not really, he just said the first version needed more action, and i agreed with him. by version, im speaking about chapter 2. i like how chapter 1 was written. here, how bout i PM it to you and you can give me your opinion? and btw, nice video on your profile. :)
i finished chapter 2 of my story and PM'd it to MRAS. lol, i actually ended up rewriting it, the first version didnt have much action, and it was a lil boring. MRAS cant complain about this version, tho XD
pretty good. im working on getting my third star on my trainer card in heart gold. i have an 83 streak win at the moment. several times i've battled a NPC that has a [email protected], regirock/steel/ice, and a suicune/entei/raikou O_o