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March 5th, 2009 2:06 PMSpectacular HeroI do put effort I practically kill myself it's not my fault PEOPLE think they can boss me around all the time, I'll take advices but not bossing if they think they can write a better story then let them write them...now I'm tire of this conversation so let's just say you won AGAIN
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March 5th, 2009 11:01 AMMisheard Whisper"They're", "their" and "there" were just examples. Yes, I know all fics have errors. What I'm saying is that yours have an awful lot, and you're making no apparent effort to correct them. I can't put it any blunter than that.
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March 5th, 2009 3:15 AMSpectacular HeroSince when are you this uptight and like I said most of the greatest fics here have some small eror and I know the difference between "Their" "They're" and "There"
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March 4th, 2009 10:04 PMMisheard WhisperDude, you're not getting me. You don't write for yourself, you write for an audience, and you need to remember that! If your fic is unintelligible, people will just find something else. It's not just you. You post your story for other people's entertainment, and right now, it's not entertaining me, because I'm having to wade through an ocean of painfully awkward syntax to decipher each line before moving on.
People want easy reads. Not easy, plot-wise (Readers love a good quagmire of a plot, with tons of twists and turns), but surface-wise. It's as simple as capitalising where capitalising is needed, putting periods where they should be, spelling common words right (spelling "unintelligible" as "unintelligable" is understandable, for instance, but getting "their", "they're" and "there" confused is not), and rereading your sentences so that they flow comfortably and smoothly. Don't forget that your whole story needs to flow nicely, too; all the bits and bobs need to interweave, join together and meld neatly into a work of art.
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March 4th, 2009 7:30 PMSpectacular HeroDUDE what do you want me to do I'm just fourteen years old and I'm not a perfect writer man no one IS you're trying to get someone that's still learning that didn't even really care about grammare till six months ago to suck it up and write like a pro
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March 4th, 2009 7:27 PMMisheard WhisperExcuses. I swear, I'm not reviewing another fic if I can see ten mistakes just by glancing at it.
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March 4th, 2009 7:22 PMSpectacular HeroHEY, I resent that, I'm still freaking learning and not even the best writer its perfect it's not like I do them or purpose and it's not like if I use abbriviations or anything
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March 4th, 2009 7:21 PMMisheard WhisperI'll read a fic of yours when you can show me one with no horrible grammar errors.
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March 4th, 2009 3:55 PMSpectacular Heroso can you read it pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
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March 3rd, 2009 7:52 PMSpectacular HeroYeah srry about the nerdy comment, guess I'm a little over my head right now. Anyways I posted my first fic here, it's not a Pokemon fic is based off this anime I've been reading called DNAngel basically what my avatar's based off point is you don't need to see the anime to read my fic so if you want just go to the other writing section in the forums and you'll find it.
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March 3rd, 2009 7:39 PMMisheard WhisperThat sounds about right. And the reason I don't know that isn't because I'm nerdy. It's because in NZ, we use kilometres, which are a thousand metres each. Standard tracks are 400m around here, too, but meh.
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March 3rd, 2009 7:17 PMSpectacular HeroMan, you are a little nerdy but I was just like that a few months ago, anyway a mile is four laps each laps has four quarters each quarter is one hundred meters I think and each lap is a quarter of a mile
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March 3rd, 2009 7:15 PMMisheard WhisperYeah but I don't know how long a lap is. I assume it's a quarter of a mile, but I still don't know how long that is comparitively.
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March 3rd, 2009 7:13 PMSpectacular HeroYou really don't know miles, that's four laps which is a lot if you're just starting running it normally takes me two minutes to run one lap, but I did on lap in less than ninety seconds
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March 3rd, 2009 7:04 PMMisheard WhisperI don't know miles, but sounds OK.

