake-like pokémon. Its peach-colored body glistens under the sunlight as it slithers away from Wallace, each movement graceful and precise. It halts a good few feet away from its trainer, showing off the colorful scales on its tailfin. Two pink antennae curl upward from where its eyebrows should have been, their soft hue matching that of the silky tresses of hair that tumbled down its body.

The boy's jaw drops as he watches the slender pokémon. “I can't believe it!” he declares. “I've been trying to get one of those since January! January! And all I keep reeling in are stupid Magikarp! Where are the Feebas? Why do other people get them and not me? Why? Why?”

“I'll tell you if you win,” Wallace smiles, rows of perfect teeth flashing in the sunlight. “Which you won't.” His smile grows bigger as he watches the boy's cheeks flush a tomato red.

“All right! Swampert, kill that thing! Use Mud Shot!”

Wallace remains silent, his lips forming inaudible words. Milotic's head jerks backward, and it nods. The boy wets his lips, and his gaze falls upon Swampert again who, without the slightest pause, begins raising mud from the loose gravel and water that has collected within large cracks in the rock. Opening its arms wide, it shoots the particles at the opponent, nearly creating a wall between the two sides. The boy clenches his fists as he listens for Milotic's squeal of surrender... But none comes. Upon opening his eyes the boy catches a glimpse of Swampert, once a proud warrior, soaring through the air and finally meeting the ground. The collision raises loose dirt and rocks, and strips the surface completely of paint. Speechless, the boy turns to Milotic. Its angular face is hidden by its tail, which is bent as if to swing something. The boy's shoulders sag.

“Mirror Coat is useful in cases like these,” Wallace chuckles. The boy's eyebrows meet in a frown as he watches Swampert struggle to get up.

"Hang in there, Swampert!" he bends over to his backpack once more, and withdraws a bottle of Hyper Potion. He runs over to his pokémon and aims the bottle.

"Eat this, Wallace!" he yells as the pink liquid is absorbed into Swampert's body.

"S-s-Swampert!" the pokémon growls as it rises to its full height, towering a few feet above its trainer.

"How could I possibly have eaten that?" Wallace folds his arms from underneath his cape.

"Oh now you're just being annoying. Swampert, use Earthquake!"

"Suh-Swampert!"

Immediately the ground begins to tremble. It starts out small, but then grows stronger and stronger until even Swampert stumbles. The boy is forced to hang on to his pokémon for balance as the rock wobbles and shifts. Through his partially closed lids the boy sees Milotic trying to slither to safety, bruises and cuts lining its body from the loose rocks. The boy looks over to Wallace, only to be angered by his impassive expression. Wallace holds on to the railing behind him with both hands as he watches his struggling pokémon. A few more tiles break off the walls and shatter on the surface of the octagon, and Milotic struggles to evade them on the shifting floor. The quaking subsides suddenly, and Milotic’s head droops with relief. Its body is limp on the rock, and is lined with cuts of various lengths and sizes. The boy allows himself a smile.

Wallace frowns. “What? No comments? No snide remarks? All right then.” He reaches into his cape and pulls out a Full Restore. The boy’s smile vanishes.

“How many of those things do you have? And how does your cape hold them all?” the boy groans as Milotic’s cuts heal under the mist of the medicine.

Wallace chuckles. “My cape is specially designed with state-of-the-art inner pockets. It’s heavier than it looks, actually. Makes me wish I had a backpack like yours. Well… a dry one at least.” Wallace smirks at the wet lump by the boy’s feet.

Milotic, now fully healed, rises up to its full height once more. The boy meets its intelligent stare with a scowl.

“Why can’t you be like the Gym Leaders? Seriously! They use, like, one healing item then fend for themselves!”

Wallace simply shrugs. “Well, for one thing, they don’t have as much money as I do. They can’t afford to pay for the Gym, the wages for the trainers that they hire, and a year’s worth of medicine at the same time. The Elite Four can. Milotic use, Toxic.”

The last command catches the boy off guard, for Wallace utters it in nearly the same breath as the rest of the sentence. A mist of purple surrounds Swampert, and the pokémon emerges coughing and sputtering. In an instant, the boy reaches into his backpack and pulls out a wet Full Heal. He aims the nozzle at the gasping Swampert, who is doubled over and facing the edge of the arena. His coughing subsides as the boy pours the neon yellow liquid into the pokémon’s open mouth. Swampert rises to its feet, ready to battle once more.

“How’s that, Wallace? Swampert and I are gonna own! Swampert, use - ”

“Surf.”

“ NO! I didn’t get to finish my command! Jerk! Swampert, dodge it!”

But the foaming waves had already swept Swampert aside. They carried the struggling pokémon nearly over the edge of the arena, leaving him hanging on for dear life. Milotic appears satisfied. With a grim expression, the boy takes out a Pokéball. Just as Swampert is about to fall over the edge, the light of the Pokéball freezes his form and rushes it inside.

“Swampert is unable to battle. This concludes your Elite Four challenge. Better luck next time! Have a nice day.”

The boy stands there for a few moments, his face utterly expressionless. Twice, he seems as if he is about to say something, but his lips form no words. Finally, and with much kicking of his backpack, he turns and leaves.

“Oh, wait!” Wallace calls after him, and the boy stops. “You forgot to pay.” With the authority of a king, Wallace extends a thin arm to the boy, who looks down upon it as if it is an unsightly bug.

“My mistake,” the boy says through gritted teeth, withdrawing a few strips of money from his pocket. He sneezes onto the money, wipes his nose, then slaps it into Wallace's palm. Wallace calmly pockets the money, and the boy leaves without another word.

The door closes with a hair-raising screech, hiding the long hallway ahead. Wallace now stands alone, amid all the rubble and destruction he and his opponent have wreaked upon the arena. He turns away for a moment and begins to walk to the back door. He hesitates midway and smiles, flipping a Full Restore in his hands.

“Loser!” he whispers, and disappears behind the door.
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Old September 22nd, 2009 (03:36 PM).
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I didn't really wanna nit pick at grammar or anything (though I didn't really see anything). It's nice to review for fun.

Anyway, I really enjoyed this story. I've never read a battle scene that was this funny, to be honest. xD It makes me want to plop in Emerald and beat that blue-haired freak myself! And with a Flygon and Swampert, too. Keep up the good work<3
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Old September 22nd, 2009 (03:40 PM).
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I agree with the review for fun thing, actually Thanks for reading! I was inspired to write this after my 10th loss to Wallace, all because he kept Full Restoring his Pokemon. Glad you liked it!
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Old September 22nd, 2009 (10:28 PM). Edited September 22nd, 2009 by Bay Alexison.
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The door slides open with a hair-raising screech, revealing the final room; the room that few have ever seen with their own eyes. It is the room where his skills and fears will be put to the test, the room he has endured many long months of rigorous training to get to. And now he's finally here, at the turning point in his life. From here, fate could take him either to his glory, or to his demise. The outcome will decide whether his efforts had been worth it. Will he prevail? Or will he be ruthlessly tossed aside like many others who have gone through the exact same door, thinking the exact same thoughts?
The beginning paragraph I feel you repeated “the room” too much. Repetition can be used when well written, but I feel you didn’t do it effectively. You can still describe about the room without keep mentioning it straightforward.

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The door closes behind him with a bang, leaving no means of escape except for a door on the other side of the room. It is blocked by a tall smiling man. A wiry strand of blue hair sticks out from under his hat. His frame is hidden by a white cape that brushes the tips of his pointed shoes. It billows around him as he slowly descends down the stairs.
I think you could have gradually mention how Wallace looks like in a such in a few paragraphs and with action and emotion without cramming it all in one paragraph. We’ll most likely forget how he looks like and such.

This actually goes with each time you described the Pokemon too. You can just gradually describe their actions, emotions, how they look, etc. in chunks instead of cramming it all.

I actually like this one shot a lot, actually. Heh, like some of the ideas you have going on here. For instance, gym leaders not being paid much but Elites do. Makes sense actually considering you get more money by defeating the Elites. And oh gawds, I remember I bought some full restores and loads of hyper potions. I would run out of full restores so I would have to get the hyper potions. XD Ninetales not listening to the trainer is a funny scene too. Get back here you demon!

To tell the truth, canon wise, I don’t see Wallace like that. To me he’s more respectful to you., especially after able to save the world from Groudon and/or Kyogre's descruction (depends how you see it in each version). However, realistically I can see him like that. Yeah, I too would be cranky doing the same routine and staying in a room for nine hours.

Overall, love this lighthearted fic. Battles should be more like that. You could work on your description a bit, but for the most part it’s not that bad.

Off note: the hard part about Hoenn’s Elite Four is they command status changing attacks like Confuse Ray and Sing. Thus, I would have to use Full Heal or Full Restore (I get bored getting ashes for the flutes) :<
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Why is it that whenever someone mentions Wallace, I immediately think of former NASCAR star and current US Fidelis spokesman Rusty Wallace?

Ahem... About Wallace's entry speech: One could make the argument that he's completely out of character given his demeanor in the games. However, one could also argue that his refined nature is a mask and he's not the calm, suave person he leads others to believe he is. I'm not going to say one way or the other cause I don't know Wallace personally, only that he drove the #2 car for Roger Penske for many, many years (oops, that's Rusty Wallace again XD)

There were a few inconsistencies I noticed throughout. First the challenger complains that Wallace is cheating because he's using items but he later uses them himself. Is the kid too self absorbed to notice this? Besides, that's not cheating. Developing chemicals to force early evolution and injecting them into Pokemon mid-battle... THAT'S cheating. Yeah, I know you mentioned why, but it still seems... hypocritical to say the least.

Also, his Pokemon seem to be falling very quickly (i.e., one or two shots), which begs the question of how he got that far in the first place. Even when I had my character lose a battle (way back during my writing days), she'd at least get a few blows in edgewise and her Pokemon would last a few turns before succumbing. IIRC, that Contest battle you wrote for my fic was a lot more balanced, so it wasn't immediately apparent who would win. But even if you wanted Wallace to cream him and show he was full of epic fail, you don't want him to be a *total* pushover. Those type of trainers don't even make it past Roxanne.

Overall, though, I liked it. The dialogue between Wallace and the challenger was quite entertaining, an interesting change from the "serious business" that you would normally expect of a championship battle (not that I'd know, I copped out by giving my character a cold and skipping to the awards banquet). I really didn't care for the kid's attitude, but he got pwned, so it's all good And stressed out, bored-with-his-position Wallace is full of win.

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I'm stuck in this stupid room for nine hours each day! I have to repeat the same blasted phrase to every last soul who walks in here! It does things to your memory, you know, so it's perfectly normal to make a mistake.
Yeah, I fel your pain, Wallace. I don't know what's up with all the elaborate Champion speeches either. A simple, "Let's battle! Winner takes the championship!" would suffice."

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Great. Another electric type. Aspiring trainers are so unoriginal. Whatever happened to grass?
The Pokemon Company decided to give Grass half a billion other weaknesses, lol.
No, actually, I *did* alternate between Electrode and Bellossom when I took on Wallace in-game.

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That's actually the opposite of how things work in my story, where trainers are responsible for damages and lawyers like Larry 'The Knockout' Jones make their profits and obnoxious TV ads.

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“I DID NOT COME ALL THE WAY OVER HERE SO I CAN LOSE TO A SMIRKING TALL WEIRDO WITH FREAKING BLUE HAIR! BLUE!”
You know, Marge Simpson, Aoi Matsubara (from To Heart) and Yuan (from Tales of Symphonia) might want to have a word with this guy, lol.

Aside from a few things, I thought you did a good job here, especially working with characters with personalities much different from the cast from your main story.
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