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January 9th, 2006, 8:32 PM
Rating: None because it doesn't contain anything that would make a rating required

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...Note that this ish my first ficcy and ish all about some made-up charry, and
although containing materials that represent god, ish absolutely NOT true to religion. :\

The Story of Jimmmix
Chapter 1: The Creation

It was 6,000,000,000 years before the world existed, and God was feeling rather bored...
So he took some mercury (You know, the poisonous liquid metal) and molded it into a
small black ball with blue eyes. Then he brought it to life... But Satin was watching...
Satan: WHAT?! He made an entire speceis that quick?! Grrrrrrrrrrrr.............
Satin growled with jealousy as his eyes glowed an ominous red. He grabbed
some nearby mercury and molded a small black ball with red eyes.
Satan: Two can play at that game...
Satin grumbled some more, when suddenly an evil plan popped into his
head. "I'll bring this thing to life and make it destroy God" he thought.
Satan: Enjoy your afterlife, god... WHILE YOU CAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:badsmile: MUHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!

So whaddaya think:classic: ? I'm gonna add the next chapter soon.;)

January 10th, 2006, 12:08 PM
*scratches the back of neck*Hm...to be honest, you could've made it a bit longer. If you mean to change [email protected]'s name then that's understandable. If seemed a bit rushed to me...right now, I'd give it a 4.5/10. Keep on trucking my friend!


January 10th, 2006, 4:05 PM
...Yeah, sorry about that, I made a book of it for writing class, and in that book, Satan
was actually God's shadow, so I called him Dark God, and the teachers didn't give us a very
long journal to write our fiction in, so I just made a chapter per page, and this ficcy is a rewrite of the book. XD
Well this is the next chapter...

Chapter 2: Shrinker Madness
"God: Hmmm... What's a good name for this thing...?
I know! How about Jimmix?!"
Jimmix: O.K., yeah, I'm good with that.
It was then when God accidentally dropped Jimmix into a device God developed to
alter the size of new species. It malfunctioned, and Jimmix was shrunk to "Super
Small", even though it was set to "So large it's not even funny o_O".
It was then that Jimmix was surrounded by a blue light and began to disappear!!!!!
God: "What's happening?!
Jimmix: "I don't know! You're the expert! What
is happening?!"
Anyway, I wonder what's happening with Dark God?
I think I'll take a look.
Dark God: "Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm....
Just as I thought. Hop into the size thingy on my table, my dear slave..."
Evil Jimmix: "Yes... Master..."
Suddenly, Dark Jimmix also began to disappear!