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Old July 5th, 2011, 09:49 AM
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A country boy, Derrick Blakeson (age 15), and his friends start their own journeys, for their own reasons.

Derrick is using this as an excuse to try to find his 'missing' father, who disappeared way back when he was a toddler. This excuse, though, is one that requires entry into the Unovan League to have access to their searchin' resources. Therefore, he has to get all the badges.

Bianca "Belle" Lauray is going on her journey to prove to her sexist, drunkee of a father that she can make it in the world. She isn't necessarily needing to beat the league to prove, but rather get the badges.

Cheren "Rinnard" Rinlin is going to make his mother, a previous champion of the country proud. He is aiming for the league.

But not all follows accordingly for them, when a mysterious, shadowy being force them into his challenge of death, and an eco-terrorist group are thrown into their ways.
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The art gets better after the first three parts, to the point ya barely recognize it's mine, story-wise also. I stop anime-styled drawing around near the end of part three. Now, mostly realistic.
The comic parts are read right to left still. This is a comic+written Nuzlocke, so expect walls of text on the later pages.

Towns, Cities, and Routes are all renamed to areas here in Ohio. Here's a list:

Spoiler:

-Nuvema Town= Feedspring (based on a small little bunch of houses about fifteen minutes away from my house, only named Feed Springs by the church there)
-Route 1U= Seabreeze Hills (based on nothing really; slightly based on the road between Feed Springs and Deersville)
-Acumula= Dearlington (based on Deersville, the closest place actually known as a town)
-Route 2U= Dearlington Ridge Highway (Ohio Route 250+ a road to a big town named Scio)
-Straition City= Scian (Si-an) (based on a larger town named Scio, with cool resturaunt I used to go to when I used to go to the school there)
-More to come as they become important



Rules:

Basic rules, minus a small clause on gift and wild pokemon being counted as different catches, as this was a first attempted run.

Easy to read Smackjeeves mirror: Smackjeeves


Table of contents:
Part One-Starters
Part Two-Save the Prof.! Pt. 1
Part Three-Save the Prof.! Pt. 2
Part Four-"Who are ya, pops?"
Part Five-If I Die Young Part I | Music For These Three Mini Parts-WARNIN' COUNTRY MUSIC
Part Five-If I Die Young Part II
Part Five-If I Die Young Part III

There is no old pages anymore, so please skip a few pages if ya want to search through the thread. I had to make room on my Photobucket account. Started using DeviantArt to uploade everythin'.

Extras, fanart, trades, and etc.:
Spoiler:

Extras:
Spoiler:

Character sketch (BianBelle, Chili, Lenora, (Slightly masculine) Burgh, and Young Fennel (she's gonna be round that age on comic))

Oh, and random eye.


Mizi Gijinka (OLD AND BOUND TO BE REDONE)


Mizi Evolved-5000+ views pic


Countrystuck (another comic I am doing) crossed over with this nuzlocke.


No fanart yet. Not asking for any if you don't wanna draw it though :v

Art trades:
Spoiler:

Art trade with Goddess-Chachi (at the time she was Chikoru-sama or something like that.

My side of the trade:

Her side of the trade-Amazin' if I said myself.


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Old July 7th, 2011, 07:36 AM
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Well you have a decent drawing style, a bit messy and not-quite-there-yet if you know what I mean, but with a little more practice I can see you being absolutely fantastic!

The text could be larger in some bubbles, it gets hard to read occasionally.

Well, you've caught my interest a little.
You may want to work on your humour also, because it's a bit bland, to be honest.
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Old July 26th, 2011, 06:15 AM
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Sorry for bumpin this, (sorta) but I forgot to mention I have this on smackjeeves:Time to make a Change, a black version nuzlocke. I'm on the third chapter on there, so please stop by and comment.
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Old September 16th, 2011, 05:19 PM
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Heck with it, here's the most current Table of Contents:
Spoiler:

Chapter One: Introducing Mizi
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Chapter Two-One of a Clan

Chapter Three-Losses and Battles

Chapter Four-Undecided*
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Extra's
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Old November 10th, 2011, 09:34 PM
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Since you seem to be immersed in art, I am going to take the time to write up a bit of a critique for you so that you can (if you want) take my suggestion to look at your comic from another perspective.
It's decent so far (albeit I only read the first couple of posts,) but certain parts are unclear and confusing; for example, you don't show the pokemon getting kidnapped- it's just randomly in a cage. (There's a huge jump between page 7 and 8 and I can't follow it.) Other parts that are hard to follow include slightly misplaced text-blurbs and panels where I don't know which I need to read first. Or just some generally missplaced eye direction and composition. I would consider writing a script first before writing/ drawing the manga so you can hit all the story points directly and concisely. Other than that I would recommend that you use spell-check because some of your text is misspelled.

You can find some basic pointers here:
http://www.drawinghowtodraw.com/step...wing-tutorial/

I realize that this is not anime, but it and storyboarding all have the basics in common.


Hope that helps and I hope my comment doesn't deter you from making more art! Keep the comic pages coming!!! <3
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Old November 17th, 2011, 04:19 PM
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Thanks ma'am.
Yeah... at first, I didn't write a script (and, sadly, I guess 'coz of laziness, I sometimes don't now —_—; )
But thanks, its gotten better over the pages, and I'll check out those tutorials.
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Old November 19th, 2011, 10:38 PM
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Well, instead if doin' the SMART thing and finish another page, I drew a gajinka of Mizi:
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I'll draw the other two starters as gajinka later.

Oh, and I got an art tablet, if the picture shows (I hope)
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Old November 20th, 2011, 04:40 PM
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You should do rough thumbnails of the layouts first, see if that reads panel-wise. Then do your final draft with a clean sheet. It feels like you just draw as you go and only plan in your head. It really helps to plan on paper.
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Old November 28th, 2011, 05:48 AM
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There. I followed some of the tutorials. Hopefully, this page is better. Oh, and it's also made digitally Page 14-15 redone
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Old January 23rd, 2012, 03:16 AM
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So this is becoming a part-written run too. Now, I don't know what's allowed and what's not, but havin' two threads in two categories seems kinda stupid. Sorry if I'm breakin' a rule or somethin'.

Mizi evolved (Thanks for the 3000-5000+ combined views y'all!)
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Old January 23rd, 2012, 02:45 PM
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First off, I really like Miz as a character! It's probably my favorite of the group. I give props to you for being so dedicated with your comic - nice to see you still going strong with all these pages! :D

You're getting better at anatomy though I would still recommend practicing it, especially side and angular views, which seem to be one of your more prominent weak points. I definitely see improvement from your first few pages to your newer ones, though, so keep at it! :3 Your facial expressions are also getting a lot better. Just remember to keep in mind body proportions when you draw; I notice that you usually make hands very big in proportion to the head and so on.

Additionally, I have a tough time trying to figure out your backgrounds - they seem to be either a little simplistic or not there at all. On page 16 for example (the page about the sword), there is almost nothing included for a background but a single line in one panel so it's pretty difficult for me to visualize the scenario. All I really picture is a mass of empty space when it comes to the background.

That pretty much sums it up. Keep drawing and I look forward to more ~
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Old January 24th, 2012, 02:50 AM
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First off, I really like Miz as a character! It's probably my favorite of the group. I give props to you for being so dedicated with your comic - nice to see you still going strong with all these pages! :D
Thanks!
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You're getting better at anatomy though I would still recommend practicing it, especially side and angular views, which seem to be one of your more prominent weak points. I definitely see improvement from your first few pages to your newer ones, though, so keep at it! :3 Your facial expressions are also getting a lot better. Just remember to keep in mind body proportions when you draw; I notice that you usually make hands very big in proportion to the head and so on.
I just have a hard time drawin' hands. I just can't grasp on how to draw them And yeah, I agree with the side and angular problem. I'll look back at my guide about anatomy in a bit XD
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Additionally, I have a tough time trying to figure out your backgrounds - they seem to be either a little simplistic or not there at all. On page 16 for example (the page about the sword), there is almost nothing included for a background but a single line in one panel so it's pretty difficult for me to visualize the scenario. All I really picture is a mass of empty space when it comes to the background.
'coz I don't like drawin' backgrounds :\ but I'll try to put more effort into it. I stink at drawin' buildings and etc. Guess I'll go look up somethin' 'bout that too.
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Old March 30th, 2012, 04:11 PM
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Part Four Complete
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Done with it finally. I recently studied this one guide on color that was deviantart, so I started experimented with color at the end. Now, I'm gonna draw this one nuzlocke trade event thing with Chachiko-sama on DA , which is basically a crossover page. After that, I'll get startin' on part five.
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Old June 15th, 2012, 07:53 AM
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Part Five complete (long, and warning, blood violence, language, and regular violence)
Spoiler:
Music for this Part- WARNIN', Country Music



Notes about the note over the three parts in one.


Still onRoute 1 Seabreeze Hills, but I promise Part Six'll be about Accumula Dearlington
Homestuck HAMSTEAK reference because, well, because shut up. Shut up is why.
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I can draw a whole lot more now! I can't make no promises, but I think I can update once or twice a week, depending on what's going on this summer. So let's see how that works out.

This was all I had completely done at the time, and I thought it was presentable enough. Warning up for blood violence.
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Finally! Part Five over!
In truth, some explainin' needs to be done. Lilly was just killed by another Lillipup. But how boring would that be?
That Patrat that Belle had was that last surviving Patrat from that one Plasma member's attack on Part three. What? Me with continuity? :V
Accumula (though referred to on this as Dearlington (and Deersville on my gijinka comic)) and parts of Striation (or, known in-comic as Scian (Si-an)) will be in the next part or two. To speed up the pace. But Derrick's wounds from the dog attack will need to heal, right?

Oh, and I redid the OP, and cleaned up the useless post.
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