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December 3rd, 2005, 7:49 AM
Now I dont care if it rhymes or not,so zip it........

Dark Light~

.Once the light has hit my heart,
i've realized the dark is here.The dark light is something weard,
but not to me but to you all.
My dark light is un sight, to realize my light you must realize.....
....realize who you are..who I am..
The dark light is inside, but if you dont take it out......
the light shall shiver to ultimate dark.The dark that will hurt, quiver and
cry.Take it out and exept who you are.Thats just who you are...
exept...the dark light..
Its who you are inside...and you shall be one day..the dark light itself...

December 3rd, 2005, 8:10 AM
Hi sister,wow its cool it expresses who u r inside..I realyy see through it....good job....

December 3rd, 2005, 8:58 AM
Nice work.If I was tro rate it I'll maybe give it an 8/10

December 3rd, 2005, 7:43 PM
I guess thats a good rating, but 4 me.....I give it a 10...I think the reason is because ....I know what it stands 4 and what it means.......

December 3rd, 2005, 7:44 PM
Yeah,I give it a 10 as well,if u know my sis very well.....u know what it means, and its a deep pasion....so yeah, great job....

December 20th, 2005, 7:45 AM
Yeah,I give it a 10 as well,if u know my sis very well.....u know what it means, and its a deep pasion....so yeah, great job....

Thanks it means 2 me a lot...And now I have 2 go and find a dark siggy pic. 4 my sig.

December 20th, 2005, 3:40 PM
It has a very powerful message there. ^_^
You're done a very good job, you just have to fix some grammarical errors. =D

December 21st, 2005, 5:24 PM
It has a very powerful message there. ^_^
You're done a very good job, you just have to fix some grammarical errors. =D

thanks ......but its not that I dont know spelling,but I was not in a good typing mood that day...I'll fix it later.....Thanks again..finally another person understands.

Midori Chi
December 21st, 2005, 6:36 PM
Hmm...Caroline is right. It has a few grammar errors, but it is good!
I can definetley understand it. It has a powerful meaning behind it.

8 out of 10

January 16th, 2006, 7:56 AM
Hehehe...I wasent having a good day..but this posr shall be the place were I keep my poetry....my next 1 is comming soon....

Midori Chi
January 16th, 2006, 9:39 AM
Oh? Okay. I can't wait to read your next one. ^^

March 16th, 2006, 11:36 AM
I'll post my next poem now...

When you left

When you left,
my hear shattered, as if my life was
coming to an end.

When you left,
my heart cried out to you, my friend.
But my cries were useless.

When you left,
I tried to hold my tears for you.
But my heart couldn't hold them in.

When you left,
I laid where I played and remembered
the old days...before you left.

When you left,
Oh, how I dreamed of our times
together. And now I know...losing
you was wrong.

When you left,
time was longer, happiness became shorter...

When you left,
my face became pale, my room
became dark and gloomy.

When you left,
I became lonely, and I felt
like crying inside.

When you left,
I wanted you to come back, and
I wanted to smile again.

When you left,
I realized that my life had no meaning,
and that you weren't coming back...

When you left,
I decided to leave myself, to reach
you beyond..Just know, I'm coming
my friend, and then I'll smile once again...

Midori Chi
March 16th, 2006, 11:43 AM

It's SOOOO good yet SSOOOOOOO sad! Very, very, good.
It shows great emotion as well. ^^ Keep it up! =D

March 16th, 2006, 12:45 PM
Wow, you finally posted that poem.
I remembered when u did it at school.
I almost cried its so sad. You do so many good poems sissy.^^
Good job.Bye!!

.: Kira Yamato :.
March 16th, 2006, 1:32 PM
OH MY GOD....your poems are very beutiful SP*, I really do like them alot....Iam crying, I don't cry much but you poems touch me so much.... the second one is...is so.....*leaves a note*
10/10 ^-^ keep up the good work PM me if you want to be friends ^^

March 17th, 2006, 7:15 PM
Hey sissy!!Ur poems are a hit!!^^
I also cried with the second one...
I cant wait for the next one sissy.

March 17th, 2006, 7:29 PM
Thanks and I think I already have another poem, and Kira Yamato I want 2 be your friend. Pm me sometime.

March 18th, 2006, 6:55 AM
Okaay!!Im looking forward 2 it....

March 18th, 2006, 7:01 AM
Sorry, my next poem's more about my favorite color....Purple....Sorry again.


As the wind comes through my hair
I see a different shade of color...
As the wind is known for being blue
To me, it's a shade of purple.....

Our eyes are supposed to see different colors
My eyes choose to see only one..
Only one color... purple..

As I was young, I loved the color
It was used in so many things:
crayons, flowers, bowls
There's so many shades of it...

But the one thing I love the most
Is the color I see in the wind
Although the color exists in objects
This I can only see...

The wind suddenly becomes smooth and cool
And changes from blue to purple..
When it blows, it cries to me
And then my heart becomes warm
I become happy inside
Because the wind cries to me
As it's happy to see me....

For as now, you should've known
That my favorite color and thing is purple..
For to me
Purple's who I am......

Maybe grammer errors..sorry..

March 18th, 2006, 7:07 AM
Its okay, its still really good.It expresses how much you love the color purple.
You love it so much just as much as how I love pink....^^

March 18th, 2006, 2:51 PM
Thanks for saying that sis..your always there for me.And I do love purple as much as you like pink....And im glad you like the poem.

.: Kira Yamato :.
March 19th, 2006, 9:34 AM
wow that is awsome ^^ keep it up ^^

Midori Chi
March 19th, 2006, 2:57 PM
Hmm..From what I can see, there doesn't seem to be any errors in spelling or grammar. Plus, the poetry itself is WONDERFUL! PLease write more. You're a good poet. ^^

April 11th, 2006, 2:12 PM
Hmm..From what I can see, there doesn't seem to be any errors in spelling or grammar. Plus, the poetry itself is WONDERFUL! PLease write more. You're a good poet. ^^
I did do this poem i'll be posting in the weekend..its about ..someone who misses her mother..
The title is ~mom~

April 11th, 2006, 5:33 PM
~Mom ~

Tonight i've realized that you're gone
Although I always really knew it
T tried to deny it everytime
Because I never wanted you to go, mom....

You're not being has made things different
I've realized that having you around was great
And that I miss you so much

After time passed by
I've prayed for you to come back
Mom I want you to know how much I love you

I've realize that the love of a mom is needed in my life
Oh, how I wish for you to be here
To see all i've accomplished

In my life today i've dome well
And I wish you were here to seeFor everything i've done is for you

Mom I wish to see you
Your eyes
Your hair
Your smile

I want to smell the frangrant of your perfume
Which i've gotten used to smell
Although I see eyes, hair, and smile of mothers
No one can compare to yours......

May 15th, 2006, 6:53 PM
Wow thats a nice poem..Its good for the time of day it is.. mothers day.
Its really good it shows how much you love your mom.

May 18th, 2006, 4:42 AM
yeah its so good.
Oh, got 2 go school time.

May 21st, 2006, 6:43 AM
thanks little sisters.
Im working on one about the moon.

May 27th, 2006, 2:18 PM
The moon? Cool sister!^^
I cant wait.

May 30th, 2006, 4:25 PM
heres a really short one but its just while I make a real one

Rain Above

The coldness of a drop
Is the sadness from inside
The feeling you feel when something bad is happening

The clouds turn black
Almost as when our hearts turrn dark
But all of this in my eyes is just one but confution

Rain Above comes down on us
And changes everything around
The trees move, the flowers bloom
But is the rain above truely good?

I guess as long as my hert wonders I shall never figure it out
But thats okay with me
The rain above shall guide me though...

May 31st, 2006, 5:42 AM
hello im new to your thread...so hi! XD
anways...i only saw a few erorrs but besides that i like it..its good...i also like the rain....

haha...keep it up!

May 31st, 2006, 4:39 PM
Welcome...heheh..its so funny.....i'll tell you later phantom>< hhehehe...............
but welcome..hehehe...............