Conversation Between DassenSupes and Lash
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June 27th, 2009 2:11 AMLashHey, I posted the fic I've been working on :D
Pokemon - HeartGold and SoulSilver Adventure!
Hope you enjoy it, I worked hard on it. -
June 24th, 2009 6:26 PMLashNice.
Though you said your hands were a little sore, I hope you don't shorten the chapters up in the future. You don't skimp on the details, which makes the story more desirable. -
June 24th, 2009 4:56 PMDassenSupesA bit over 6000
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June 24th, 2009 1:57 PMLashThat seems like a fair break, especially considering how much you write.
How many words were in that last chapter? I would check, but Microsoft Word is acting up, haha -
June 24th, 2009 7:07 AMDassenSupesThanks very much. Just continue to read the clues I drop into the story. Anyway, don't expect the next chapter for a bit, my hands are actually starting to get sore. I'm going to extend that short story tie in, and then Im going to take a break for a day or two, maybe three.
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June 24th, 2009 1:18 AMLashDefinitely my favorite chapter to date. The timing in the chapter from the beginning, to the Pikachu run in, and the Hypno battle was perfectly executed. I especially liked the circumstances for Metapod and Kakuna evolutions. How Psyduck was awake the entire chapter, and how we finally didn't get to know why until the main battle was superb. Applause shall be given, as that was a kickass chapter.
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June 23rd, 2009 11:55 PMDassenSupesfixed it
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June 23rd, 2009 10:55 PMLashHoly hell. I don't know if this was intentional, but did you notice that the third chapter is a wall of text? Did your enter key like break or something?
Nevertheless, I look forward to reading it. -
June 21st, 2009 4:44 PMDassenSupesIndeed.
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June 21st, 2009 4:33 PMLashNo problem. And, can't wait, I'm sure it will be good.
Chapter three after that with Viridian Forest, right? -
June 21st, 2009 4:18 PMDassenSupesThank you very much for your kindness. I'll be posting a short story tie in soon, so stay tuned.
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June 21st, 2009 3:59 PMLashWell, I'm not too good at reviews, but I'll do my best.
Overall, a good chapter. I forgot if I've mentioned this, but I like the move you made by having different starters, away from the cliche. Anyways, that made for a better battle against the Trainer and his Machop. I only noticed a couple spelling errors, but I didn't notice any sentence errors. If there is, I'd have to read through it again, which I wouldn't mind.
I like how full your chapters are too. Shortening them is something I would not recommend. If they were shorter, the chapters wouldn't be as full. I guess what I'm trying to say is, you have a good balance on chapter length. They're just right.
edit: Yeah, like I said, I suck ass with reviews XD
Anyways, I read what you said in the FFL, about 'deciding if its worth keeping up with'. If I wasn't a fan of the story, I'd still say yeah. Anyone who puts as much effort as you do into a chapter deserves the recognition for the chapters he/she writes.
So yeah, definitely worth keeping up with :p -
June 21st, 2009 3:30 AMDassenSupesIn any case,I'll be happy to see the full review. Later.
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June 21st, 2009 3:19 AMDassenSupesIt's no big spoiler. E4.
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June 21st, 2009 3:16 AMLashCan't wait.
Another thing I can't wait for, the first gym battle. That ought to make for a good match, especially for Blue if he doesn't catch any Pokemon with a type advantage.
Haha, I would ask if you're going to do the game style of hero VS E4, or bracket/tournament style, but that would probably be a major spoiler, wouldn't it?


