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Conversation Between Astinus and Unown Seer

Conversation Between Astinus and Unown Seer
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  1. Unown Seer
    December 31st, 2017 2:22 AM
    Unown Seer
    Chapter 7 is up.
  2. Unown Seer
    November 23rd, 2017 8:05 PM
    Unown Seer
    I've just realized that you and Antoshi are different people. For some reason your vaguely similar user names confused me, which is why I thought you're familiar with Beth Pavell.

    Have you written a fanfic before?
  3. Unown Seer
    November 23rd, 2017 5:52 PM
    Unown Seer
    https://forums.bulbagarden.net/index.php?threads/reverberations-of-time.243194/#post-6376677

    I am not saying that none of it is constructive, but his advice, if you can call it that, is pretty vague. Here is how I read the review:

    "Your story is juvenile, so I don't like it. But hey, even Harry Potter is juvenile."
    "The kids are the adults and vice-versa." (Really now?)
    "There is a lot of flatness and not enough world building. I won't get into specifics, though."
    "Ernest is obnoxious, but that's pretty fitting for a homeschooled kid. That doesn't mean that the reader has to like it. Also, no way is he 12."
    "Even Kris is nothing to brag about, but maybe it was the stripped-down narrative that bothered me."

    Several users there tend to be negative, too. They probably think that brutal honesty is the best way to help someone, but that's a falsehood.
  4. Astinus
    November 23rd, 2017 5:39 PM
    Astinus
    Where was that posted? I want to see the whole comment from him before making too quick of a judgement about it. If he just said that your story is childish and your protagonists are obnoxious without saying how you can improve, then that's not constructive criticism. That's just plain criticism, and shouldn't be allowed (or listened to.)
  5. Unown Seer
    November 23rd, 2017 3:23 PM
    Unown Seer
    What's your opinion of Beth Pavell? He called my story juvenile and my protagonists obnoxious (borderline for Kris). It's hard to take that kind of attitude as constructive criticism.
  6. Unown Seer
    November 23rd, 2017 1:18 AM
    Unown Seer
    Chapter 6 is up.
  7. Unown Seer
    October 27th, 2017 10:50 PM
    Unown Seer
    No problem.
  8. Astinus
    October 27th, 2017 6:23 PM
    Astinus
    I'll take a look when I have a chance. It'll just be a few days since work will keep me busy over the weekend!
  9. Unown Seer
    October 27th, 2017 12:25 PM
    Unown Seer
    Chapter 4 is up.
  10. Unown Seer
    October 24th, 2017 5:41 AM
    Unown Seer
    Thanks for your comments on the first few chapters of Reverberations of Time. I'm curious to know if you find Chapter 3 an improvement over Chapter 1.

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