Conversation Between Project. and Skymin
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  1. Skymin
    September 29th, 2010 10:20 PM
    Skymin
    Oh, and I forgot, you don't have a separate part for your pokemon yet. Unless you haven't finished?
  2. Skymin
    September 29th, 2010 10:18 PM
    Skymin
    Okay, good, I just have a few issues before I accept:
    I hope you understand that having a rock type Beedrill refrains it from having any Bug Type capabilites? And also it won't be able to fly unless you have some kind of powerful wing structure built onto it.
    Your writing itself is fine, I just have an issue with the structure and spacing. The way I see your SU, it's hard to read without proper paragraphing. At least a one line space between each section. And the same with your history, a new line after each kind of point made would be nice as apposed to stuffing it all together.

    Sorry if I'm a little blunt. But if you can fix that up, welcome aboard. :D