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July 25th, 2006, 9:41 PM
I was a juvenile,
It was dark,
A man came after me,
In a park,
He grabbed me,
Took off my pants,
He told me he loved me,
After beating me to a pulp,
I laid there so sad so slain,
Feeling worthless,
lying in the rain,
tears come so easy,
after you lost it,
i thought id save myself,
but i was robbed.

July 28th, 2006, 8:44 AM
Umm its good..Its an interesting poem,never ever have I seen someone use thats topic.You have an unique imagination.

July 29th, 2006, 2:51 PM
It was pretty thought provoking, yet straightforward at the same time. You demonstrate a touchy experience with the poetry, and I like that emotion! Just be aware of providing some structure and remember not to ramble when writing poetry.

Anywayz, a nice feel to it, neh neh~ :3

-Mikuru ♥