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Conversation Between Lucifer-san and Bardothren
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  1. Bardothren
    January 9th, 2016 6:36 AM
    Bardothren
    Sure, I'll look into it sometime today.
  2. Lucifer-san
    January 8th, 2016 10:19 PM
    Lucifer-san
    Whenever you get a chance, would you be willing to do a review for my new story Incision? I'd like to get a bit of feedback before I decide what I want to do next.
  3. Bardothren
    December 1st, 2015 3:34 PM
    Bardothren
    Happy Birthday!
  4. Lucifer-san
    July 23rd, 2015 6:19 PM
    Lucifer-san
    Cool, thanks a lot man.
  5. Bardothren
    July 23rd, 2015 6:19 PM
    Bardothren
    Perhaps. I don't like to rip apart other peoples' work, but I try to do my best to point out flaws and ways to improve. I'm glad you found it instructive. I probably won't take a look at your other chapters for a while, since I'm planning on reviewing other works, but I'll remember to check back next month.
  6. Lucifer-san
    July 23rd, 2015 6:12 PM
    Lucifer-san
    You really ripped it to pieces, huh? Jokes aside, thanks for the review and looking at what you said I can see where things get rather confusing. I blame it on my lack of description for characters and in general, guess I sort of expected people to know about the world before they read which is an unfair assumption on my part. While I work on fixing up Chapter 1, when you get a chance would you be willing to review the other 2 Chapters? I feel as if they're better, in terms of a cutdown on the stuff you listed and are somewhat better explained, but a second opinion is always nice.
  7. Lucifer-san
    July 23rd, 2015 12:32 AM
    Lucifer-san
    Alright, no worries here. I know extenuating circumstances can pop up, take your time.
  8. Bardothren
    July 22nd, 2015 8:31 PM
    Bardothren
    I've been a touch busy the past few days. I'll be sure to take a look tomorrow.
  9. Lucifer-san
    July 22nd, 2015 8:17 PM
    Lucifer-san
  10. Bardothren
    July 20th, 2015 8:46 PM
    Bardothren
    Sure, I'll take a look.
  11. Lucifer-san
    July 20th, 2015 7:49 PM
    Lucifer-san
    If you would be so kind to go and review my latest story done, The Unsure Third Path, I'd be very appreciative. Just want to get a bit of feedback on the story so far.
  12. Lucifer-san
    May 21st, 2015 1:32 PM
    Lucifer-san
    Thanks for the review/critique session, I see what you mean with my writing being a bit overly wordy I suppose. Quite a bit of people say that actually, though it still seems to be a problem I guess lol. Maybe I might post another short story hopefully I'll get better as time goes on.