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March 21st, 2006, 7:47 PM
Inspired by my very first roller coaster ride....(eons ago)


Here I am, strapped inside the car
Looking out at the track ahead of me
In just a few moments, we'll be moving very quick
So many emotions are welling up inside of me now,
Excitement, fear, and anticipation...

I've seen so many of them at other theme parks and on TV
In all their lightning fast, corkscrew looping glory;
But I have never ridden one of these mighty rides myself
That's about to change very shortly.

After what seems like an eternity of waiting
The train finally rumbles out of the station
My mom, dad and sister all wave goodbye
As I begin my trial by speed

We round a turn, then connect with the lift
And begin climbing up into the sky
I'm already nervous, I don't need to be reminded
That the dip we are climbing is The Big One

We're approaching the top, I can see the whole park
It stretches out as far as the eye can see
The view is so beautiful up here at the peak,
But I can only enjoy it for three seconds!

As the train hurtles down at sixty miles an hour
I hear many people behind me screaming
My stomach feels like it's up inside my throat
We're going so fast, I have to be dreaming!

Twisting, looping, more dips, and turning
I'm being jerked about all the while
I'm not screaming like the other riders, I'm actually laughing!
To the point where tears are leaking from my eyes!

Finally, we slow down and we coast to a stop
My head is still spinning as I climb from the car
As my family surrounds me and asks how it went
My answer is: Can we do it again?

March 26th, 2006, 7:35 AM
That was a very nostolgic poem. I appreciate you sharing that memory with us. But, normally when one writes a poem about a light-hearted experience, there tends to be rhyme, which I was slightly dissapointed there was not. It's not a terrible thing, just something I think would make your poem better!

March 26th, 2006, 7:56 AM
I've been told to use rhyme sparingly, so that's why there's almost no rhyme in there.