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March 11th, 2007, 4:39 PM
I went to Louisville today for a bowling tournament and on the way home I was really bored, so I started writing a poem from Edward Elric's point of view in Fullmetal Alchemist. It has a type of rhythm and my mom said it was good...so...review please? ^^;

Unforgetable Sin

I...ruined his life.
My own flesh and blood.
I took his life from him.
And yet, I still have mine.

I committed a horrible sin,
My own decision
I cannot take it back.
And yet, I beg your forgiveness.

Please, don't hate me, Brother mine.
I know I made a horrible error.
One that is truly unforgivable
But I plead with you.
Please forgive me.

I realize there isn't anything I can do.
My own human hands are too weak.
I can never take it back.
And yet, I wish you'd still love me.

I will do all I can retribute.
My body will be yours to use.
I will do everything in my power.
And yet, it might not be enough.

Please, don't hate me, younger brother.
I realize the suffering I caused.
One that is uneraseable.
But I beg of you...
Please forgive me...

Yep, that's about it, please review. ^^;