Hahah just take some time and think it through a little more
GP is usually pretty picky with the SU's in his rps... Cirrus is one of the best SU writers... Skymin is really good too, and Elite likes teaching newbies so if you wanna talk to them i could link you to their profiles
but considering youre 13 and that was your first not bad :p if you need any pointers ask anyone down at the RPC were all nice people... except for me ;)