Birth of Legends (Rated PG-17)(OOC/SU thread)

[Nideous]

Supervegeta, that is fine. I said you could have another move, not that you had to.

Luigimario, I have a few issues with this SU. First is the personality. If he was generous and kind, those attributes don't disappear over night. And I have trouble believing that he would be so betrayed by fighting Absol he recognized that it would cause such a drastic personality shift. After all, the attempted drowning did not. And for that matter, just who were those Absol? How did he know them? And why would the Supernatural Tribe members try and drown him anyways? And just why did they leave the comfort of their own dimension to drown him in the sea when there are perfectly good lakes in their own dimension that would have worked just as well. And if he is known to start fights with other members of the tribe, then why would he follow orders to kill someone, especially if he doesn't want to do it?

I'm sorrry, there's just too much that doesn't make sense. Getting the right length takes a back seat to your SU making sense. So, you are Denied. Adress the issues I talked about, and feel free to repost, but as it is, I just can't accept this.

[ivysaur'swritersblock]

Name: Skypatter

Species: Ivysaur

Gender: Dude, Bro, Guy

Age: 15

Level: 20

Tribe: Forest

History: Skypatter was born and raised by a kind, loving mother, who was also an Ivysaur, deep inside the forest. His father, a Venusaur, was killed when he was still an egg, so he never knew him. His mother told him how his father had died while Skypatter was still quite young. There was a battle between the Forest and Mountain tribes, one of which ferocity had not been seen for a long time. The Forest Tribe was losing badly, so in order to save the survivors, friends, and anyone else, his father had to sacrifice himself for a way to let them escape. Skypatter played with other Pokemon of the tribe, and remained happy, with friends and family surrounding him.

After a few years, he was ready for training. It was intense under master Grovyle's harsh training regemine, but soon enough, he managed to get stronger. And stronger. And stronger yet. Because he trained throughout the years, he grew. It was a bright, summers morning like any other. The sky was clear, and the wind rustled the leaves, sending smells of the forest twirling around. Without warning, they attacked. The Mountain Tribe came from nowhere, and somehow, in all the chaos and confusion, his mother was gone. Skypatter's pain was never this great yet. Soon it merged with hatred, turning into anger. The Mountain Tribe had gone too far, and they were going to pay. After finding their location, he stopped at nothing to find her. Blasting people out of the way, he managed to locate her, but it was too late. Filled with rage, he blasted everything with one, enormous Solarbeam, creating a crater in the mountain, and causing the tribe to flee.

Now, he lives on as if nothing happened. With the occasional greeting from the Skarmory now circling over the forest, protecting it now and then, he did errands, got food, picked apples, berries and nothing has happened to change his life again. Yet.

Personality: Skypatter has a strange personality. He can be fun, smiles at the stupidest things, and laughs at almost every joke. He is pretty much the joker, and manages to keep that title. When he's hurt, he either retreats into his personal "shell" but otherwise, faces the problem with a head held up high. But when he's threatened with danger, he changes. It's like a whole other Ivysaur takes over him. He's dark, fast, and when angered, very, VERY aggressive. He once managed to destroy an entire battlefield.

Moves: Vine Whip
Razor Leaf
Bullet Seed
Solar Beam
Quick Attack
Synthesis

Other: Instead of square shapes on his head and body, Skypatter has circular patterns, that are very rare on any kind of Ivysaur, and his eyes are a deep sky blue.

(Totally didn't read enough of the thread. Posted this in the Non-ooc thread by accident)

[Nideous]

I'm assuming that the Grovyle you mentioned is not Elder Bornis, as he's a pretty nice guy, and his training methods are not really that harsh. On that basis, Skypatter is Accepted.

Edit: In my last post, I started things moving. Feel free to post on that! And you can feel free to control any of the NPCs I have listed, except Brink, Monart, and Fin. And the Elder Primes, or whatever title they gave themselves. :D

[Game Over1375]

I'm back on and- WOAH! How can so many people post SUs so quickly?!

Anyways, my post will be up in a bit.

[Nideous]

That's what happens during the night. :D And take all the time you need. :D

[Aquataris]

May I Reserve, are there spaces left?

[Nideous]

Sure thing. In truth... I'm not sure how many spaces I'm going to keep. Aquataris is Reserved.

And to everyone that reserved yesterday, you have five days from the time you reserved before they run out! Four days left now to get your SUs up.

[Game Over1375]

W00T! Posted! Decided to just do a simple introductory post.

[Nideous]

Yup, that's fine. After a few more posts I'll start some council stuff. :D

[Aquataris]

Name: Xentea

Species: Espeon

Gender: Male

Age: 20

Level: 40

Tribe: Supernatural

History: 19 Years ago a family of Espeons were living in the supernatural tribe, when the little Evee was 1 they were called out for a fight, and both died so he was taught by one of the elders, Elder Catalan, untill he was an Espeon, and he was Crown a warrior.
then one day when he was in the outside realm he spotted a Glaceon and liked her so he tried to spend as much time as he could with her untill,
most of the portals closed meaning this was
a strain on their friendship so he spent hours training trying to learn how to open another portal.

Personality: He is a strong and passionate person who was a very lovie person
but now he only shows that to his dear Glaceon to others he's a heartless murderer.
He fights the battle to only get stronger to open a portal,
his only Motivation is her, the Glaceon.
He feels strongly against Zecks Ideas, though who was he?
He is just a Physic Warrior who secretly loves a person who is the other side of the Galaxy.
He thinks he should stop the strain against the tribes, and he only wants Universal Peace, or atleast a way the Glaceon and him could be together in peace,
he thinks Zeck thinks that the only way they would be together would be in his and hers graves.

Moves: Psybeam, Confusion, Tackle, Shadow Ball.

Other: A scar down its left side of its snout.

RP Sample: Chris turned gently to the direction he will be going, He straightend and he walked through the corridors seeing the lush, soft, lime grass upon the Moistened Earth. He looked through the empty class rooms and found his room he sat and Adjusted it to the shape of the
silky, luxirous seat, he sat some papers onto his lap and he write on them for the next day's lesson, he gracfully jumped up and brang out his blue and silver Monocho 1891 Super Ex Ex and he flipped open the top and Dialed "678-995-6168" Bethany's Number "I would like to see Alex's Medical Profile." He croaked as his throat dried, he moved his hand towards his cup and pulled it towards him, he gently tipped it down his throat and the mouth moisten, he started walking towards the office

(Yeah Lately I've been forced to watch Romeo and Juilet and now I am trying to base this Pokémon as Romeo. Don't know why.)

[Nideous]

Um, ok then. Few problems. I'm not sure if you forgot or you just haven't gotten to it, but you need to add a personality as well. Second, I said the Supernatural Tribe was reclusive. So, shy would the leader of them go out to save one lowly Espeon? He's got plenty of stronger warriors, so he really wouldn't need to bother himself to save one infant Espeon. And also, how the heck could a family of espeons live underwater? And you do know that espeons hatch as little Eevees, right? That hasn't been changed. Adress these, and finish up your personality. I won't say you're accepted or denied or pending until you're finished. Just letting you know.

[MichaelaTheUchiha]

60 posts (61 now) already? Wow, Nideous. o.O

I would totally join, but I'm in a lot of RPs already. xD Most of which, haven't even started yet, lol.

[Nideous]

Well, Aquataris, as soon as you finish up, let me know. Do you have an idea how you want Xentea to act?

And Micheala, thanks for the compliment. And if you change your mind, I'll be here. XD

[Aquataris]

I edited it, for some reason I rewrite the History and Personality to be Romeo, just read it and you'll understand

[Nideous]

Aquataris, your personality is still a tad bit lacking when you take out the line breaks. Add just a tad bit more, for example, how does he feel about Zeck and his schemeing? Which elder trained him, and how does he feel about that? For now, you are Pending.

[Aquataris]

I added more and stuff what you asked have a look I seem to begin to like this character... Oh every time I say I like the character I either get denied or barely missing a deny.

[Nideous]

Zeck is the leader of the Supernatural Tribe. And Xentea seems to be a bit of a narcisist, if that's how you spell it. He seems to think everyone is trying to keep him and his love apart, when in reality they simply don't even know he exists. That's how it seems to be. Anyways, I digress, you are Accepted.

[Aquataris]

That's Exactly what I was aiming for Nidious! Well done! and Yay me!

[Nideous]

Heh, that's fine. And so you know, my name is NidEous, not NidIous. Though most everyone calls me Nido, though I'm not sure why... Anyways, I'm going to wait until a few more people post to move on. XD

[Aquataris]

Done My first post! What do you think?

[Megaman765]

Guess who? :D I'd like to reserve a spot for your RP :D

[Nideous]

Hm... A tad bit short for an introductory post, but it's fine.

And what's this? My stalker has shown up? XD Of course you are Reserved Megaman765.

[Game Over1375]

Originally Posted by Nideous

Heh, that's fine. And so you know, my name is NidEous, not NidIous. Though most everyone calls me Nido, though I'm not sure why... Anyways, I'm going to wait until a few more people post to move on. XD

... Really? Really? ... Really? We both know why everyone calls you that, and that's because I started it. XP

[ShinyDiamond]

Finally posted. Who should unknowingly find Geo? Should it be Zackla?

[Nideous]

You already said that Shiny. And I was thinking of making Razor be the one. That should be interesting. :D