Perhaps give advice about the sentence structure. Yes, you don't want to be a snob, but you want to have the best RPers you can for your RP. He does seem to be new at PC, but that doesn't mean you can't help him out and give him advice. Maybe tell him about his sentence structure and give him hints as to how to make them better? Either that, or wait for another (better) SU. I think two more people held interest in the RP, although I could be wrong.
Just checked it out, you were right in what you were saying about the shadow clone jutsu. I've had a look through the edited SU and can't see any other canonity problems. Slightly concerned about the sentence structure etc., but I don't want to be too much of a snob. Your thoughts?
I'm currently creating a Jounin for the teams (Miharu Mizushima) and I'm also compiling a list of Jutsus that Miharu knows. I will finish the History and Personality and Sample Text by the end of today, but I may not finish the list of jutsus. Is that alright?
Also, if you do have trouble with the squads, I can take one of them. I am, obviously, a huge fan of Naruto and I do know all of the mechanics and stuff already. xD I could quite possibly create a jounin by Tuesday. You don't have to say yes. xD