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    I log on, and...

    We're glad you like it!! :D
    Posted April 1st, 2019 at 5:55 AM by erik destler erik destler is online now
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    Ace Trainer Slash's Avatar

    Making a ROM Hack.

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    It contains wonderful and helpful posts. Keep up the good work!
    slope
    Thanks! :)
    Posted January 18th, 2019 at 2:58 AM by Ace Trainer Slash Ace Trainer Slash is offline
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    My writing, how can I improve?

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    Originally Posted by mgriffin View Comment
    Not related to the writing inside the spoiler, but I came from today's post ("Making a ROM Hack.") and one thing I'd recommend is using paragraphs in your blog posts! I'm glad you're having fun making ROM hacks, but it was very hard to read everything you wrote there because it's so long, and I saw you do it here too.

    Anyway, comments about your writing:

    You change tenses in this sentence. You probably mean: "We first find them in the wild, beat them until near death, and preserve them". But to be honest this is my least favorite sentence, I think if you want your villain to be menacing you would have more success only implying what horrible things happen to the Pokémon they capture.

    I also think you could find a better way to have the villain threaten the protagonist. Because you later describe how faces are stitched onto Pokémon, maybe you could go with something like "I recommend you leave—child—unless you'd like to be part of my next experiment…"

    It's just my opinion, but from what you've written I think your character is ominous and unsettling, but he reminds me more of those villains who are eerily calm and collected while they perform horrific acts of violence, and that's where I would want to make all the horror come from.

    It would also help if you used quotation marks around the antagonist's speech.
    Pardon me for the late reply. I'm grateful for the advice you've given me, this entire idea is kinda newish
    to me, and some things I've mentioned just don't go well together. :D Like, even looking at it now, the entire concept seems kinda edgy, and somewhat unrealistic, but now, since my other hack is turning into a smaller project, this new one might overtake it, and then I can think of more complex, and respond towards darker tones more appropriately.

    I've seen other hackers and fan game creators do this before, I thought it would be interesting to take a serious approach to a series like Pokemon. If I'm to be honest, the piece of dialogue I gave was just letting out ideas, and would be perhaps something an admin of my evil team would say. Even then, thanks for critiquing my writing, I've taken writing to more serious approaches before, but I'm looking at it now, I can apply unsettling tones to minor characters to set a mood, and with the primary antagonist, make him more of a simple character, out of contrast.
    Posted January 17th, 2019 at 9:34 PM by Ace Trainer Slash Ace Trainer Slash is offline
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    My writing, how can I improve?

    Not related to the writing inside the spoiler, but I came from today's post ("Making a ROM Hack.") and one thing I'd recommend is using paragraphs in your blog posts! I'm glad you're having fun making ROM hacks, but it was very hard to read everything you wrote there because it's so long, and I saw you do it here too.

    Anyway, comments about your writing:
    Quote:
    This is where we keep our test subjects. We first find them in the wild, beating them until near death, and preserve them!
    You change tenses in this sentence. You probably mean: "We first find them in the wild, beat them until near death, and preserve them". But to be honest this is my least favorite sentence, I think if you want your villain to be menacing you would have more success only implying what horrible things happen to the Pokémon they capture.

    I also think you could find a better way to have the villain threaten the protagonist. Because you later describe how faces are stitched onto Pokémon, maybe you could go with something like "I recommend you leave—child—unless you'd like to be part of my next experiment…"

    It's just my opinion, but from what you've written I think your character is ominous and unsettling, but he reminds me more of those villains who are eerily calm and collected while they perform horrific acts of violence, and that's where I would want to make all the horror come from.

    It would also help if you used quotation marks around the antagonist's speech.
    Posted January 8th, 2019 at 2:17 PM by mgriffin mgriffin is online now
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    My writing, how can I improve?

    My writing, how can I improve?
    Posted October 15th, 2018 at 6:39 AM by hoangnganvy1993 hoangnganvy1993 is offline
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    Ace Trainer Slash's Avatar

    Spriting is fun!

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    Fan made shinies are always a blast to see. The real ones can be real disappointing sometimes.

    I dig purple Queen here
    In my opinion, I really like to see how I can improve on things, and how their result can make an impact on opinions, its an interesting experience. :)

    Btw, Thankyou, I'm glad you like Nidoqueen. :) If you wish, you can use it, and any other shiny in your hacks (If you ROM Hack) if it suits you so. :)
    Posted August 16th, 2018 at 1:03 AM by Ace Trainer Slash Ace Trainer Slash is offline
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    Spriting is fun!

    Fan made shinies are always a blast to see. The real ones can be real disappointing sometimes.

    I dig purple Queen here
    Posted August 16th, 2018 at 12:57 AM by Yotes Yotes is offline
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    Video Games, and myself.

    It's actually really cool, how there IS a video game somewhere that suits even the hardest to please. :)

    With competitive gaming, I guess it's practice that I need, and since like in every game, I love the low tier, I guess I just need the practice to use characters such as King Dedede in Smash 4. :D Practice can also concern anything else, if someone practices enough, they can master whatever they wish, if someone however simply has a disadvantage in something they wish to get better at, its the effort that shines. :D
    Posted August 9th, 2018 at 2:59 PM by Ace Trainer Slash Ace Trainer Slash is offline
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    Video Games, and myself.

    Video games really are for everyone. Someplace somewhere theres always a game a particular person would like. Usually finding that game and getting your hands on it is the hard part.

    Don't worry too much about competitive gaming because not everybody's built for it. I mean, I like to swim, but I wont be winning any races anytime soon.
    Posted August 9th, 2018 at 10:03 AM by Yotes Yotes is offline