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July 6th, 2005, 11:57 AM

my life, once so repetitive
so average, so boring
my eyes were shut, yet I saw everything.

But now, so slowly
the lid is eaten away; the norm is torn from under me
my eyes were shut; now I see everything.

I see the pain, the anguish
it flows all around me, washes over me
my eyes were shut; now I see this true society.

My body shows the same wounds
the scars mark me. We are all the same
my eyes were shut; now I see I am the same as them.

How can this be me, I am myself
But what I see is the same as what I view in the mirror
my eyes were shut, now I see we are all society

It is all so clear. We are all the same
For so long it has been this way, it is all so clear
My eyes were shut, now I see no one has an identity

My eyes were shut for so long
But now I know the true society
My eyes are shut, now I walk with my true identity

By: S. P. Webb


July 6th, 2005, 4:09 PM
Nice poem, on how us as individuals view ourselves in this twisted society that we live in I'm not sure if thats what you were trying to get across but just reading this poem reminded me on how everything that happens, we're suppose to conform to and its hard to be a "non-conformist".. ahh hope that wasn't too confusing ^^ but as for the poem it just seems like there is a bit of uneeded extra effort to getting a point across

But i still enjoyed it, nicely done ^^'

July 6th, 2005, 9:22 PM
Oooh, this is quite a neat poem. :3 To me it shows how everyone is different...yet the same. What I mean is that no one is perfect. We all have our own views and opinions about the world and the creatures in it. Yet when you look at the whole picture, you see that no one is truly alone. Everyone is the same, not just in body, but somewhat also in spirit. ^o^

Though that is also the part that kind of confused me. ><; You see, you said that everyone is the same...yet everyone is different, but no one has an identity. It does make some sense if you really think about it...but overall nice work Sithre. :33


July 6th, 2005, 10:01 PM

Yes the poem is going to be intrepted differently per person, but i would like it to just make people think.

July 6th, 2005, 11:23 PM
*claps hands* Well written.