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September 17th, 2006, 12:07 PM
Just a friendship poem. I would like comments and critisism to be given.

Love and deep devotion
connected heart to heart
trust and understanding
secure from very start

Smiles are shared together
as are the salty tears
bonds that keep on growing
stronger through the years

Tender hugs and love
when everything seems wrong
caring when we stumble
helping us along

When life is full of heartache
days seem dark and gray
giving hope and promise
friends will light the way

Through storms and cloudy weather
dawn or setting sun
friends will stand beside us
side by side, as one

Sharing tears and laughter
inner thoughts and dreams
acceptance without judgement
building self-esteem

When life has formed big puddles
your world comes tumbling down
reaching out with kindness
they'll always stick around

Friends are special people
they give us wings to fly
soft kisses from the Angel's
blown down from the sky

September 18th, 2006, 4:16 PM
Wow, that was so good *wipes tears*. Well I can't think of much to critique on except the fact that maybe punctuation was needed at the end of each verse.

Great job though, you really do know how to write a poem ;D.

September 19th, 2006, 5:54 PM
*claps* Oi.. Ryan.. I am starting to get jealous of your skills XD! And no matter how hard I look, the only crits I can find is the punctuation problem, as stated above. *pulls on your sleeve* I want your talent. .__.

Krafty Quill
October 2nd, 2006, 10:34 AM
Not bad. Nice of you to share your optimstic view of what a friend is. The message is plausible, indeed, myesh! ^^

Write on, I say, write on! D: