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July 15th, 2005, 6:52 PM

I love you,
I need you
From my breath
Yours returned to me

I placed the noose around my neck
Stood upon the chair
Patiently I waited,
For you to kick it out

I want you,
Cant live without you
From my smile
Yours returned to me

Why wont you answer me?
Talk to me
Bring me down
And make this feel real

Standing there
Obviously plotting there
What to be done with this,
Ignorant fool

Laying there,
Phone in hand
Waiting for the familiar
Hearing all but your comfort

Broke without you,
Dying with you
Pulled by my want,
My need
Down from this noose around my neck

By: S. P. Webb

Chase Leader
July 15th, 2005, 10:00 PM
I get a good sense of emotion and feeling in this. However you focused more on suicide than you did your emotions. Keeping working at it, however its only ok.