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Lady Akita
January 25th, 2006, 4:52 PM
It's a really, strange and childish poem. I guess..not my type at all..
What I'm trying to say is, sometimes it's easier being young and innocent. But I so totally wish I was like that. Then again, you'd all consider me a n00b.

At night, the sky, a shining darkness above
The moon, so bright, pose light to the world
Just one little being still sitting on her roof
Staring to the horizon above, looking for something new
On the internet, the next day, a boy receives a message
He reads, and replys, using his computer keys
The fast typer, he calls himself, finds each letter with ease
One only he'd struggle with, one mastered trickily
Looking to the television, she recognizes a show
The actor flashes his white teeth, in front of her screen
Happily, he continues to talk, to someone else
While she walks away, and heads toward her bedroom
Now, on this day, she picks up her paintbrush
Dabbs some yellow paint, and heads toward the easel
She slowly remembers a little memory, far into the past
As she covers the outline, upon the blackened canvas
She lives to forget, all memories past
But the ways of the star, shall never be far
On her last day as she walks her dog in the park
The last thing she would ever say,

'Look up when it is dark..'

February 4th, 2006, 12:45 PM
wow.....Thats such a great poem!^_^ It's really good. Sometimes its confusing but not alot. But it would be good if it was really clear to understand.

Midori Chi
February 5th, 2006, 10:36 AM
Yeah. This is a good narrative poem. ^^
Keep up the good work, kay? XD

code zerro the deluge
February 6th, 2006, 2:03 PM
good job LA. I liked it. keep it up.